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General note: After starting another game of fallout 3 as Crimson, I've decided to switch over to the fallout 3 level up / skill system.
This hasn't changed the story dramatically, it simply means his [guns] skill is now [small guns], as is the same with Cherry Sundae.
Personally I feel this suits my characters and story better, as I never did much like the idea of [guns] being everything from a 32. pistol all the way up to a 5mm minigun/10mm SMMG - which have a completely different style of use, weight proportions and so on.
It also will play an essential role in the future, with another of my characters who I have planned. Though I wont reveal any exact details, the simple split between small guns & big guns makes a lot of sense for him.
It's also a lot easier for me to keep track of and develop, using the fallout 3 character creator/builder that is vault106.com
handy handy handy.
edit: also found an embarrassing over the limit S.P.E.C.I.A.L for Cherry. that's now been fixed [chapter 2 footnote]
On top of this, I've also added a personal level up & perk for Cherry, providing further explanation to her camouflage. [in the form of being a level 2 perk being unlocked]
Not that I really needed to explain, [or, no complaints so far] but I feel it helps build a level of depth to it.
I say. will it let me comment yet?
edit: yes it will.
Chapter 4, as always, has had no pre-reading or editors. if you find a typo or have a suggestion, feel free to come to me about it and let me know either via comments or PM.
Thank you :)
Well, Maisy was a good idea. Unique to any other FOE Fic. I knew that she would be a follower after Crimson gained common ground. Having another flying group member is always useful too. There were some places that pony related terms could be substituted, but that is not entirely necessary. Good work on this one, I think I saw some influence from Flank's defenses here. Also, Crimson is Spock.
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Indeed, the defences for Coltshire Commons was influenced/inspired by Flank - but also by Big Town and Canterbury Commons.
The way I envision C.C is much like Canterbury Commons in terms of run down buildings and walls made out of rubble (or in this case, rock).
The inspiration to actually do it was taken from Flank.
The inspiration on how / why was Big Town.
Though there's more time to be spent in Coltshire Commons yet, just a hint.
I think where Kkats tale focuses on the grand scheme of things, and Somber's tale works off the inner workings of each pony, alongside the grand scheme of things - I think my tale is going to be about the communities of the wasteland.
Somber does make a touch down with his communities, improves them and spends some time in them, yes, but I really want to get into the ground and uproot the whole thing, make friends or enemies with each one on a deeper level then Blackjack does for example.
Best example: Fallen Arch - it was more about Blackjack being security and that mindset then it was the community.
It wasn't about improving the lives of the mares so much as it was asking for it to stop.
Coltshire Commons? Crimson is going to be spending more time there, doing more, being more. Then he's going to move on, and the process is going to be again and again in its own little ways. not every village is going to be fortified by Crimson, that'd make a bland tale, but you hopefully get my drift - we're going to see a personal touch wherever the group goes.
Fun fact; Maisy was originally going to be killed.
Crimson and Cherry were going to have an epic fight with her, and Maisy was going to die.
Somehow my brain told me to hold off on killing her when there was the caravan though, and then when it came to it, my friend Tom won the bet by guessing his post count on 4chan's /b/ (the rules were you guess odd or even, and live or die. he said live and 4. his post ended in 04.)
I didn't realise it'd lead to what it did. I'm so glad it did.
As for the term mane, if you mean that - I think that's a general terminology amongst animals with hair.
I think so, anyway.
Never really got into that generation of Star Trek, I mean, I liked the Jean-Luc Picard generation, but even then I was never a massive fan, as I was only a child at the time.
I know enough, but I don't know him in detail.
Which ways do you reckon he's Spock then?
Lastly, I'm glad you like Maisy. I was really worried, like, absolutely worried sick that someone would scream bloody murder, but no-one has.
Now I just have to shit myself when the time comes that my next (final) combat member comes along.
Come to think of it, it's a good thing I have Maisy - I had no plans to add any other combat members other then this other member who comes around later in the story.
Now I think of it, Maisy is the perfect addition to the group - otherwise it'd just be the two of them, and that would've been a little lacking in terms of damage potential.
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Spock said to Kirk in one of the films: "The needs of the many, outweigh the needs of the few"
I may not have actually watched the original series or the film adaptations, but I have watched the prequel and the TNG era ones through at least once with a few re-watches of many episodes, totaling about 2 total watches of DS9(on my third) and Voyager(starting a third after DS9), and 3 or 4 of Enterprise(being 3 seasons shorter and interesting). Only one of TNG, since I found it honestly quite boring.
I do see a slight resemblance to Big Town, only they were actively besieged by Germantown's mutants, Paradise Falls' slavers, and raiders. Canturbury Commons had commerce, the opposite of Coltshire Commons, and I do see the structural similarity. I also thought we'd see more of the place, too. Mane works BTW, Lions have manes. Just the 'everypony' and 'nopony', stuff like that.
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That is fucking scary.
Because I don't remember him ever saying that, I didn't watch a lot with him in at all.
So we both have the same viewpoint - because that's my ACTUAL view on life itself.
the needs of the many must always outweigh the needs of the few. [as in, do what we must to help one another first, personal gain should only come once everyone is adequate and happy]
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Oh, I forgot to add - this isn't the whole time in Coltshire Commons!
They've got some more time to be spent there. I really want this story to be about the communities and Crimsons effect on them.
So yeah. don't worry. more to see just yet.
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It is logical to think so. I know I do. Lol.
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That is what I meant, we will see more.
Chapter 4 has now been updated with some minor edits. some dialogue is now clearer, typos are gone, described the sniper shot wound in better detail, explained the TNT scene better, described the IV drip stuff better.
A few other small things.
Hope it helps!
I am reading now. Is good.
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Awesome ^_____________^
By the way, I've began to read your fic again, but I fell asleep while reading it last night (I was drinking at the same time) so I have to figure out where the hell I got to, or perhaps even what chapter I was on >.< lol
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lol
The colt previously named Jam Toast is now called Dust Buckets.
He's been changed from a random colt, to Doctor Dirts son.
When Crimson & Cherry walk into town, it's been changed from "colts" (only one of whom was actually given any attention) to just the lone colt (Dust Buckets)
Ever so slight change in dialogue when Crimson first meets Dust Buckets, ever so slight change in the way Dusty gets told off, and I think that's it for my changes. Shouldn't have to make any further edits now - promise!