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[Chapter 4 Coming Soon]
For the people that shall see this, I have - like I said I would - been working on the story and the next chapter once more. The story has been ironed out and characters/events renewed; I've managed to avoid a complete overhaul. There is still some time until I polish off chapter 4 for "publishing" - expanding on the rushed sections, spelling and grammar fixes (or unfxies when necessarily) - but I thought I should attract the long-lost attention of those following along. Enjoy this excerpt from the next chapter (it has been subject to a higher amount of editing and "expansion" (taking a line and fleshing it out into a paragraph), but does include minor tweaks as to not ruin too much). Feel free to comment, criticize and speculate.
Her head hurt, along with the rest of her body. Her mind was fuzzy still, and she questioned whether or not she was really conscious. The question was quickly answered as a high-pitched scream alerted her senses. Applejack was quick to fully awaken, adrenaline coursing through her veins: none of them beasts would catch her nappin'! Her eyes burst open, expecting to already be in trouble. She was half right. A dozen blurry figures were visible in the dim light, they had almost completely surrounded her already! But Applejack was not goin' anywhere without a good tussle!
She rose from her seat and dashed to one of the two open ends in the enemies lines, turning her flank to the wall. She might be able to stand a chance like this. The attackers were already advancing at her, although at a slow pace. They were speaking incomprehensible babble, clearly intended to distract her. Applejack wouldn't fall for such a weak plan! Turning a full 180 degrees in one movement, she bucked one of the beasts that had gotten a little too close. Her hooves slammed into its head. Despite sounding and feeling like metal, the creature didn't stand a chance against such strength and stumbled sideways, dazed none-the-less. Applejack took the opportunity to buck it a second time in the midsection. It crashed to the ground in a heap farther away as a pair of offenders tried to sneak up at her from the rear. They were slightly lighter and weaker than the other one, and a hoof to the side of the head sent one crashing into the other, both slamming into the wall before slumping to the ground.
Time was running out. The others had been able to close in to uncomfortable levels. There was no hope to defeat them all, and escaping was no option... unless-
In a desperate action, she dodged a figure that was about to grab her and headed right to a light source on the other side of the room: the exit to the cave!
"STOP HER!" Applejack deciphered someponies cry.