"Have you ever seen a real tree,or real grass. I`ve always wanted to, but the vault door prevents that.Twilight sparkle said to fluttershy,"We cant open the vault its to unsafe the world was destroyed by the NLR and the Eqestrian military.Theres nothing left out in the world.The vault is what keeps us safe from all of the unknown".Replied Fluttershy."Sheesh your starting to sound like the overseer".Said Twilight,"Why would you want to go outside the vault you could get yourshelf killed outhere".Replied Fluttershy."Why wouldnt you,it has an actual sun instead of these brightlights,you can also explore the world anew".Argued Twilight.She then stormed off down the long corridor angry and bored.Little did she now her chance to leave would be soon.
At first it was just random banging on the vault door then it became more aggresive,you could also hear screaming of anger and hate calling the residents to come outside so they could kill them."We need to do something"!Yelled Bonbon."I agree"!Yelled lyrah."Silence all of you"!Yelled the overseer during the vault security meeting.Then disaster struck the vault door imploded inward the security team in the area got behind cover and waited.There stood in the doorway were gaint groteste ponies."Were is everypony,we just would like to talk to you".One said while chuckling.One of the security guards stood up and took a shot at them they simply just absorbed the shots,then they started firing back tearing through the gaurds.Before an hour was up the mutants cleared through the vault.Twilight was hiding in the closet crying to hershelf saying"why is this happining".Then in the distance she heard a voice singing it sounded like the voice was coming through a mask.The voice was singing"I dont want to set the world on fire i just want to start a flame in your heart".She let out a muffled squeek,then the singing stoped.She didnt hear any footsteps so she though whoever it was was gone,then suddenly the door was slung open and she was dragged out.She felt cold metal being pressed to her head."What happened here".He ordered.She was still sobbing.He said it louder,"what happened here"."I dont know".She replied."We were attacked by something"."Well no shit".He replied.He slowly pulled the gun from her head.He then knelt down and wrapped his arms around her."Its ok stop crying".He said.He pulled off his helmet to show a mid lenght mane that was black with red stripes.His helmet was simple it had a face mask that had red eye visors.He was also wearing a black duster that has seen years of traveling."Your safe now you have nothing to worry about".He said quitley."Everyones dead and i have no one left".She whined."You should come with me to the outside world".He suggested."Whats out there".She asked."A wasteland full of muraders, savages, and just plain out things that would like to kill you".He stated."I dont know it sounds dangerous".She replied."It is, but youll have me to protect you".He said."Youll do that for me".She replied."Sure i will, im a nice stallion".He stated."Ok ill come with you".She said."Well pack your things we need to hit the road,oh another thing do you have any medical training".He asked."A little why".She replied."So you can pay back for my services,youve got to earn the salt your worth".He stated while chuckling."I knew it was to good to be free".She said while rolling her eyes.
"Before we leave put on these sunglasses it will keep the bright light out of your eyes,coming out of the vault for the first time can really strain your eyes".He said while handing her the glasses."Wait you never told me your name".She asked."They call me war, but my real name is ragnarok,so whats your name"."My name is twilight sparkle".Well twilight sparkle its nice to meet you"."same"
"So twilight did you have any family in the vault"."Yeah but a flu went through the vault,and they were unfortunate ones to die during it"."Im sorry to hear that my mother died when i was 3,and my father was murdered by raiders.After that i just grew in the wastes by myshelf and self tought my combat skills and thats why im here today"."Oh you seem to know what your doing,but what was that song you were singing earlier"."I dont know i heard it on the radio"."How is it playing without anypony starting it"."Oh there is, her name is Vinyl scratch.What i would give to meet her"."Why dont you try to"."Ive tried to but the remnant bastards wont let me in"."Who are the remnants"."Oh there this orginization of old world followers. Crazed sons of bitches if you ask me,the old world is dead and we all know it.We should get moving before the sun goes down.Its not good to be out in the open at night"."What comes out at night",Twilight said sounding scared."Alot of things that you shouldnt see.Now lets get moving,oh yeah and take this".He handed her a laser pistol."Use it only when you need to"."Thank you then"."Ok lets get going i know a place we can go for a night"."Were"."Oh youll see soon enough pulling his helmet on."Put these clothes on to before we leave ponies seeing you that you just came out of the vault will target you".She said ok while taking the clothes and changing.They then set off into the setting sun.Not looking back to the vault.Twilight felt safer next to ragnarok."So ragnarok are we there yet".Please dont do that, youll know when we get there trust me.
I like this story. It's very entertaining
Nice, but it needs paragraphs.
255173i had a problem with the story upload system of it it wouldnt fit wright but future chapters will be paragraphed
255298
You can still edit your chapters, ya know...
Looks like a good fic but I cant look at it for more than a few seconds before my eyes hurt, you should go and edit in some paragraphs!
Needs paragraphing, a description, and much more work.
These Fallout Equestria spin offs aren't even trying anymore.
Guys i know it needs paragraphs come on im new to this site and to its controlls im used to fanfic.nets controlls ill edit the chapter just give me time
im trying to fix it
i give up trying to fix it just please deal with it till the next chapter
255551
Out of curiosity, did you copy/paste it from a word document?
255636howd you know that are you a spy my toaster was fried
255647
Because I dealt with the same problem: I also use word to write my stories in. Helps me locate typos.
Anyway... Copy/pasting from a word document eliminates all spacing and Bold/Italics/Underlines. I just find the right spots that were originally in paragraphs, and press enter once or twice to space them out. It takes a few mins of time, but it gives me the original format that I originally had.
255656thanks for the tip oh and nice pic
255659
Thanks.
there i fixed the problem thanks to DragonLS
so where is the fix? i can still see a wall of text
He didn't fix it all the way. I see two places where he spaced it out, but it's still a big wall of text... x_x
255777check now
255777check now>>255814should be now>>255814oh if its the middle its a big paragraph
look everybody im sorry if its messed up
SWEET JESUS MY EYES
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RRRRRRRWWWWWWWWAAAAAAAAAARRRRRRRR IM GOING TO EAT YOUR F@#$ING SOULS IF SOMEONE ELSE COMPLAINS i know its messed up i know just please deal with it until i can fully fix it
look if i can read it and be fine everyone can and i have horrible vision
255931
Epic trollfic is epic, this is a trollfic right?
255951yes yes it is
255965
I don't believe you, because you forgot the comma between the two yes,' in your response.
255984LIES
Oh god, this is priceless. Troll meets Troll meets Troll. This calls for a Party.
This is the new My Little Dashie in terms of story telling and emotional grip. This story is a art.
256079thaks
LOL I've been there. My first fic was one big wall of text. If my editor didn't point it out I would have gotten a lot of flack for it lol I enjoyed this story though. Can't wait to see more.
255924 .........this wall of text burns my eyes and makes me want to complain.
Come at me brony.
256230thanks glad to see im not alone with that flaw
256325>>256230prepare for love and toleration
a note for everyone i was in the middle of this when i found out about the others
Not bad. I felt the familiarity of FO:NV. The text still needs a bit of fixing but you know this already.
"Do you know the dialoge should be written kind like this?," asked the curious parasite abomination of Samus. "I apologize if I sound like or I'm in the action of being a douche," the walking monstrocity said in a sincere tone.
I'm not gonna be a hater on it and give you a thumbs down because of the text problem.
Side Note
You should also really stay out of that guy's shed.
256796i cant i must go in the shed
256325 It's not that I am against the side stories entirely, it's that they have become overpopulated. It's ridiculous now. If you're going to put yourself with that group, then prepare to be bunched with them.
I'm not saying your story isn't going to be decent, but I am saying that it's going to receive a lot less attention in the long run because people like me are getting tired of over 100 spin offs to the same story over and over, and soon it will be far more. Eventually other people will get tired of it too. I honestly don't even need to do anything or speak out against it because really it's going to destroy itself.
I liked the original story, it's all the ridiculous spin offs that are getting irritating.
257344 To be fair, not all side stories are rubbish. Fallout: Equestria Heroes is fairly good, as is Project Horizons.
As our mighty trollfic writer hath said to thou! LET THOU
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357578 You know what I like you.
also note if you dont like it dont read it or have some goddamn respect that is all
314628I kinda find that offensive with both of you had a conversation on the page about other fics. Answer this did you like this or not.
566115
Well, the fic itself is nearly incomprehensible due to the at times atrocious grammar. However, this appears to be a trollifc, and it is substandard in that regard as well. If you write a trollfic, don't make constant spelling errors: really write to piss people off. Say things that mix the truth with lies, totally fabricate things, and/or use a weird type of logic to come up with ridiculous conclusions.
566167You relize most grammer errors are ententional spelling can be blamed on my editor who doesnt appear to do his job, and you cant say i write to piss people off when you dont know my mind. One other thing welcome to the real world everything you hear is fabricated, the world has mixed truths, and you cant write a story like this withoout using a wierd logic to it. Believe me i have actualy read the original story plans for fallout 3, and new vegas, everything in the begining is mixed up but with the conclusion it comes together. Its the same way most of my fics work I take something completely fuck it up, but with progress through you will see why and it all comes together, and no its not a trollfic I would have really made you mad. I'm really getting tired of people who think thier criticizing but do not understand how the authors mind works, and its not finished so I can actually fix things, and also i might not now your language that well because i've only been speaking it for a year and a half now.tak chto spravitʹsya s nyeĭ
567511
That's much better.
567549Wait, what?