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Twilight wanders into Rarity's boutique one evening, and finds all is not well with the Fashionista pony.

One of my first stories ever, and in fact one of the earlier fics to ever be posted on Equestria daily way back in Febuary of 2011. Figured I'd upload it finally for historical value if nothing else.

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It's funny that in season two we learn that Twilight Sparkle actually has serious issues with obsessive compulsive behavior. If she and Rarity both got an OCD kick together, I shudder to think of the consequences.

It's very cute :3 though I'm a little confused, did she "get" OCD that time in the forest, or just found out she had it at the time? Because in the first case, Unfortunate Implications Hurray!

Also, I'm a bit annoyed that you put the numbers instead of spelling them. I've always been told that unless you're speaking maths, it's bad form to not spell the number as a whole. I know it's annoying in this case, but it bothers me.

Your music is awesome and so was that "sob" story :raritydespair:

That was really nice! I liked it! :twilightsmile:

Shit. Now I have to figure out if I have OCD or not. Fun Fact: people with OCD knows what they are doing is unneeded and stupid but if they don't do the rituals (like mines would be doing something 4. 8, 16, 32, or 64 times and making everything equal.) anxiety will build up to the point they do the ritual.

Oh, this was one of your first stories? Wow, it was very good indeed! Yet as Ponydora Prancypants pointed out, nowadays is Twilight the one with that disorder, so as interesting as the story is, as sequel couldn't fit on the canon.

PS: You meant 2011, right?

Daw good story. But How was this on EQD in February 2010 if MLP:FiM didn't air until October 2010?

Oh Rarity, you so funny! :duck:

Loved the story, by the way. It was "exquisite"! :raritywink:

Hello folks! Stalin and Co. are here, bringing yet another installation of Stalinview!

i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg Are you ready, crew?

i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg Let's do this!

i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png VOOOODKAAAA!

i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg Let's dig into Obsessive Compulsive Rarity by Squeak-anon!

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i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg First thing: text is too blocky...
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg Let's not be so nitpicky here, Pioneer Dash. Let's just enjoy a story for a whonce in a while.
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png Agreed! *hic*

"mannequin"
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg Stalin remembers, that Lauren Faust called these "ponnyquin".
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png You're hallucinating again boss?
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg What? What do you mean "again"?
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png Well, remember time when you hanged out with that guy who was obsessed with a tubs of jelly?
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg I thought we agreed to never speak of this again.
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png Sorry boss...

i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg By the way, "mannequin" formed from word "man". That word dont exist in pony universe, so it is entirely possible that mannequins are called ponnyquins

"Rarity tossed the dress sending it sailing into the fire. There was a distinct smell of burning fabric as the once lovely piece of clothing burned."
i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg Heh, just like you, boss.
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg ...What?
i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg Remember how you have used your old clothes?
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg It was cold, and i was out of firewood!

"“Um..well it was nothing, you see I’m making a gown for Princess Celestia, and it has to be perfect!”
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg Wow, that's a rare order. Concidering that Celestia is always naked.
i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg She has acessories, so she is not completely naked!
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png *fap**fap**fap*
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg Misha, what are you doing with that sound?
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png Putting ketchup on my shashlik.
i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg YOU HAVE SHASHLIK! GIVE ME SOME!
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png Oh god, i really should've told you that i ma...
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg ENOUGH! Give me some shashlick too!

"“Seventy-nine isn’t perfect?” Said Twilight."
i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg Better than 69 :trollestia:
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png ...I don't get it!
i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg Of course you wont.

“Ah, hello my good colt.”
i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg It's like saying "Ah, hello my good kid". Not a very satisfying flattery, you know...

"Various gold and silver pieces"
i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg All bits are suppose to be golden. I dunno about cents though.

“Let’s see, I’m sure I had a copper piece somewhere...” Rarity mumbled.
i42.tinypic.com/153u2rc.jpg Penny?
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png No, kopeika!

i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg Ok, that wraps up this story!

OVERVIEW:
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg This is a very good little story for evening entertaiment. Stalin likes these.
i40.tinypic.com/eg18p.png All characters are keepeng their personalities perfectly!
i41.tinypic.com/29smdg.jpg We are amused!
VERDICT: VERY GOOD! AUTOR DESERVED PRAISE

You realize that OCD is something you're born with, right?

I remember reading this story from back in the day, and after it I named you Bittersweet Squeaks. This is quick and enjoyable read for people who need a quick dose of awww.:pinkiesmile:

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Oops, typo! Sorry about that. Glad you liked it though!

365087

Yes, yes I did.:derpytongue2: Curse you fingers.

365223

I...I'm not entirely sure what just happened....all I know is I'm slightly entertained, there was a bear and a 69 joke in there somewhere and I may have just been complemented. I'm beyond questioning any of this, so I'm simply just going to say thanks, glad you enjoyed it!

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I'm quite familiar with it, the condition can be exacerbated by a traumatic event in the life of the sufferer, which is what the 'Lost in the woods' thing was. Though I can see where it might seem like I thought it was something you could 'catch'. Sorry for any confusion, hope you enjoyed the story. :twilightsmile:

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This, my friend, is called "Stalinview". I am doing those for stories i like. Details in my blog

365280

Huh, well that's an interesting way to do reviews. Very original. I like it.

365287
Thanks. Whistle if you need on on other stories
But is shall require minor feedback though

A very charming and cute story.

Great work. ^^

364790 i think being lost for such a long time in a place where she could only describe as being "unruly" and "unordered" got to her, i think it might be something akin to people who are afraid of spiders are uncomfortable being around anything that resembles one. so Rarity cannot stand anything that reminds her of the unordered nature of the forest. :fluttershysad:

365223 i lol'd so hard :rainbowlaugh: keep up the good work sir :moustache:

I'm getting a Death the Kid vibe from Rarity.........

364726 Actually canon Twilight shows signs of Obsessive Compulsive Personality Disorder, while this version of Rarity has proper Obsessive Compulsive Disorder. The former is about obsessing about being orderly, but it's the normal kind of orderliness. The latter invents new kinds of order, rituals that have to be performed. Twilight doesn't like when her quills are not in the quill drawer or on the desk, Rarity spontaneously decides that quills have to be arranged by color and size or in a geometric pattern.

In other words, OCPD is what people usually think of when they talk about OCD, actual OCD is what a discorded Discord would have.

I really like this story and I really could see Rarity becoming obsessive compulsive.

A few things that need to be fixed.

The story itself is a little to blocky. What you need to do is put a space or two between who is speaking and who isn't.

I also noticed when Rarity told her story, that Twilight just said, "Oh Rarity." I would expand on that part with Twilight's reaction and thoughts to Rarity's experience in the Everfree Forest.

Something like this would be good to put in that area.
'"Oh Rarity, it's going to be okay and I am really sorry that happened to you. " Twilight began to tear up herself in realizing that she felt helpless about Rarity's conditions. She also knew deep down inside that this would be a very hard topic for the depressed unicorn. Twilight then changed the topic...'

I also thought the story ended too fast. That also needs to be expanded as well. Otherwise it looks too rushed. I also would continue with this story but it's up to you.

It's in my favorites. :raritywink:

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Fair point, though creating a checklist for creating checklists seems to me to be a hallmark of OCD, and I have a feeling that Twilight has other problems as well. Her collection of Daring Do novels was not arranged in numerical series order, for example, but rather seemed grouped alphabetically or in some odd color-coordinated pattern.

Twilight has the ocd what with the needless worrying as seen in lesson zero and its about time.

365223
...This might be the greatest review of all time.

I personally felt that there wasn't an actual resolution to the story. I mean yes, we get to see that Rarity had a disorder and where it came from but the story doesn't really go anywhere with it. That's my only real grievance.

Oh, this was painful to read...

365223
I was going to read story...then saw your comment and decied I had been entertained enough to not even read

Wow, how long has it been since I read this one? This was a featured story on EQD back when the show was only just starting to gain momentum, wasn't it? That feels so long ago now...yet it's only been a year. Good to see it's finding new life on FiMFiction.

P.S.: Love the picture you chose! :trollestia:

This is a lovely story. I've always wanted to read (or write) a story that treats Rarity's or Twilight's obsessive-compulsive nature as a real problem instead of as a cheap source of comedy or drama. I'd be all for a continuation where they work on their problems together, but by itself, I think this story is just as long as it needs to be. Twilight's sympathy is simple but sweet.

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You have missed a very good story, my friend

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Come to think of it, insanity is a minor theme in both Soul Eater and Friendship Is Magic....

I did notice the lack of a resolution... but then again, Twilight MIGHT have developed enough sensitivity to hold off on offering help to get over the problem since merely ADMITTING could be seen as enough trauma for one day for Rarity.

A story that seemed simple, short and very entertaining at the same time.
I don't think it's so easy to produce a fic having those 3 traits. Congratulations. :pinkiesmile:

Oh yeah, and Rarity with OCD somehow makes much sense. Twilight too, for that matter. But we can assume she has canon OCD since Lesson Zero. :twilightblush:

Heh, s someone who has an OCP, I find this relatable.:pinkiehappy:

Well this explains that birds nest quite well.:raritywink:

I just have to point out the obvious.

Rarity is not OCD. She's not even OCPD. She's just prissy.

Also, OCD isn't generally tracked to a particular life event. It's believed to be neurogical in origin. For that matter, few if any psychological problems are attributable to a single, traumatic event.

If you wanted to do a story about a pony with Obsessive Compulsive Personality Disorder on the other hand, Twilight Sparkle is, literally, a textbook example.

The primary symptoms of OCPD can include preoccupation with remembering and paying attention to minute details and facts, following rules and regulations, compulsion to make lists and schedules, as well as rigidity/inflexibility of beliefs and/or exhibition of perfectionism that interferes with task-completion

This was a very interesting fic, and a good read. Nice job. :raritywink:

Ever since Look Before You Sleep, I've had a headcanon of a mildly OC Rarity. Maybe not full blown OCD, but tendencies.

Hence confirming what I've always though-Unicorns are nuts. Good story.

>>royalbardofcanterlot
U know Wat u meant
Twilight (before she became a princess) rarity and many more ponies are NUTS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
:twilightangry2::flutterrage::trixieshiftleft::twilightangry2::twilightangry2::twilightangry2:
This means that u hate many nice ponies:duck:
So why did u join fim fiction. net?:rainbowhuh:
Sorry for my rudeness but then y did u join?

Aw, poor Rare.

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