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Oh, wow. I really hope she lives. This definitely doesn't bode well for her career as a Wonderbolt.
Hey, I see numerous grammar mistakes. If you'd like, I could be your pre-reader, and in doing so I can fix all grammar mistakes I see.
251431 That would be much appreciated I have the second chapter done, if you give me your email i would email you the next chapter.
what, no ozzy?
awesome man, love rock, love hurt/comfort fics, love dash(well, you know what I mean)
251687 haha, well what i really meant by the list above is that its going to be all about classic rock, maybe I can put some black sabbath in their just for you.
good start... will be tracking this for sure
:251699 yaaay, lol
My god
You are a fucking genius, this is outstanding. Also,Since Dash can't do Sonic Rainbooms so she does music, if I fuck my lips up beyond repair and have to give up tuba playing, I MUST PERFORM SONIC RAINBOOMS. Oh wait, fuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuuu
253121 hahaha Thanks I really appreciate it. The Rock & Roll part is coming soon enough. I have to figure out the music and what not.
petty good i cried a bit.... but well written cant wait till u finished this story
254814 Next chapter will be up in a few hours at most. I am more than pleased with this next one!
Yaaaaaaaay! I'm getting shout-outs! :D If I were Kermit the Frog I would be spazzing out so hard right now.
BLACK DOG, YES
APPROVAL
255813 haha I knew it would work, I mean really, who wouldn't change there whole entire life story after hearing that song. I know I would!
Fun, but Rarity should be lead vocals ... she was born to be a star, darling!
255939 Oh, just wait and see
255913 lol, so true
Kinda like how 'life won't wait'-ozzy changed my life. in the fact that I kept it
probably why Im so into ozzy
also, why the buck does it show numbers and not you're username
255970 idk, but after you post the comment it changes to the username. Its amazing how certain songs can change your life!
Not bad at all.
My one big problem with this chapter is pacing. Rainbow dash sees an instrument she hasn't played for a decade since "that fatefull day" and within two very short paragraphs she's strumming a storm. This is a pivotal moment in the story and some longer pacing and vivid imagery would be really good. Imagine meeting an old friend who helped you out of the worst shit in your life for the first time in over ten years! Something a little more reminicent of 2112.
aside from that it was fairly good. There were a few grammar issues, mostly misplaced or unclosed quotations. And sometimes I was confused as to who was talking. like
“Good to have you back Sugarcube, I was starting to get worried that I had lost my best friend.” Rainbow smiled back and with the most sincerity that any of the five girls have ever, heard Rainbow began to speak.
Youd didn't introduce applejack or say she was talking, so I could only guess by the sugarcube that it was Applejack. If I didn't I'd probably think it was Rainbow dash speaking.
Again, most of this is pretty good. I like how Rainbow backstory played out, and the forming of the band makes sense. Just work on your pacing and discription of important scenes.
25799 Thank you I really appreciate the advice. I have always had trouble with the pacing of my stories, but I'm working on it!
255939 Actually, wouldn't Rarity want to design the outfits too?
258292
That goes without saying.
DAMN, dis gunna get good
Sketch
waaiiitt
Did I just say sketch
Damn. To somewhat quote
herself... "What is it with you and having us falling of cliffs this week?"
325734 haha i have to keep you coming back for more right! plus, when I end it in a cliff hanger i feel compelled to write the new chapter sooner, so hopefully this time tomorrow, I will have the next one.
Plot.
Twist
Kbrony... I fucking love you, this story and how it's turning out. But... Now I have to impatiently wait for the next chapter.
325807 likewise mate, I'm looking forward to your new chapters as well. This story makes me get stocked, and I'm writing it!
When praytell shall the next chapter be released?
326950 tonight I really hope!
327299 WHOOP!
First? First!
getting better with each chapter! 
Shit has hit the fuck
339735 haha dude, I yelled, "You're damn right it has!" but out loud, than my dad freaked out at me for yelling. that just shows how much shit has hit the fuck!
339743 oh, Cr1TiKaL quotes work so well in these situations
339753 that they do, that they do
i think ill untrack this for a bit cause im getting frustrated with all these cliff hangers !!!!.... just when i think its all done its not..... aaaaarrrggggg!!!!!!
but will continue to watch this story..... u got me hooked
365217 haha I can see that, don't worry, next chapter, all of this reverb stuff will be sorted out, then i will tone the story back down toward the music for a few chapters, until i think of the next dramatic plot.
365285
ya i hope the next chapter is better and ends this DARK part of the story...
what have u in-vison for music???? i thinks calls for some acdc highway to hell( since her live till now has been that)
hope that next chapter come out soon.....
Curse you Plan B... Curse you!
366791>>365543 I think you may all be a bit confused, My bad as the writer, so let me clarify, Plan B is what Rainbows mom said to Rainbow as she did the deed, when her dad whistled three times, that was the signal for plan B, these two events were overlapping. hope that clears things up a bit.
367310
but i never read that RD mother heard that whistle she made plan b work with out him is what im readin
367401 you're correct, just a goof on my part
367409
haha ya.... i had to read it 3 times before i picked up on that mistake...... but where ponies so mistakes are gona happen
367310 I know haha, I just don't like 'Plan B' lol
this is sick
this is one story that i fell for, i really hope you write more soon, i think its amazing
-WW
370361 thanks man! I get a chapter at least once a week, but most of the time its sooner!
Oi i was a thinking, you talked about the Band roles and flutters role as a groupy, BUT have you ever thought of about a roadie?. A good roadie is some one who is strong, loyal, and willing to work LONG hours and some time even all night. I know this well, i was once a member of a small Rock band, we called are self "EARTHQUAKE" we were the best of pales, but are "Leader" was so self absorbed, he made ALL the decsions, After i made a comment about his Leader ship, he Found ways to demote me, every few weeks i got lower and lower untill i was put in the position as their roadie, I spent Days setting up AND clening up affter them. I decided to sit down for a miniute and he kicked me out as soon as my butt touched the seat. after that i decied to work my ass to be a good Roadie, NOT to Impress that jerk, but to work my nervers and build my strength. In sort what i'm saying is i know how a roadie and a band work. so my question is this, do you have a roadie in mind? (Sorry About the rant, i sometimes go PinkiePie when i get Exited.)
-WW
371500 No problem at all man, and I don't want to spoil the story, but a lot of drama will come in the future when the girls begin to stray from their assigned rolls and take on others. (*cough cough* Fluttershy singing Fleetwood Mac)