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Trail-Blazer


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"Farm life aint easy!" Oh give me a break. It's easier than you think, if you have the right knowledge. This is the motto that Scotty Andersen goes by. His life on a Michigan dairy farm would seem like the most peaceful setting for anyone. Well that's not exactly the case for Scott. With a divorced family, and dead mother, he is forced to live with his grandpa on his father's dairy farm. He recently graduated from High School and is offered the job of running the farm. He's not too fond of the idea, but has no other option. His sorrow for his destroyed family is lost with his thoughts of suicide, and depression. All he really needs is a friend, but when he constantly moves from place to place, changing schools as he goes, it seems impossible for him to ever 'fit in'. One trip down the highway in rainy weather sets him on a path that not even he knows how to react.

Second story. Constructive Criticism is very much appreciated.

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Chapters (2)
Comments ( 10 )

Probably the only thing I'm worrying about right now is not knowing whether this story will make it to the feature list or not :ajbemused: I'll be asleep for the next 10 hours! But I guess that's not something I should worry about anyways. I don't know how long those stories are kept there until they're replaced. But I guess we'll see :ajsmug:

Glad you like the story so far! :twilightsmile:

JBL

I'm worried about the Comedy tag, I don't really like over the top comedy. Is this story going to be like that?

hi I grabbed a copy of this for a review if you like to see my view on this heres a link
https://www.facebook.com/pages/Slash-wing-my-little-pony-FIM/339895572794546?ref=hl

This chapter... felt rushed. Besides a few grammatical errors, it feels like you are cramming WAY too much plot in a small amount of time, thus making the flow of the story feel off. That and characters feeling OOC (Twilight attacking an unknown being and calling them a monster? The same Twilight that was the only rational one willing to try to get to know both Zecora and Luna when everyone else was terrified of them? Seriously?)

Anyways, hope you might rethink this chapter, or at least take your time in future chapters developing plot points.

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