It has taken a thousand years of hard work, but at last the four most powerful of the Star Beasts - Draco, Cetus, Cygnus, and Scorpio - have freed Princess Luna from her unfair imprisonment and millennial slumber upon the moon.
Now, she will have her revenge! ...after five more minutes of snoozing. Maybe a little more.
This is a re-telling of "Friendship is Magic" Parts I and II, from Nightmare Moon's perspective, and with minions, because all bad ponies need minions.
Rated T for language.
Chapters (3)
Luna being a summoner, able to call upon the stars themselves for aid, just makes sense to me. Though a certain picture I found online may have inspired the idea; namely, this one:
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Note that the Star Beasts in the story above are much smaller than depicted here, though still larger than Luna herself.
245446 That's an awesome piece of art.
This first chapter was hilarious too
God, this was hilarious!
ROFL!
Keep up the good work!
"Artists would kill to be able to draw you free hand!"
this storys hilarious!
tracking
This is amusing.
This amuses me greatly....
You may live.
Do continue.
I like this new Luna very much, she's way more bro the the actual cannon nightmare moon. MOAR
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WOOHOO! AN UPDATE!
this story just keeps getting funnier
My god, it's actually like they're sisters!
Also, Luna's personality is freaking brilliant.
Tracking the shit out of this story.
Oh god, my sides. They ache from all my laughter. This story is brilliant., Like Sandman said, they act like bickering sisters should. I enjoy your style of humour and I hope to read more chapters in this hilarious tale.
more please. I'm desperately in need of MORE!!!!
also, we need Luna and Nightmare Moon smilies.
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Oh? So they're actually smaller smaller.
I was just thinking that since they're pretty much just empty space with some stars inside, that they can compress themselves down to a more...travel-friendly size.
Also, hilarious chapter and I love Luna's personality.
P.S. ~ Can't really blame Cygnus for geeking out over Luna, probably do the same thing.
Glad you're all liking this! I'm sort of actually writing it to cheer myself up about...stuff. And junk. So hearing it's appreciated helps.
I'm surprised I seem to have the bickering sisters personality down. I'm a guy, and I have a brother, not a sister, and we never really bickered. I guess I'm just channelling...something...? I dunno. I'm actually partially drawing inspiration for Luna's personality from Robot Chicken's take on the Emperor, though. Dunno if that explains anything.
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We really do. Also Tom. We need a Tom smilee. This is a thing we need.
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Please tell me there'll be more....
Also, theoretically you COULd have been channeling one of your multiversal counterparts, one in0which you and your brother were bickering sisters....possibly even Luna and Celestia themselves and, thus, would have gotten QUITE an accurate idea on how it'd feel.
That theory is the main factor behind the idea that all writers leave a fragment of themselves in their characters.
...I tend to babble on existencial philosophy at random, I appologize.
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Oh, I intend to finish this. It helps that I have the actual episode to serve as a guide for what happens when and where.
I...would rather not think about me and my brother being Celestia and Luna. Especially seeing as *I'm* the older one.
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That WOULD be rather disturbing.....
...oh crap now I got the image of Celestia as a nerd geeking out in her basement in my head....
*unrepentant Celestia fan talking here...*
This is hilarious! :D :D
I love this. So much. This is awesome. Bless you.
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rom laughing so hard!
Cod this is funny! I hope you make that the mane six fail miserably and NMM plan comes througth because this is freaking hilarious im crying f
267933 CoD isn't so good that you need to replace god with it!
. I love this fic. Didi I say that already? Oh well, I'll say it again. I love this fic!
Seriously though, I love this fic. Everyone else is absolutely right about the characterizations. Your writing is just perfect. Also, I noticed a lot of swearing, but, despite the fact that there wasn't very much in the last chapter, it didn't feel out of place. That first "fuck you" when Celestia was running in slow mo made me
Oh, whoops didn't mean to post this!
Or this
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Do you have a source for that?
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I've always wanted to do a fic based on that pic, but I've never figured out how to do it justice.
I'm very amused by your portrayal of Luna / Nightmare Moon here, by the way.
Well! That explains rather nicely where the zap apples come! And the more you know...
God I hope this updates soon. My sides... splitting...
poor Cetus, there.
Most entertaining. Just a few minor quibbles:
"What the Hell could keep Ursa from releasing her sovereign from a millennia of unfair imprisonment?"
Millennia is the plural. Millennium is the singular. Sorry, pet peeve.
"Maybe she had overreacted nine hundred years ago…"
Where did that last century go between chapters?
Aside from those, this is an incredibly entertaining story thus far. I hope Luna and company run into Ursa at some point. Oh, just think of how deliciously awkward it will be...
I need to get back to this at some point...
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On the missing hundred years, you may want to direct your attention to the bit at the end of that scene:
Wait, Celestia thought, just before a magical sleep claimed her, and she felt her physical body being broken apart and stitched into the sun. It has only been nine hundred years, right? Maybe I shouldn’t have skimmed Twilight Sparkle’s letter…
436337 Oh. Right. Reading comprehension fail. A derp is me.
Almost two months since last update? I hope you didn't abandon the ship, RainbowDoubleDash!
Anyways, amusing story, worthy of my track... I mean, favorite. The amount of swearing is perhaps unnecessarily high, especially in chapter two - in my opinion, if you had less cursing, their impact would be greater. Still, manly chuckles were had, not to mention a constant goofy grin
. Thumbs up!
I dunno. Much as I like a Precision F Strike (as in the slow motion "Luna!/Tia!" scene)
I love me some Cluster F Bombs when used to great effect, like when Luna gets a REAL reason to rage.
I hope you haven't gotten so absorbed in MPPT3K that this has fallen by the wayside. I'm looking forward to more.
Will this ever be updated?
I love this so much. So very damn much. Impossibly, absolutely, immensely.
Best part, along with the rest of it.
Tia! Luna! Fuck you!
Do you still plan to finish this one or is it dead in the water?
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Sooner or later I'm going to back to it, but I don't know when.
-...And also, uh.. the yellow one.
-My name is Cygnus :(
-I know your stupid name!
>>> Celestia had mostly ignored the letter, giving it a quick skim before firing off a carefully-prepared generic response
....Celestia is Blizzard Tech Support!
This story is amazing and I'm shocked that you work on anything else rather than this piece of perfection.
1220591 And two months later it remains unaltered.
This is entertaining. But I suppose after a year it's unlikely this will continue.
I know this was written first, but this Nightmare Moon is giving me such "The God Squad" Luna vibes that it's now my headcanon that this is exactly what happened in that universe.
That is hilarious. Though I wonder how she'll react to the Apples growing the Zap apples themselves? Her orchard is probably still there. Also Celestia forgetting how long it's been is classic
How the heck did I not read this before now? Epic. Epic. EPIC.
Too bad it's on hiatus, but still.. Comedy gold.
Those ponies know their shit. Nightmare Moon? Star Beasts? Immortal powerful goddess? Raise the sun or gtfo, I've got my scedule.
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I know, maybe the author of God Squad read this?
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I know, at least he has his priorities straight.
I can see why Celestia banished this Luna.
She's reaaaaally stupid.
I completely forgot about this one, ashamedly. Ah... it's funny. One typo I spotted...
Should be 'lightning'.
Oh, I forgot about this one! Good thing it was still in my "tracked" folder. Looks funny enough, but I'll have to re-read the first two chapters, as I really don't remember the plot. It's been so long.