Woah, this was so cool! Very clever. I especially loved the conclusion, it's fantastic!

...My bits.  Take all of them.  

This is probably one of the best things I have read. And that includes books! I dont think I have ever read a Fic and be permanenetly smiling all the way through. just BRILLIANT!

Crazy funny and laughing the whole time.

Now that that's over I would like to thank you for justifying the reason I avoid 99% of fics.

And I think I actually got dumber after reading Crasherdude's and AJ's lines so thanks for that.

But seriously it's a fantastically hilarious story. So here's a mustache as thanks.

Well I love deadpool love the 4th wall breaks great fanfic

This is easily the most amazing fanfic I have ever read. Of all time. For any fandom. Loved it!

Br@vo,

this is the contents of my brain after reading this

I want this to be an actual episode.

Holy Faust this was awesome in the best way possible

Amazing story, you definitely deserved a place in the top 3.

Also, 'fanfics actually happening but then everything is reset, only Pinkie remembers' is my new headcanon.

Listen to the Kamen Rider OOO OST in the background as you read this: It's amazing.

An OC story with a Ska OST is tops.

This was one of the most met@ ponyfics I've read. And funniest, too!

BRILLIANT! This is the stuff I have only dreamed of in my sleep! I mean in all seriousness, 4th wall breaking has always been my favorite from of story telling simply because it lets the reader to allow themselves to be immersed in the story. LOVED IT!

My favorite story yet.

Writting coomedy is hard, no wonder you had third place, this well thought out and the plot is brillant. Okay I am going to stopkissing yuor ass now, great fic though.

Wow thanks so much guys. Even if it didn't win (The winner was another comedy and they described my fic as the funniest one ) I am so thrilled to have nabbed third. You know that fifty bits is going towards pony stuff But honestly, the thing that means the most is all the great things you guys have had to say about this or any of my other stories. I realize that this sounds incredibly dramatic and praise fishingesque (adjectivized)...[verbized] but I was actually considering giving up on my novel before this competetion. This small victory plus all the support you guys give me have given me a much needed second wind. Thanks to everypony who voted and commented and thumbed (up)

This was totally freaking rad.  

The rise of Crasherdude was sublimely inspired.  

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I Made you a picture!

@Mr_Darkboy2010

I Love it! This is so the new thumbnail

Picture y u no update!?

>>295580295580 It updated for me. Maybe it's your cache or something? I've never quite figured out which cached stuff does update when you reload the page and which stuff doesn't, but that's my best guess.

Yep it's working for me too now

Oh god, my sides! They've busted!

Oh yes, if OCs can change personalities, they can probably do much worse if the author (who has 100% control of the universe) wants them to... Makes a lot more sense now. Is that why they can't meet?

>>296541296541 They can't meet because they simultaneous personality changes will conflict and cause everypony to go stark raving mad. Plus the universe will explode. Have a nice day :D

There are no words perfect enough to describe how awesome this was.

>>296828296828 So... no crossovers?

Alright. I know what kept you out of first place. Your style is nothing more than atrocious and your grammar is fundamentally lacking. The bit with the fourth wall breakage and the author (you) appearing limited the enjoyment.

However...

You clearly have a grasp on your story and you are consistent throughout. The delivery at the end was weak, but everything else was great. You have a knack for comedy. Hone your skills and you'll be an amazing writer.

2/5. Despite the lacking quality, I more than enjoyed this. Fav'd.

(If you'd like, I can go further in my review and point out individual flaws. While it wouldn't make a difference now, it'd help in future fics.)

EDIT: Okay, so I don't know what kept you out of first place. Not exactly, anyway. Still, though, at least consider what I said. This remains one of my favorite fics ever.

After finishing this, I shed a single tear for the awesomeness.

Anyone else feel bad for making fanfics now?

I mean, I love fucking around with Pinkie's psyche. But I never thought I could be hurting her... in real life.

*a single tear falls down Emerald Flight's face*

I recognize some of the references, but what fic had Deadpool in it? I'd like to check it out.

sooo, is this just a one off? or will we be seeing more of pinkies adventures in fan fiction?

I ask because the title: subtitle setup seems to suggest that, and also I just want more of this.

Aw, if this had come up as an option for me to vote on, it definitely would have had my vote. Oh well.

Oh my god. You are FULL OF WIN.

This was so cleverly written, I can't even find WORDS.

Write more, please. You're one of the few writers on my watch list.

That was fuckin' funny.

That reminds me of the "Round Robin" story from Daigakusai no Ranma. Very well done!

>>297175297175 I always thought that events in books and such were actually happening SOMEWHERE.

Genius, pure comic genius...aaaand there's not a whole lot more I can think of to say..

The grammatical mistakes (more like overlooks) were certainly overshadowed by the hilarious concept and completely quotable dialogue. Very, very funny. I was giggling the whole time.

The bit at the end was funny, but I think pulling in Deadpool might alienate some readers, and it definitely slipped into the realm of ridiculous. But pulling out the keys and bringing in the author was kind of clever, and I've always been a fan of meta. Fav'd.

>>298544298544 actually, I wasn't planning on a sequel originally, but I have been toying around with the idea. So to answer your question-- maybe.

>>303597303597 I only meant to point out that I was not the type of person who could be fundamentally lacking in grammar. And I agree with everything you say about Deadpool.

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This was great!! Loved the ending. Congrats for 3rd place!!

This was of the most bizarre, hilarious and impossible fics I have read so far.

Nearly all the time I felt like:

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But it was all worth it. And that ending. Typing '@' instead of 'a' was a nice touch. But how did you manage to write the epilogue with a broken screen?

Congratulations on a magnificent story.

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Cheesedeluxe? I don't remember him as a judge. Did I forget it . . . no, I don't see him on the panel. Huh.

You really shouldn't speak with authority when you have none. You don't know what made this story third place, you only have guesses, and you do not know what would have propelled it to first.

In the end, it was not the style (I personally loved it, word choice made the narrator sound like Pinkie Pie and suited the nature of the fic), not the grammar mistakes (all the stories had them and they were not counted much against the story itself), not the ending completely shattering the forth wall (again, I found Pinkie stealing the "a" key and the author having to write the epilogue with out it to be one of my highlights), or even Dead Pool (whose inclusion was handled very poorly and is the single biggest flaw I can point to).

The story won third because it appealed to a niche audience by its very choice of subject matter. This is a story for people who are avid readers of MLP fanfiction, enjoy Pinkie Pie's antics, have a bit of a zany sense of humor, and have encountered a number of bad OCs in their time The fact it won 3rd is a testament to how funny it was, despite the fact it was crated for such a niche audience. It is easily the best comedy of the competition, if rated by pure laughs, yet even if all the flaws were fixed, I don't think the subject would have allowed a placement higher than 3rd.

Serious kudos to you, Morty (delicious kudo bars filled with chocolate), the bottom line is you are really funny and have real talent. The fact you propelled such an obscure and odd idea to as high as you did is proof that you're really skilled at comedy in this format, and even parody. If the story is right, perhaps something that mimics an episode in format, I could without a doubt see you placing first in a competition.

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A minor nitpick, but Dead Pool wouldn't have been a Deus Ex Machina device since he really didn't do anything. Anyone could have tossed Pinkie to the cracks on the screen. As is, Dead Pool was an addition with no point or build up, and with minimal impact on the story, leaving the reader to scratch their head on why he was there at all, double so for readers familiar with MLP and not comics in general. I at least had the benefit of knowing Dead Pool was a crazy guy who also broke the forth wall. Walks through dimensions too, I guess, according to this fic.

I read that you had more ideas for him, Morty, but you had an artistic vision or some such you wanted to keep. Next time, try to compromise. Perhaps if you had the time and word count, you'd have him added in seamlessly, but in the words of William Faulkner, "kill your darlings." Your story will be better if you cut what you really liked for the sake of improving the thing as a whole.

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I can at least imagine what kept him out of first place.

Or, if you don't care for that answer: I have my opinion, and you have yours. Does either opinion matter?

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Umm, no. Not when you're stating them as fact. Let me tl;dr it for you.

"Alright. I know what kept you out of first place."

No, you don't. And I don't want the author thinking you do.

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*looks at panel*

Ain't I a tard.

In any case, I'm merely offering my stance on it. I, for one, thought the fic had pretty broad appeal, but whatever.

>>297175297175

Nope. It's not canon.

...okay, you got me. I felt guilty reading this.

>>324631324631

Ahh! As a reader, your experience is perfectly valid!

>>324706324706

*ducks*

I get it. I'm dumb. I apologize. I'd still like to think my criticism has some validity to it, though.

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Pwnt.

He just ripped you.

I have no wit.

>>324917324917

Well, maybe I fuck up sometimes. All the time. At least I admit it and try to improve.

In any case, comment boards are no place for aggravation. Those are what PMs are for. *wink*

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Hey, that was a shot...

lol these comments make me giggle

Finally got to reading this. Crazy fun stuff you got here. Nice job, and congrats on placing in the contest.

Thank Celestia you got rid of Deadpool. That was an almost perfect, genuinely hilarious fic first time round up until the ending, which (I'm afraid to say) was so awful and unfunny that it blew all good will out of the water. Deadpool, really? :/ It would easily have made the top two in the contest had the ending been as it is now.

Kudos for going back and fixing it up, because it is genuinely amazing!

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Thanks! Although it would have gone over the length requirement as it is now :P. I'm glad you FELT that it was improved. Bwahahaha

You know, it's YOUR fault. Writing a fan fic like that, buying a new laptop was your just desserts. Pinkie risked her life trying to save Equestria from your well written madness! Shame on you!

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I know :'c Pinkie and I have since patched things up.

Brilliant. Absolutely brilliant.

I always love when a writer comes up with a unique idea...but something like THIS, which not only tells a hilarious story, but does so while simultaneously being a "race against time" adventure AND parodying the hilariously awful fanfics that are out there..it's genius.  Haven't laughed this hard at a fanfic in quite some time.

Glad that this is the first fanfic that I get to favorite and comment on, it is well deserved.  Congrats on making it to EQD!

Dear.... God... Why can't I hold all these single tears shed?

THIS STORY WAS SO AWESOME THAT I DIED.

This was amazing and Clever. This sums out to about 99 % of teh OCs I've seen online. I have a feeling Crasher dude was your OC just for the sake of the story. xD The Moon.. Girl I guess will Remain anonymous, Unless she's you as well. xD I feel sorry for your laptop, but lesson learned for writing an accurate Fan fic =] The ending was just mind blowing.

What is this... -Spins around in chair and finds pink, formless mass- Oh, just part of my brain on the ground due to too much Pinkie Pie being Pinkie Pie. Now if you'll excuse me, I'll have to clean up my mess.

Excellent job man (or woman, if that's the case) I LOVED IT!

>>405698405698 Xennyk

Actually, both of these OCs were very closely mirrored off actual characters I've been fortunate enough to have found some pretty crazy characters to draw inspiration from.

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And that fact, shouldn't surprise me in the least. It must of been painful for you write like that. XD

Oh my god.

I mean... What is... OH MY GOD!

This was absolutely hilarious. Blatant disregard for grammar on a ton of parts, and it makes it all the more hilarious because it was intentional at times! Thank you for pointing out what's wrong with so many stories, and why people should set themselves to a higher standard. The way you did it was genius. This was hugely meta, and a huge (and successful) troll attempt at all those terribad OCs!

Excellent. You win this >> And this >>

No one noted the Cupcakes reference?  Well I just did!

Remember to chortle at the creepy, Pinkie. Think of Epic Cupcake Time.

"'ABU UAB HAY AN BASB KHJK SVSV B A  HAJ SU Y’ALL SOMETHING SOUTHERN' screeched Applejack."

I completely lost it at that point.  That may be one of the best lines ever written in any story, across any genre, in all of history.

Have a moustache.  

I think my brain broke from reading this

Nice job

About halfway through this my mind inserted another Stu.

And with a subdued flash a light, and strange biped covered in swatches of cloth and carrying a strange tube shape device landed a half-mile away from Ponyville. Seeing the absolute idiocy that had been added to yet another world, he noted the cause seemed to be two off-seeming equine-like quadrupeds.

Laying prone, he pointed the tube towards both creatures, made an odd motion with one of his hands, and a large crack was heard. Manipulating the base of the tube for less than a second, he repeats the motion that created the prior crack.

Flying through the air, faster than the naked eye could see, the cone-shaped objects speed for the heads of the chaotic creatures, entering through the base of the pegasus's skull, and stopping at the front, whereas the alicorn had it enter from the front, and didn't quite leave. The bullets had severed the brain stems of the two noisome creatures, right where the rejuvenation portion happened to be located on both of them. Both creatures fell dead, then quickly moldered away to dust.

Having confirmed his kills, the biped climbs to his feet, looks out at a strange pink equine that had happened to look at him, and mouthed: "I apologize for my species."  With that, he disappeared in another subdued flash of light, leaving naught but a series of strange depressions in the ground.

I has made a epilog 4 u.  It is bestest!  

And just when everything apeared safe and cool in the magical land of Equestria, John de Lancie apeared!

Twillight gasp'd!  "What and who are you, stranje monkey person with hair only on your head?"

John de Lancie said with menasingly, "I am John de Lancie, but you can call me DISCORD!!  MUWAH HA HA HA HA!!"

Twilight grimased and turned to Pinkie Pie, "It's another weird OC.  You're gonna have to stop it again."

But Pinkie Pie was fulled with the horror.  "No Twilght, it not OC.  It is Discord.  The REAL Discord.  And he is also called Q.  And he can break reality everywhere, even in the hyooman world because he is actually Q there, but pretends to be an actor for shits and giggles. And he is friggin too powerful for even me to resist."

John de Lancie cackled and the universe turned inside out and was all squiggly and weird.  "I R TEH TROLL KING!!"

Pinkie Pie sighed and said to Twilight, "There is no hope.  We ar going to die."

Just then, a powerful light full of power apeared and made Equestria normals again!  A thing that was like a pony and hyooman put togehter but really cool and not stupi-looking floated down and bucked John de Lancie out of Equestria!

(Pinkie Pie just sat back in abject horror, "Dear Celestia.  It's the end, as the Mayans foretold... The Unspeakable One has come.")

Twilight found herself instantly in love with this god-like entity of all-powerfulness, who was also really handsome, so handsome that many ponies of lesser status (mud ponies, mostly) were struck blind by his sheer handsomeness, who could flex his pinkie and make all worlds obey his will.  "What is thy name, Great Being of Absolute Power and Handsomeness?" Twilight said, growing hot and bothered just speaking his Official Title.

(Pinkie Pie pulled a small sword from hammerspace and prepared to commit seppuku.)

"Twilight Sparkle, my most fervent worhipper and consort.  We shall have resplendant intercourse later.  But for now, I shall reveal my identity to all the lands and dimensions!  I AM THE ALL MIGHTIEST OF THEM ALL!!!" cried the transcendent entity of absolute power, and Celestia and Luna and Discord all bowed to him, and the Fausticorn too because even she realized that this being was omnipotent, omniscient, and omnipresent and had achieved the level of omega god-mode.  "I AM... THE DEUX EX INSERT!!!"

(Pinkie thrust the sword into her abdoment and ended her misery.)  

THE END!!!   (wasn't it awesome?)  

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Thanks for all the awesome comments people I know I probably missed some awesome comments but I'm about to run out BTW Someone rating bombed me on EqD so if any of you haven't rated me there I would really love dat 6 star

Peace!

This story has only two components.  Since the two components are awesome and pure, unadulterated win, it works.

Crasherdude Awesome and Mooncloud Shadowdancer need their own series !!!!  I would LOVE to see a Crasherdude Awesome series !!!  He's so awesom and his moves are so bodaciously awsum !!!!

Love love love this story, by the way !!!

OH DEAR SWEET BABY JESUS THAT WAS AMAZING! I don't think I've laughed at hard in a very very long time. You sir are the king of meta. Abed be proud.

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Hah, I remember when I did this to the first chapter of My Little Alicorn when it was first uploaded and they'd forgotten to disable editing and everyone and their cousin was shoving random text wherever they wanted.

Excellent work, bro.

>>404693404693 Are you entirely sure? Pinkie can get a little if you know what I mean.

For a laugh, I tallied the total amount of times the emo one cried or caused somepony else to by her presence. Twelve. That's more than once per thousand words. I can just imagine this OC going through the entire fic sobbing between sentences.

This is clearly the best fanfic I've ever read.  I want more !!!!

“ABU UAB HAY AN BASB KHJK SVSV B A  HAJ SU Y’ALL SOMETHING SOUTHERN” screeched Applejack.

I was fully prepared to comment on how this line was hilarious, but then the bit with Pinkie completely shattering the fourth wall and stealing keys from the author's keyboard happened, and I just started cracking up and couldn't stop until the story was over.  Everything else kinda pales in comparison to that final scene.  And the epilogue using '@' instead of 'a' was a nice touch.

While I've read a few stories where Pinkie breaks the fourth wall, this is definitely the best of the bunch, and earned the most laughter by far.  And I love the idea that Pinkie remembers all fanfics and can see through the fourth wall, although it makes me a bit nervous.  The fanfic that I'm writing and will hopefully be posting soon certainly has some tragedy in store, and I can imagine Pinkie reaching out of my computer screen to strangle me for causing her suffering...

It was one of the best I've ever read; no doubt about that;

But I was offended by a 12-year-old's OC.

I'm 12...

The awful grammar I'm thoroughly used to, overpowering OC's for no apparent reason, somewhat okay if necessary ex: needs to fight a corrupt Celestia or other already OP character. But if I hear "shed a single tear" ONE MORE BUCKING TIME, SOMEMARE GONNA DIE!

Applause for the unique idea and similarly unique execution. I actually had to ruin a program to figure out what Ctrl + A + Delete does.

*Onyxjew944 shed a single tear*

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I laughed so hard, so much.

Just, awesome, dude, just awesome XD

>>856664856664 What does it do?

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Ctrl + A selects all of the page, or maybe just all the text, and delete, well, delete deletes it.

I keep coming back and reading this thing!  SEQUEL! SEQUEL!

Dear Princess Celestia: Today I learned that if you make fanfics with too many ridiculous OCs, Pinkie Pie will jump out through the fourth wall and destroy your computer. Your faithful student... well, at least a faithful brony... uh... whatever.

This was awesome.

But- if Pinkie Pie remembers EVERY FIC EVER, then- sweet Celestia, Pinkie should be scarred for life! Twice!

And thus, the world was saved... for now.

But the fourth wall is broken beyond repair. To be honest I prefer a deep gripping plot, but this was just plain hilarious. Simple, undiluted and harsh comedy. I love it :D.

This story is great, i love it

>>434371434371 abed meets pinkie and deadpool and together they have a picnic on top of the fourth wall

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I would go to that picnic. I'd bring the sammiches. It would be glorious.

wasnt deadpool in this story what happened?

Just... ... I- I don't... WHAT????

>>407389407389 Story... awsome... brain... screwed... up...

Please make more...

Okay wow, that's good. I noticed some punctuation and grammar errors here and there, but nothing too jarring. The fourth-wall breaking at the end was... EPIC.

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I honestly think a lot of it was intentional.

I gotta say that story was fantasmical. All my mustaches!

Mother of Christ! How many "single tears" can one pony shed?

HUNDREDTH POST WOOO!

That's way better than first. I don't care what you say. It has more zeroes, so it's better.

Remember when Applejack told you everything would be okay if you let go, when you were at the edge of a cliff on our first adventure as friends? You trusted her then, even though she could have easily just told you that Dash and Fluttershy were there to catch you.

I know, right? Did that make sense to anybody?

“YOUR A DUMASS!” said Crasherdude.

Yes, her clone of Alexandre Dumas often leaves me speechless, too. He's quite something.

I'm so glad his first initial was actually "A". I hate almost making a joke and then having to stop because it doesn't work.

Definitely one of my favorite over-the-top metafictional stories.