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Applejack's past in Appleoosa catches up to her, forcing her to set out alone in an effort to rescue her cousin Braeburn from an old friend.

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Very nice. The story would have benefited from some more backstory, maybe with the use of flashbacks or something.

I'd love to see more about the adventures of Hard Cider and Long Lasso. Perhaps you could make another story out of it; there's a lot of potential there for a fun story that I would enjoy.

As it stands though, this just seems kinda taken out of context, leaving me confused as to who is who and what is going on. The action is good, I'll give you that, but the effect of this was lost on me due to my confusion of "Who's Hard Cider? Who's Long Lasso? What did they do before? Why does he not have enough money for more than a few people?"

All said though, I like it, and I'll give it a fave and upvote. Hopefully you flesh out this universe more, because it looks really interesting.

If you ever need a pre-reader or anything, hit me up.

I agree with Eric, you could do rather well with another sequel or even a series. You did very well with dramatic tension although if it had been longer of a period I think some of us would have fallen out of our seats. Also it seemed to have a good amount in common with the character Clint Eastwood played during his three movies as a mysterious gunman. Did you get inspiration from that?

"No memory is ever alone; it's at the end of a trail of memories, a dozen trails that each have their own associations."
- Louis L'Amour

Love the story, especially the ending.:pinkiesmile:

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