Im glad to see this story is on fim keep up the good work!

Hmmmm. Well this is something new. New time period. New characters and basically a very unexplored take on Equestria, at least in my experience. And the quality is excellent and the characters are quite interesting. I'm definitely tracking this story. Should be quite interesting to see where it goes.

Quite a nice read mate. I must say love coming from the battlefield is rare, and even more so when those in love are a baker and the Captain of an elite fighting unit. Now I have the mental image of Apricot using a loaf of bread as a sword in the middle of a vicious melee in the bakery.

Track'd.

Good to see this here. I think the people who are apprehensive about giving this story a chance probably don't understand that the 'pegacorn' race mentioned in the description is NOT the same as what Celestia and Luna are. I know I wasn't sure about that until I started reading.

To any weirdos reading comments before giving the story a chance (I do that all the time, lol), Rye is not an OC-alicorn, and is certainly not a mary sue. If anything, he's a cripple. And everyone knows cripples make the best action heroes.

In a shameless attempt to squeeze more bumps out of this, I'll be posting one chapter a day till I hit the number I currently have posted on EQD. The next few are kinda short, so be warned.

>>270220270220Its NOT Pegicorn!Its Alicorn!

>>270228270228

Read the comment two above you.

>>270234270234.........Derp

Awesome. This is one of my favourite stories. I can only hope it gets more views and reviews.

I'm definitely liking this story. As for short chapters, that's fine. May make for a shorter read, but sometimes they can help by moving things along. *looks at my own second story*......Maybe I need to learn that lesson a little better.

This story is pretty epic! I will be tracking this for updates in the future so please don't leave this tale unfinished. I look forward to reading the whole thing and adding it to my collection of MLP fiction stories.

I'm just glad somepony appreciates high-fiction things enough to write a fanfic in the same style.

If you ever do something like this again, how far back will you go? I had a thought about high-fiction ponies, and the possibility of pinto ponies; dwarf equivalent.

Dawn Sparkle?

Ancestor?

I find it interesting seeing Princess Celestia value the power of friendship thru out the story. Not directly controlling her subjects thru strength of arms or magic but thru friendship. She always stride to have her subjects understand this but most of her little ponies want only power or money.

Also find Rye Strudel to be a great character. Not because he has a horn and wings. He is strong because he is weak. And only the weak know value of strength. Know the value of power.

Friendship is real strength.

I'm resuming progress on this now that the semester is finished. Look for more updates next week.

>>570054570054

Woohoo! Seriously though, a Star-5 EQD story with less than 300 views on this site? Hopefully the updates will change that soon

YES!!

I'VE BEEN WAITING FOR THIS TO UPDATE!!!!

this story is great please do keep updating

I had a feeling I'd already read this chapter... I guess I'll just have to wait for the next EQD update

Right, I should be getting most of the rest of these chapters posted soon. Also, 23-27 are nearly ready to be on EQD, so keep an eye out for them.

>>614293614293

awesome can't wait to see what nordic ponies are like in the north

I mean....... besides the violent fighting

Gonna have to re-read, it has been more than awhile. Anyway it's nice to see your posted here!

Good to see this updating again! Even if it's far behind EQD's google docs links. :P Can't wait for the actual continuation, lol.

I'm doing some rewrites of the first four chapters. Don't worry if you've already read them, I'm not changing any important details, but I feel that the current quality of these chapters does not match the later ones. I'll be changing them on here first (since I can do the individual chapters) and updating the EQD version later.

Again, don't bother re-reading them for any new information, I'm just touching up the prose.

>>619574619574 Heh, a little late... finally sat down and re-read everything. I was a bit disappointed since with all the recent posts it looked like there would be new chapters. Hopefully we get to see something new after the revisions. (If i'm not mistaken there's a couple more chapters to go before fimfiction is up to date with eqd)

Thanks for putting this up on fimfiction!

"The griffon war cry was replaced by screams and hoarse cries as they fell, pierced by the spears of the Equestrians."

Is it bad if I snickered at that?

Nice, can't wait until this is all up-to-date with the EQD version.

Why am I thinking Dragons? Is it because I played too much Warcraft 2?

I apologize for the state of things at the moment. Consider the fic under construction until the end of the week. There are plot holes and missing information ALL over some of these middling chapters due to some poor writing. I'll keep updating for the people already reading but I hope to have the rest of the fic up to quality standard by Thursday at the latest.

It still amazes me every time I see this chapter of how weak and incompetent Celestia can be.

When Celerity died my reaction was something like...

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Even though she went against Celestia she did it to save those that she was suppose to protect. And despite Celerity's plans to go against her and the Bluebloods I feel that she did the right thing, I believe that her reasoning's were sound and her heart was in the right place. But I guess sometimes there is no real right choice.

R.I.P Celerity, student of Celestia.

May she always be considered as one that died protecting her ponies.

She will be missed and always remembered.

For she was more than just a Student.

She was a friend.

And friendship never dies.

It was dragons. Nice to see I can still see them coming. I'm sad that Celerity died. Now if only Emmet would be so kind as to roll over and die as well. And maybe Celestia should stop trying to straddle the line and actually...I dunno...LEAD her people!

Wait Rye is 6 freaking years old?

They're horses, lol. Average life span is 30ish. Maturity-wise he's about 23-25. Inger is about 8, so he's closer to 26-28. Cranberry's pretty close to the same age as Rye.

Maybe I should write up an appendix for the ages, provinces, and background lore when this is done.

>>645013645013 Gotta love inconsistencies between stories. Chatoyance's converison bureau fics say ponies have an average lifespan of 150 years. (I like to think of it as canon, but that's just me) Though they mature by their twenties or so, the signs of aging generally don't show up until their final years. One pony lived as long as 300 years. (If you're wondering what fic, The Taste of Grass, chapter 29)

Not bl

A couple month hiatus, and suddenly its update after update... I'm stunned, seriously. Your speed is next to incredible. On top of that your chapters are still at the same high standard. It's hard not to love your characters.

Thank you for the update!

Ha, if only. These are all backlogged, mate. It's going to slow down to about one a week or less after we get to chapter 27.

I wonder what the General's planning to do with his aerial units. Between the dragons, the civil war, the massive and more experienced griffon army and the Sleipnords' own civil war, it'll be a miracle if Equestria manages to come out of this alive.

>>658863658863

And then they somehow incite a griffon civil war. Civil wars everywhere.

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I recommend "Adagio in D Minor" while reading the bit with the sun.

Her sister was her best friend and she had to banish her.

A Blueblood with the sense to know the truth when he hears it. To bad his sensability gets diluted so far in the future.

Only one more chapter until we're all caught up, I think?

Wow, this story's pretty much 100k words. Didn't realize it was that long already.

>>682682682682

And we're only a little over a third of the way through, eesh. Didn't realize quite how large it was going to be when I started.

Are we still working off your backlog of chapters or are you churning these out again?

These are the ones I did last week. New stuff will be a bit slower.

But they’ll be singing songs about it for centuries to come.

I said it on EQD, I'll say it here: I am excited for whatever she has planned, and I don't even know what it is. :D

I'm going to say it because nobody else will: Thank you for the update!

After a minute of thinking, I think I know the "how" to Windstreak's plan. Always fun to try and guess these things.

I really hope that when it comes down to the wire Clement turns out to be a good fighter, steady leader, and noble hero for ponies instead of a coward. Celestia knows the Equestrian army could use some more.

>>686590686590

Oh, I dropped plenty of clues for you. Enjoy the game.

I don't know what she is planning....

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But I cant wait to find out!

huh. So I guess the nordsponies are big on honor.

this chapter I like it!

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>>690262690262

Epic gif is epic.

I look forward to this griffiin General getting his ass righteously handed to him at some point. You said we were little over half way through at some point didn't you?

Well, that was interesting. A villain speech followed immediately by what amounts to an inescapable death.  

Not quite half.

EATING PONIES?!?!?!

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good chapter as always, and yet another devious plan is told but once again surrounded in mystery.

And NOW we're all caught up! Is Fimfiction going to be getting one chapter at a time, or will it be getting the three chapters at once thing EQD's googledoc links get?

One at a time, to squeeze more bumps out of it.

I think you need to squeeze a "dark" tag into this. Should've been there a long time ago.

Eh, maybe. I dunno, the "dark" tag implies a hopeless, endless trauma train from which there will be no escape. To me, anyway. But I suppose that last chapter was rather grim.

The Skyrim soundtrack is really good background music for this story.

Well, I'm all caught up now. Nothing to do now but twiddle my thumbs and wait for an update.

Amazingly fitting gif. Also, rubber ducky of Canterlot, lol oh Princess...

Horse meat, it what's for dinner. Now with a little more backstory, I view Shrikefeather as less of a prick and more of a guy out to get his people what they need, namely food. Still, wow.

i guess Bluebloods are fools even in the past

thought she would follow them...too bad for Ingy they need her

Good to see this up on FF.net as well.

Shrikefeather is best griffin.

Finally got around to re-reading this. Excellent and can't wait for more!

Oh great, just what I needed: another amazing fic that never updates.

Indeed.  I think clement is heading on the right track here,  he just needs to realize it's his priorities and not his fathers that are just.  great chapter, love the way you developed the dukes character.  when we first met him i thought he would just be some spoiled rich kid, but now you've added some serious moral fiber to this kid.  good stuff, can't wait for the next chapter.  Peace, and stay gold.

I agree with Azrael. I'm loving this character development and having him so effected by the death of a couple of grunts he spoke to is a good way to hammer home the worthlessness of his 'cause'. Might make a revolutionary out of him yet.

finally he is beginning to see the horrors that come with war and what greets you on the battlefield.

God I can't wait for more

Excellent update. I really hope Clement confronts his father.

what he said ^

I'm very happy to see this update again, and the inclusion of Strawbuck and Scrubs was genius. Strawbuck's death especially caught me off-guard, and it's a real reminder of how brutal battles like these are.

Excellent, as always!

Glad you're back! Clement's development in war and politics has been excellent.

YOU MADE IT TO FEATURED!!!!

read it all amazing work man amazing  , so they will kill the dragon hmm, will it be by choking her whit chains or whit a vacuum(you know casted by the Pegasus), any ways i hope you bring more chapters soon.

by the way i cant help but think of Rye, or what ever he is called, as nothing but a hobbit. was that the impression you wanted to cause?, i think  it's brilliant.... yep this filled whit lord of rings drama the more i look at it the only thing it is missing is some villain like the big eye at the top of the tower.... anyways like like like this is pure gold  

Glad to see I was wrong about this fic never updating, and right about it being amazing. Keep up the outstanding work

Man, it took me forever to get around to reading these updates. But it is SO SATISFYING to see Clement wising up to reality!

So they're going to try to drown Viera? Probably a better idea than trying to stab her to death. xD

Why do I get the feeling that Erik`s not a raving lunatic and that Rye is somehow going to transcend his role as a diplomat and become the Nordpony king.

>>13771571377157

While I don't want to spoil anything, I will say that the plot is not intended as wish-fulfillment for Rye. There is little danger of him becoming king of anything.

>>13771821377182 Goody.  That just makes it more interesting MUAHAHAHAHAH!!!

...THIS IS ON THIS SITE???

ADDING TO LIST NOW!!!

I know that it's not the case, but im gonna put on the foil hat for a while. Conspirosy theory number 1 : Celerity Belle still lives. Conspirosy theory 2 : Clement kills his father.

A dragon-slaying hammer, eh? Also yay, more adventure!

Two things:

1. This story is amazing.

2. This story has the most metal name of all time.

>>695264695264

EATING PONIES?!?!?!(Do not want^^)

well horse meat is actually delicious, but i don't know about ponies... can't be too different ^^

but anyway awesome story, i've read to this point int three days( split in little pieces over the course of day) and i must say it's absolutely genius

This Shriekfeather guy reminds me of Esteem from The Immortal Game. I took great joy when he died, and I shall take great joy when General Fluffykins bites it, as well.

*sigh*

And now I'm caught up and have to wait an eternity for updates. And we're only halfway through? Ugh... Why does this story have to be so damn good?

O_O.... didn't think he had it in him.

Respect for Clement Goes up by 120%

Holy crap, that speech... I'd totally follow this guy to the end of the world after that.

We have already had one capable, charismatic leader die, hopefully the same won't happen to Clement.

clement is almost as much of a beast as Celerity was.

You're juggling three different story-lines, and which one is my favorite keeps shifting around practically every time you update. That makes me very happy.

FUCK YEAH, CLEMENT!

I think Clemet would dispare that the nobility have become even more arrogant prigs in the mane 6 time.

Fuck yeah! Seriously, Clement is a bro, through and through. Standing up to his father, when all his previous actions have been to gain his respect, must have been so difficult.

Young Duke, regardless of what others may say, you HAVE done the right thing. Equestria will remember you not as a traitor, but as a hero of the highest order.