It's been a long day, but at last, all the checkups are done! Seriously, sometimes the young ones are just pushy with their wants and while sometimes its endearing today was just plain annoying.
First, they woke me up early and didn't let me eat breakfast, for some obscure reason I'm sure. Then hours upon hours of tedious medical stuff! They took samples, made me say 'ah' so they could check my mouth and throat, and one tried to get a bit too close to my rear with some strange looking thing. I didn't let her get close.
Then made me do some exercise, like running on a treadmill and pushing some machines. I broke the pushing one. It was pretty and made funny noises. I like funny noises, like the ones made by the medical staff after breaking the machine. I kinda felt pretty bad, but at least they can repair it… Probably, at least.
Luckily they let me eat halfway through the tests, but I was so hungry I ate the plates! And part of the table. Apparently, they liked that and urged me to eat most of the table so they could study 'how I could even function'. Their words, not mine.
Wood isn't very tasty but mixed with the other things it was... Well, it was food so I'm okay with that. That was followed by what I could only call as a free buffet of tiny samples of everything they managed to get their hooves on. I think they expected something a bit more impressive than a belch when they brought some radioactive samples to the remains of the table… or maybe they thought I wouldn’t be able to eat them at all since its pretty bad for any kind of life, but honestly… I think they don’t know how planets are born and just how radioactive a young planet can truly be… I’m not into books and I’m feeling inclined to ask my son for some as a gift to these little ponies…. I think I’m rambling…
I had to say that I felt quite full and had to ask them to stop bringing things for me to eat, but that didn’t stop the examinations and being swarmed with multiple medical sensors. At least this time were a bit more careful when asking for some more samples. I think they want to see if I get sick for eating everything. Been there, done that...
After the gruelling times within that boring lab, they finally let me go and sure as the stars that I went flying straight to the gardens, where I decided to roll on the grass and just relax. I almost rolled over some critters but luckily they developed quick reflexes during their evolution. Good for them! I like to see animals well adapted to their environment and just generally being resilient little things… not that I got anything against frail and dainty creatures mind you… Sometimes random mutations can create breathtaking beings!
“I knew I saw a green blur outside the windows. Is everything alright?” the concerned voice of Twilight asked me, quickly taking my mind off the clouds.
“Too loud… Just relax and… feel,” I said while my mind did just that, feeling everything alive around me. My body was relaxed for this familiar state of communion with my surroundings but my mind was curious since this world truly felt very strange. I could feel the young princess approaching me and sitting next to me as I just breathe slowly with a small smile on my face.
“I’m… not sure what are you talking about. Feeling what?”
I reached her with my wing and pulled her in a hug, making her head rest against my barrel and near my heart.
“Everything… Just relax and feel it...” I explained her, feeling her uneasiness but relenting to my wishes as her curiosity finally won the struggle. She relaxed in my gentle grip, so I released her and felt her now slow breathing. I could almost feel her questions, so I decided to work ahead of them.
“Empty your mind… without focus or thought...”
“I’ll try… but I think I’ll fall asleep,” she said while giggling. I replied with my own giggles and set myself to just enjoy the feeling of life carrying on, as it always does.
I don’t know how much time we spent just there, but probably not that much. I couldn’t keep myself in-tune with the life force of this world for long because a feeling of uneasiness crept little by little when I was more than a few minutes feeling it. It was as if something was missing… but what? I couldn’t ponder on this for long as I felt Twilight’s heartbeat suddenly skyrocket.
“Is everything alright, little one?”
“...Whoa… What is this?” she asked, and I could feel she managed to tap into the life force of this world. This little girl is a genius! Maybe the little powers I gifted her for her mini-world helped her but… Not even my son was able to feel the life force! Oh this world gets more interesting by the day!
“That is the pure life force of this world, young princess. All creatures are born with a piece of it and it develops as they grow old and experienced, just to return to the world in the end. At least that’s how it works back home,” I explained as I stretched my muscles a bit. “Usually it makes the world teeming with life after millions of years. Just try to not look at it for long periods of time, dear. They say things about the abyss, but you can also get in problems for staring at the light for too long… and I’m not talking about blindness either.”
That made her snap out of her probably life-changing moment and look at me with a big smile on her face… and I think I even see stars in her eyes?
“It was so… so… I can’t describe it with words! Majestic comes close, but that doesn’t make it justice! And that’s the kind of energy that fuels your spells? It just… boggles my mind!”
“And I can assure you that my home has quite more magnitudes of energy than yours. Trust me, I’m quite an old lady,” I replied while giggling, making her look at me with clear excitement all over her face.
“But... Life force sounds a bit clinical for my tastes, and that’s saying something. Do have any other names for this kind of energy?” she asked me. I just chuckled.
“Just the magic of life, my dear,” I simply said, and I swear that I saw a spark inside those smart eyes of hers.
The celestial sisters stood silently inside the medical facilities of Canterlot Castle, their regal masks cracking under the stress. They were called by the doctor in charge of Gaia a couple of hours after her release, which was well within the normal timeframe to get useful results via analysis spells. What was making them nervous was that the doctor said that they should come as soon as they were able to, and that undertone of urgency was quite alarming. After all… What could possibly affect an alicorn as Gaia?
“You majesties,” said the doctor as he walked into the room, followed by one of his peers.
“We came as soon as we received your message. What can you tell us about Gaia?” asked Celestia, looking at them with one of her most inquisitive looks. The bespectacled mare beside the first doctor pulled out some papers and cleared her throat.
“Sorry for any inconvenience your majesties, but the results of many of the tests were troubling to say the least.”
“How so? It's because of her unusual diet?” asked the night princess, “I had the suspicion that eating metal wasn’t very good for the stomach,” she finished.
“Surprisingly, she didn’t have any adverse effects after eating so many… things. All the results were almost the same between before and after lunch. No, what we found alarming was with her tissue and blood samples, and well… her weight”
“… You have to me more specific, doctors,” said the sun princess with a neutral tone. This time it was the stallion who took the lead.
“We found traces of heavy metals and strange molecules that we can’t identify in all of the tissues and in her bloodstream. We also found scar tissue in several parts of her and her overall metabolism looked slower than it should, given the other alicorn data we have,” he said as he read through several papers. “I must add that this hasn’t been a recent event since we have found traces of the same substances inside her bone marrow.”
“Doctor... Are you suggesting that…?”
“Yes. We suspect that Gaia has been suffering from a very severe poisoning for a very long time… at least, until recently. It seems that she’s been recovering from the past decades. She has been also gaining weight in the same time span, as we found that newer muscular tissue and her coat are healthier than other parts of her body,” the doctor continued, ears wilted down for interrupting Luna’s question. “Her actual weight is similar to her solar highness, even when Gaia is quite bigger than our princess. We found this pretty anomalous giving her apparent complexion. We estimated thanks to the analysis of her skeletal structure that Gaia at one time almost tripled her actual weight. We couldn’t pinpoint the cause of the loss of weight so we assumed that it was tied to her poisoning, but since she can eat every little thing that she can put in her mouth we can’t imagine what could be the actual cause.”
The air in the clinic’s room was thick with dread and surprise, the faces of the diarchs of Equestria showing their shock.
“How could someone try to poison her?” murmured Celestia, loud enough to be heard by everyone around her. Luna, on the other hand, was fuming, her face contorted in silent anger.
“Such a vile act, to poison a sweet mare, as annoying as she can be,” Luna said, snorting and pawing at the ceramic tiles of the room.
“We are more concerned about what kind of poison could make her ill since clearly eating metal can’t harm her and we are pretty sure that anything dispersed via aerosol can’t harm her either,” said the mare, arranging some papers at the desk. “It's a given then, even for an alicorn, she should be bedridden or almost on the verge of death… but we saw her just enjoying the garden as if she was a puppy just a few minutes ago. We are stumped on how somepony managed to poison such a sturdy mare, and how can she even move,” the doctor said while she kept filing papers.
Both princesses were silent for a couple of minutes, looking between themselves and thinking about this revelation.
“We are grateful for your hard work… Oh, excuse me, but I think I don’t know your names,” Celestia said with an apologetic tone. Both doctors just shook her heads.
“Don’t worry, princess. This kind of news can be very stressful for everypony involved. I am Doctor Spectacle and she’s Doctor Pulse. We will keep working on the results and make a complete report when everything is done. There are more specific samples that need to be worked on,” said the now identified Dr Spectacle.
“Your Majesties, when I said we didn’t know how she can even move I meant it. Heavy metal poisoning isn’t a common thing in Equestria and cases can only be found in settlements of miners that aren't careful enough where they dump their waste, but we know that the symptoms are usually pretty severe like muscular pain, migraines and anaemia. I would have someone looking after her if she were my patient. Who knows when a sudden pain can strike her?” said Dr Pulse, making both princesses pale about the news. “Thankfully we found miraculous that her body was somehow processing the metals in her system and effectively cleaning her from the poison. Usually, someone with a severe case of heavy metal poisoning would be suffering from it for life, but she is going to be as fit as a fiddle in… well, many times over my own lifespan that’s for sure. Not a very long time for her if our data about her is accurate.”
“My sister and I have... much to think about. Carry on, my little ponies, and thank you again for your diligence,” said Princess Celestia before nodding to her sister and departing the clinic. Both doctors kept looking at each other for a while before exhaling loudly.
“Boy… it never gets easy when we have to give bad news to somepony,” Dr Pulse said, getting a nod from his partner.
“Indeed… but we should keep working on more positive things, like this hormone testing. If we take the baseline of a normal a healthy pony...”
“Spectacle, I said it earlier and I say it now. Those tests were negative. We even made several scans at her abdomen and we found nothing. Just because you are a father with a newborn child doesn't mean that you can see foals where there are none! Now get to it! You still have a couple of hours before going home,” Dr Pulse said with finality, getting a grumble from the stallion.
Dr Pulse just snorted, working on some of the other tests. They didn’t know if it was normal for Gaia to have such a high count of estrogen in her blood. After the fifth scan, they were sure that it was just another anomaly to the pile of strangeness that was the green alicorn… and that was enough for the doctor.
Some corridors away though, a couple of princesses were very concerned about their guest.
Thanks for the update!
Didn't her son say that his people used to be highly pollutive? That would explain the heavy metal poisoning. I mean as the world suffered from the toxicity so would have Gaia.
Yay, Thank you for another chapter.
More chapters Yay!
It's great to see you again. Gaia just got to blast out of the castle and just run off somewhere to enjoy her vacation...
The only reason she's here is for her vacation not to be the new princess/Queen? Of Equestria we're she'll be tost into a new job of never experiencing freedom and coming back home
Also... Is Gaia pregnant???
We have our ways, sadly.
This sequence made me giggle and smile like mad!
You fool! You just introduced the Element of Magic to a new form of magic! WHAT HAVE YOU DONE?!
so... gaia is about to be a mom again?
i wonder if she's actually poisoned or if that's just a factor of her biology.
8182796 More likely a manifestation of pollution her world had from an Industrial Revolution - she's effectively a planet made manifest, after all. They did say that newer tissue was healthier than old, after all, meaning the inhabitants of her world realized what they were doing in time to begin cleaning up their biosphere.
I was not expecting this when I looked at my tracking list.... I am excited about the new chapter and am looking forward to more.
8182815 aaaaaaaaaaaaaaaah.
Just finished reading the this morning after finding it last night. Update this afternoon
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Wooo! Nice to see this again, not many fics out their focus on an elderly character and Gaia certainly fits that role. I like listening to her ramble on about all the inconsequential things the "youngsters" get all hung up over.
Will be curious to see how she and her son react to the Princesses bringing up her case of poisoning. Also to seeing what happens when Gaia finally gets tired of all the prodding and decides to take her vacation despite the Princess trying to monitor and "guide" her.
Woo, you roll in the grass Gaia!
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Yes! I had seen this story a while ago, but I looked at the last upload date and assumed it was dead.
(Also, I completely understand the lack of motivation to write, especially when I plan everything out. What usually gets me out of it is stopping, forgetting about the future of the story for a while, rereading my story from the beginning, then have fun in the current moment, with only some vague progress towards the next plot point. Writing is the most fun when you're creating new things, and you have to remember to do that even if you already have a full plan. Otherwise it gets stale fast.)
HUZZAH AFTER MONTHS OF WAITING!
Glad to see this story updated. I'm glad to read more about Gaia's adventures in Equestria.
Good shit, glad to see it updating :D
Well, the poison would be pollution. The high estrogen? I highly doubt she's pregat, so it's probably normal for her.
Good to see this updated. People, stop with pollution nonsense. Any volcano throws out much more pollution into atmosphere than all human industry combined. Pollution, air poisoning and such is faux. Instrument of economic wars. Planet doesnt suffer because of it. It changes accordingly.
8183347 Not that I want to cause an argument, but you do realise that the ocean acidity is rising thanks to excess carbon emission, its going to dissolve the coral reefs in less than 20 years, and unless it is curbed may become inhospitable to aquatic life.
Not to mention with the growing greenhouse effect, the icecaps are receding and, there are some ancient bogs covered in permafrost under Siberia, that when they defrost, will release more methane then probably the combined human industry of the past 50 years, increasing the greenhouse effect and causing the planet to bake itself like a potato.
Not to mention most of the planets fresh drinking water comes from above the ice-line, which is getting higher every year, or from glaciers, which are also getting smaller.
Volcanoes do probably cause more pollution, but not at a constant rate. A volcano erupts once in a blue moon.
I'm not saying the planet will die... it will just become literal hell.
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Lets also not forget that this isn't humans we're talking about here. They're a completely different species with a much higher level of technology.
Why do I think she is going to give birth to Eques the alicorn because she has been basking in the energy of the new world
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Oh the planet will be fine. We wont, but the planet will.
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Well to be honest humans can be quite resilient critters and with population of 7 billions, ways to move and communicate whatever happens will likely just weed out 99% and humanity will adapt. Humans can be quite incredible and sturdy in various ways, just another evolutionary bottleneck.
As long as survivors can communicate, meet and adapt humanity too will endure and rebuild.
Really nice to see that you're still working on it. And great timing too. I had just re-read the story a few days ago^^
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Then the planet's telling us to leave....
Yep, count me in among those who are glad to see this return.
Not much to say beyond that, but the bit between Gaia and Twilight was sweet.
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Makes sense.
Is Gaïa working just like Captain Planet ?
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"pollution, air poisoning is a faux" Honestly, where'd you get that, and how'd they convince you that it's down right false, and not just being exploited (like everything else) by some people looking to turn a profit?
I think The pollution we're Talking about in the story here isn't carbon emmision, but toxins, heavy metals and such, those things really aren't good for your biosphere.
While Tulip does exagerate a tadd much of a doomsday scenario, he's not wrong with the methane point nor the ocean acidification making life really though for a lot of our aquatic life.
Unlike Tulip, I will not mind a healthy argument, as long as I'm not talking to a wall that is
I'd like to see a time scaled comparison of total volcanic carbon emmision and human carbon emmision from 1800 and up.
But really, the big problem with carbon emmision is that we're 'just' tipping the scales on a pay load of processes, some of which we know, now, are going to smack us right back in the face in the nearer futurer. (access to (especially glacial) freshwater and higher waterlines just to name a good pair)
Yeah writer's block sucks. I got it a few months back in my non MLP stories and it was a chore and a half to overcome it.
So, glad to see you back.
oh, so Gaia is accidentally growing a little titan for Equestria. Now that's a surprising development!
Now to see the sisters trying to keep a convalescent Gaia in the castle for her own sake
8192438 Eh, we don't even know what causes the cycles of ice ages and total loss of all planetary ice. Which we'd have to deal with regardless.
On the plus side, maybe with all the CO2 we won't have another Ice Age... which is FAR more devastating to life. Think of most of North America and the European and Asian continents covered in ice sheets for a couple thousand years... most of the crop-producing land GONE. Yeah, that's how Mad Max happens.
8184060 Humans will definitely survive. We already live in virtually every terrestrial habitat in existence. And we've managed to get up into space.
Besides, if we give all the 3rd world nations the Internet, they'll grow as fat, lazy, antisocial and unmotivated as we are and stop breeding like we have! The population problem will take care of itself!
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The big issue here is timescale. As you mention we still don't know the Complete ins and outs of the cycles that govern iceages, but they're forces that happen over larger periodes of time.
The issue with human influence here is the timescale.
Yes, at somepoint we might've seen similar temperatures, but way into future, with a more realistic time for nature and man to adapt. The problem is that we ain’t giving nature nor ourselves that time now, we're simply making it happen way too fast.
I don't know if the things we've startet can really prevent an iceage, but a slightly cooler world would mean more stable and placid weather, and more ice in glaciers would mean more stable supplies of freshwater and more land around the whole globe (lower waterline).
We're already loosing farmland to wilder weather and increase in arid areas, along with less stable weather in many regions damaging harvests.
I think I could live with a month or two of Ice on the belts, if it meant we wouldn't be facing climate refugees in the comming century.
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Nope. Freshwater held in large glaciers is practically inaccessible until it melts. Also, ice ages tend to lead to desertification of vast areas as rain patterns shift and evaporation from the large areas covered by ice sheets diminishes.
The increase of arid areas has more to do with many countries still using highly destructive farming practices and increasingly relying on marginal land for their food production while paving over the most arable and temperate lands for cities.
Just look at the USA, for example. These idiots are growing RICE, one of the most water-use-intensive crops imaginable, in the CALIFORNIA DESERT. And then they're shocked when it gets too dry... in what is climatologically a desert. Meanwhile, central New Jersey and eastern PA, which had some of the richest natural soil in the country and highly reliable water supplies and rainfall, is virtually all urban sprawl. It's like this all over the world.
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Yes, Glacification shifts rain patterns, though I'd like to point out the uncertanty of the issue, and again, we're talking completely different timescales.
Yes, iceage icecaps are known to create vast relatively dry weathered areas in their vicinity, areas that usually form great grasslands rather than desert.(Though, please tell me why you think talking about iceages is even relevant here?)
mountain glaciers ain’t too bad at that, and I'd say glacial freshwater is relatively available. True, what lies at the core might seem unacessible, but there's almost always freshwater running from a glacier, and it's not like it takes that much to melt ice. Ice carving was a buisness for millenia. (Though not exactly for drinking water) Even if the temperature is some way under zero (Celcius), the sole pressure of the ice causes liquid water to form.
I'm not convinced it has more to do with farming practice, and I was talking about the aridification not pertaining to, yes, completely mindless use of agricultural soil.
Though it in itself is an old issue, draining the soil of its nutrients and wasting tons of water trying to, like in your example, growing rice where no rice belong.
The world would be a so much better place if people didn't work so decididly ignorant and shortsighted, but that's a wholly different debate.
8340345 The fact is, the freshwater melt takes place near the glacier... where the land is far too cold to farm.. and hundreds to thousands of miles from where the water is most needed. The glaciers in Greenland are hardly of use in Africa, you know.
This situation is compounded in an Ice Age, when the glaciers can cover the majority of the landmass of North America and Europe/Asia. In that situation, the remaining usable land is primarily in the Southern Hemisphere... about as far as you can get from the freshwater ice. Plus, you would have to pack the billions of people into that land area AND still have room to farm.
I would point to the effects of a mini-Ice age between the 1400's and 1700's, which resulted in monsoon failures in India and China, resulting in devastating famine. It was also the time when cold and incredibly wet weather dominated Europe, including a period of catastrophic flooding which swept away huge amounts of soil (rendering much of lower Scotland, wherein had formerly been found a great deal of farming, to bare rock). One of the worst such floods documented was the All Saints Day flood of 1570 which virtually destroyed 3 cities on the Dutch coast.
The fact is, too many people believe the climate has a 'normal' setting, which simply is not the case. It swings wildly back and forth, over and over. We're currently still on a post-glacial upswing and haven't even reached the peak average temperatures the planet attained in the previous post-glacial maximums.
Here is a chart... rather a stretched out time period... of what has been determined of past temperature swings as best we can find.
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The ice-sheet-based records are quite accurate and include the peaks stretching back 500 thousand years. As you can see, there are 4 temperature maxima exceeding our current average global temperatures, and as can also be seen, those maxima occurred VERY rapidly, appearing on the chart as nearly vertical lines in all four cases, following major Ice Ages. If anything, this chart demonstrates that the most recent temperature swing upward after the last Ice Age was the SLOWEST post-glacial rise in the last half million years.
If the pattern follows through, the temps will continue to rise another 2-4 C on average globally for the next hundred years or so, then begin to fall again gradually for a few hundred years, before more steeply falling for several thousand years after that.
We should be making our civilization more flexible (ceasing to build large immobile cities on easily flooded low-lying coastland subject to even modest climate shifts would be a logical first step) and prepare for these inevitable changes, rather than shouting about things we cannot possibly control and still do not understand.
This article in Wikipedia lays out the issues regarding this regular but unexplained Ice Age-warm period cycle: https://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/100,000-year_problem Namely, this: "The 100,000-year-problem refers to the lack of an obvious explanation for the periodicity of ice ages at roughly 100,000 years for the past million years, but not before, when the dominant periodicity corresponded to 41,000 years."
It's still a mystery as to why this pattern exists. What is clear is that we're still locked into it and this current warming period should be what is expected from the pattern. I believe that, at most, human activity may be speeding it up slightly toward the maximum... but it's coming regardless, and all the ideological banter and solar panels in the world won't stop it. Meanwhile, promoting ignorance of the unstoppable will only exacerbate the social and economic effects as it continues, with people living in denial and believing they can command the sun to stop shining, as it were.
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As I mentioned, I was not referring to ice-caps, but to mountain glaciers, who both are and would be affected on a global scale
That note aside.
Yeah, an ice age would not be ideal, and yes we live in a world where climate is something that, by a geological scale, swings with irregular regularity.
Great with the research. I just wish we could find one with a much better time resolution. (Here's another one)
One of the problems here is all that we don't know, you mentioned the 100.000 year problem, that Milankowitch cycles alone cannot account for the ice-age periods, because the effect of the eccentricity is less than that of the other cycles yet the response seems to exceed the effect.
The issue is feedback systems, there's a lot of them and the accumulative effect of them is still connected with a lot of uncertainty.
Still, we're putting a lot of extra insulation into the atmosphere, and looking to overshoot the peaks of any of previous period's. I'm pretty sure that's not a good thing.
As for the time thingy, don't you think that saying we might've speed things up a 'little' is a little bit of an understatement? ?
I agree completely with the sentiment, that we need to make society much more flexible in this regard, changes, that might or might or not be made in time. (I'm leaning mostly to not at the moment, because we're lazy like that.)
Though, I think you might be making a bit of a scape goat out of the 'sustainable industries' I don't think they're exactly lying, but I'm also pretty sure they're doing what they can to make a profit on what goes down.
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Not at all. I refer again to those 3 most recent of the ancient temperature spikes. They took place FAST. The actual average temperature increases over the past 50 years is right in line with them, really... possibly even a little slower than the fastest of them.
Even with all the nitpicking of data, the average rises currently are quite small, relatively speaking. They LOOK impressive when skewed on a chart... but numerically, they're fractions of a degree. About what one would expect in the rapid rise period post-glacially.
Rather than focusing on all this 'green' stuff, we need to prepare to move all coastal cities. Because the seas WILL rise in the next hundred or so years and we can't stop it no matter what we do... unless everyone collaborates on building a giant space shade to block sunlight... in which case we don't need to obsess over carbon emissions anyway cuz we can shade the planet whenever we feel like it.
On a purely practical note, we do need other energy sources than fossil fuels for the very simple reason that they will be depleted in the relatively near future. Even with the new technologies and discovered deposits, we've got less than 200 years... and probably only 50-100 before the prices rise so much the overwhelming majority won't be able to afford it.
BUT... we already have a solution: NUCLEAR POWER. The new plant designs have fully-recyclable fuel pellets and processes exist which can separate even the individual isotopes from the roughly 1% waste left over... and some of those isotopes are also useful for various applications. With current supplies of uranium and thorium, we could likely power the planet's electrical needs (even taking into account the increased future usage) for over a thousand years... giving us plenty of time to develop practical power-generation sources that will be more indefinite in utilization timescales.
The two big problems with converting to ALL electrical power are a) storage, which is mainly a problem for vehicles, since nuclear power generation is steady, and b) transmission... our present-day grids in many locations are already over-burdened. We need to completely redesign and rebuild our electrical infrastructure. My calculations indicate that simply replacing old, inefficient transmission technology would lessen the nation's electrical usage by 20%, mainly due to a dramatic decrease in transmission power loss.
is this supposed to last a while longer or is the story near it's ending?
Hey there!
Just thought I might throw a few of my ideas into the mix to maybe help you out if you're stuck on where to go next in the story. Dont let the negative comments get to you, everyone always complains about having to wait for something they like. In a way, they're showing how much they care. They want to see more of your content so badly that they are flooding with "story is dead" comments. Dont let them get to you. A good story is NEVER dead. Even when it is
1) maybe make a chapter explaining what happened and led up Prometheous and his kind poisoning the planet? It was implied rather heavily in previous chapters. But perhaps writing a chapter from his point of view could be interesting. And flesh his character out a bit more.
2) write a chapter with Prometheus instead of his mother. Or include him in the story somewhat. I like the romantic feelings implied between the two. Its cute cuz luna is too stubborn to admit it. And hes too smart to see it.
3) if you do talk about how Gaia was poisoned. I think her son should be the one to explain it. He loves her more than anything. He just acts all tough for his people. When in reality he's just a big softie. Gaia knows this, and loves to tease him for it. Its rather cute but showing him with strong convictions would be rather interesting in my opinion. He talks an awful lot about being as efficient as possible about things. I personally like to believe its because when he saw how he was damaging and harming his mother with his reckless search for science, that he completely shifted over to green energy. Hes already been shown to try amd defend her, and want to watch over her. Even though he knows how futile this is. I believe it would do him so good to admit his guilt for how he treated her. And the planet.
4) which leads to my next point. We as the readers already can guess that Gaia is the physical representation of the planet. And both are affected by each other. The same goes for her son, and how he represents his people. I think that there dhould be more fleshing out of this concept. Not for the readers, necessarily. But, rather, instead for Celestia and Luna, and the gang, so that they can more fully understand and know what Gaia and her son truly are.
-ALSO. these are judt my ideas and opinions, so take them as you will. I meant no ill will or harm towards you, dear author.
I love this story. And do not wish to see it fade away. :3
Take care! ❤
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ALSO. What if we had Prometheus have a nightmare where his mother dies to his neglect of nature and ultimately ends up killing the planet and his mother.
Good romance moment for Luna to not only save him from the nightmare. But also from himself and his crippling depression and guilt. I mean, he shits himself away from everyone. And stays in his lab. Would much rather be studying something than socialize. He strikes me as having huge amounts of guilt and depression.
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Question: why are you responding to me considering that comment was made two years ago, give or take? And considering how much interesting and character development was made after it, this kinda seem rather pointless as I completely forgotten that I written that.
Yes, that is quite accurate young Earth had quite a deadly and violent history.