Epilogue
Epilogue
“Are you ready?” Twilight asked.
Rainbow Dash grinned at her and rolled her eyes impatiently. “Yeah, yeah, let’s do this already!”
Twilight took a more comfortable position cuddling up against Rainbow Dash; the brainwave outlet helmets getting slightly in the way. On the bookstand, under the metal orb, lay a stack of notebooks, the top one labeled Daring Dash and Rosetta Sparkle and the Mystery of the Jade Zebra in Twilight’s impeccable writing.
After planting a quick kiss on Rainbow’s cheek, Twilight pushed the green button, and everything went black.
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Yeah TwiDash
D'aaaw. That was a lot of fun. Can we expect to see any more swashbuckling Twidash shenanigans sometime?
And thus, Twilight Sparkle would be known as the inventor of the universe's most advanced video game console.
Very well done. I do find myself wishing to see more of their first date inbetween the previous chapter and this one, but this seems like a very satisfying conclusion.
The fun dream-romp adventure come to a close!
When I saw the story was ending in three chapters, I was kind of worried that the ending was a tad rushed. Thankfully, I was wrong(like usual) and the story ended nicely. Everypony seemed in character, from Dash and Twilight, to Daring and Rosetta.
Probably my favorite aspect about this, was the interaction between Twi and Dash. Allowing them to communicate telepathically was a neat idea and I'd have love to see some shenanigans where they were still adjusting to it(for example, an errant thought that the other was not supposed to see). I would've liked some more slower, tender moments like the date at the beginning, but all in all, this ended satisfactorily.
One twist I didn't see was Manehattan Silver. I expected him to be a bit sleazy, maybe trying to claim Daring/Dash for himself, but what you decided upon was much more interesting.
It was a great read, and I can't wait for more!
~Nuuk
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Thank you guys
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I'd be lying if I said I didn't have an idea or two for a sequel. Right now I need a break from this story anyway, so I'll most likely write something else first. After that I'll see...
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(it's funny cuz it's kinda true)
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but thanks!
Heh, guess I'm more interested in exploring the "get the girl" part of a story
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I'm glad you liked it!
Thanks
That. Was. So. Awesome
This is easily one of my favorite TwiDash fanfics, i hope you win that contest because you totally deserve it. 
And this was your first published fanfic, im impressed! Maybe a tiny bit polishing here and there (ok you had time limit i'll give you that) but overall this was great! I can't wait until i hear more of Daring Dash and Rosetta Sparkle's adventures 
2865591 it was said, Twilight cant cast some spells because Rosetta cant.
*clap* *clap*
A very fun story to read. I don't really have any complaints, so I'll just leave you with this: Good luck in the contest! I'll be seeing you in the combatant's circle!
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I'm looking forward to reading your entry (which I will only do after the deadline to avoid undue panic attacks 
) Good luck to you too!
Thanks for the praise
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Doesn't matter, they discussed it in front of the audience.
this story definitely earns you a follower... ME because this is just too good. Also what would happen if they had one page with a title, location, time of year, and the characters that's it what would happen then? huh anypony care to answer that question keep in mind this is using that machine twilight invented.
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Well, that is true... but no 1 would've heard it anyways
Unless, trolestia was using just trolling again!
Awww
This is your first fanfic?! thats way too epic to be your first!
I dont even think im gunna bother writeing fics.. 
i also LUVED EQG it vas soo epicshe! 
I really have to get some mlp styled clothes!
I LIKE SALT AND VINEGAR POPCORN
DERPY ISH AWESOME
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She's entering a fanfic (albeit one her friend wrote), she should be expect SOMEPONY to read it eventually.
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Thanks
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Your depiction sounds spot on
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Well, rd would probably have bad hoof/hand writing so the readers cant read it
But i dont think rd is gunna do anything serious with the books, but you are right, somepony will eventually find them
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I only just relised that as i read the read the rest of the story
Oops, my bad
Was alright. Felt like it was kind of missing some of the spark that Indiana Jones style stories have, and the romance was rather basic.
Wow... over 30k words of adventure and well-characterized romance. I would wish you good luck in the contest, but I don't think you'll even need it.
tis a great fic you have here hope to see more from you someday
Amazing fic, very emotional moments, good luck in the contest.
Awesome story! As much as I've loved all the entries I've read, this is the clear winner of the contest, IMO
And then to have it taken away 
Sobbing uncontrollably is the only reasonable reaction to such a thing, and you nailed it. Although I kind of wish we got to know more how Rainbow was feeling there, since she was the one with a crush on Twilight in the first place, and apparently was able to hold herself together well enough not to be searching for an escape route immediately after the book was over.
The ending snuck up on me with them simply leaving Silver to his fate and giving up the fight for the statue, but I love being surprised like that
Twilight's emotion, being able to kiss Rainbow whenever she wanted... so precious
Also, tail holding is just about the most romantic thing ever
One detail that seems to be missing is why Rosetta is adventuring with Daring, if she never did before. But I guess we can chalk that up to Rainbow's amateur writing abilities
It's amazing how similar reading is to actually owning Twilight's machine
I think that's why I have trouble writing, because I never remember any words except the dialog. Everything else is just run through my brain's word-to-image translator and experienced more like a dream, so I remember it like I was there rather than remembering the words to generate it... and then I have no idea what to do if I try to write something myself 
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and really glad you liked the "Twilight had her kisses taken away" bit 
Thanks for the kind words
To be honest I never even thought about whether Rainbow had a crush on Twilight all along, as I was focusing on the Twi side of the story. Sure, the prompt strongly hints in that direction, but I deliberately left it vague, since Twilight wouldn't know too much about Rainbow's feelings either. And, thanks to "the script", she didn't even need to know
I kinda like limiting my POV to one character, it gets less confusing
Also, thanks, now I kinda want to explore Rainbow's feelings during the whole trip
2889572 Write another! Write another!
Neat story. Loved the interactions between RD and Twi. And you definitely managed to capture a lot of that Indiana Jones 'fun,' though I did get a bit confused at the end with the whole final encounter. Between Twilight/Rosetta doing her thing and RD/DD doing hers, it got a bit hectic and turned into a bit of a writing clusterfuck IMO.
Also... I'm probably reading a bit too much into it, but the whole romance angle of the story is... rather sketchy, if actually thought about.
Earlier in the fic when the pair have their 'not-date,' and Twilight gets a bit too tipsy and willingly decides to kiss RD, and RD later says it's just "part of the story."
Twi sort of gets excited by the possibility of experiencing an actual romance, but... How much of the romance was real and how much was just the machine manipulating them into following the story? The machine evidently seems to manipulate or at the very least 'nudge' Twilight and RD into acting a certain way or doing certain things so certain key points of the story are fulfilled, and given that the story was written with the intention of proving that a Rosetta/DD romance is possible, so the romance would definitely take precedence.
Twi got all excited about the possibility of experiencing the romance in the fictional universe, yeah, but if she was anything but approving of it then the story wouldn't be able to progress in the way it's written because she wouldn't act in-character for Rosetta in the story, and god knows what would happen if the story can't progress. Probably end in some kind of fictional universe breaking paradox and blow the machine.
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and partly because I liked the idea of that lingering insecurity "was it real or was it just written that way". Because, at the end of the story, and for what is the focus of the story (Twi's feelings), it doesn't matter - at the end of the story her feelings are real, regardless where they came from (which I realize is a point I could have made a little more pointedly).
I agree, the whole question of how much of the actions while in the machine is kept vague. I did this partly because I'm a lazy git and ran out of time
That said, my personal idea while writing the story was that Twilight experienced a bit of a paradox: she went ahead and pushed the romance with Rainbow because she believed she knew that the story was going to end with her and Rainbow in love (which was a knowledge she normally couldn't have had inside the story), and that in turn makes them end up together. The idea was that she sets herself up for a situation she thinks is "safe", but in which she will develop real feelings for Rainbow Dash (a bit like in the wonderful Twilight's List
) So it was more Twilight who nudged herself (based on the circumstances) than the machine.
As for whether Twilight could have acted differently, I don't know. I kinda prefer to think of the machine as providing a very open framework (much like a pen and paper RPG that players can derail horribly), but you make a very good point about the romance taking precedence, being the point of Rainbow's story and all. I really hope the machine would, in case they totally break the story, just stop and not destroy the universe. Here's hoping those double-checked safety standards are reliable...
Anyway, I'm thinking about a follow-up to this story in which I'd explore the freedom-of-choice issues in more depth, but it's gonna be some time till that happens.
Now my head hurts because I spent too much time thinking about my own brain-spawn. Thank you for that
I didn't think TwiDash was possible. This changed my mind.
In my opinion, this is one of the top 3 fanfics of all time.
Great job on your FIRST FIC!
Here they go again!
This story was awesome and i found myself reading it in one fell swoop. Loved the action, the humor, and especially the romance. The scene were Rainbow confessed her fear of losing her friends, while flashing back to the incident that gained her a cutie mark, was one i found to be highly believable and would like to see in the actual show.
Most excellent.
You made me feel like a kid again, reading this, transported back to the gleeful fun of watching something like Raiders of the Lost Ark. Exciting, fun, action-packed, and sweet as all hell.
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Heh, now I'm really happy for getting you to like TwiDash
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Thank you kindly
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glad you liked it 
This was exactly what I was going for
What if Twi' and Dash ends up like in Inception, unable to differentiate the real world from the dream world ?
I really liked that story, very well written specially for a first time
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Thanks
Just finished the story.
My only real beefs with it were small errors like not using EM Dashes, and the politics between goats/alpacas and ponies was pretty boring and hard to follow.
Other than that, the adventure aspects of it were very nice. Only once did I question what was really going on, and that was my own fault reading the same line over and over again
The romance wasn't terribly surprising how it played out, but it was paced very nicely
Neat touch with giving Twilight only the magical capabilities of the character she was playing as
Definitely earned its thumbs-up from me, assuming there will be a sequel
Awesome story! Although I kindof saw the whole traitor Silver coming;
I read way too many adventure/mysteries.
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Thanks for the 'staches, good sir!
I will not feel pressured into writing a sequel. I will not feel pressured into writing a sequel. I will maybe...
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glad you liked it 
Must... resist... urge... to blame Rainbow for not being a very cunning writer
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First, thanks for your comments, and glad you liked it
Yes, this was never really about Daring Do and Rosetta. The way I see it, the moment they got into the story, Rainbow and Twilight replaced Daring Do and Rosetta (with some slight changes caused by Twilight's machine, like the magic, or other characters addressing them as Do / Rosetta, or the "talking through the fourth wall"). That is also why they acted "out of character" for Daring / Rosetta. After all, I wanted to get Twi and Rainbow together
Just awesome! Only a few grammar errors, but that's about it. I loved everything about this story, and it felt like a real adventure story, minus the fourth wall moments, which I enjoyed as well!
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Thanks a lot
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If they sound wrong or "off", they are most certainly not done on purpose and should be attributed to my imperfect grasp of the English language
If they just sound peculiar, they should still be attributed to my lack of language skillz0rz, but in that case I'll be happy to file them under "personal style"
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*cough*Sequel or more TwiDash stories*cough*
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Outlook good.
I love this kind of shipping. Everything of it. From the Gee I wonder how this'll end to the actual end, I enjoyed the read. Semi-forced-but-not-really-so-shipping is the best type of shipping.
The romance was pretty basic, and I wouldn't have it any other way. Long romantic introspections etc. would have detracted from that we're in a novel feel you hit spot on. Some words were a bit repetitive (eg. alpaca), but it kinda works at the same time. Recommended.
Mind if you do a sequel about them in the "Mystery of the Jade Zebra"?
THAT.WOULD.BE.AWESOME!!!!!!
Every time i find a new but still old story to read...
I dance.
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Completely rational. Also, results
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also, in Twilight's defence, she was too distracted to scientifically deduct what was going on earlier... 
Not even three chapters
Glad about the dancing
3248712 Its often a weird mix of Ballette (spelled correctly?) And Cat-Tonga...
My cats hate when im correct or am happy....
Wanna join me in some victory dancing?
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I can't for the life of me imagine what that looks like
Tell you what, I'll join for some victory dancing when my other story is all done (it's sleepy time around here).
Well I think that's definitely an original way for a romance to start. I mean it's not every day you're pretty much scripted to start liking someone, then decide to do it anyway.
*shakes head* Damn, the fic is over :( This was an amazing Twidash fanfic that I could not stop reading. It had a great plot and you used some awesome vocab. I could read this all over again and I would probably still be surprised at the ending. Like I said, amazing. This story is defiantly going onto my Devaintart faves list. Well done ;D
Also, you described the jungle, cave (ect, ect) so well that I could just imagine what everything looked like and felt like. I sure do hope you write more Twidash fanfics because you've written this one incredibly. :D
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:D Do you mean that in a good or bad way XD. Anyway, the little hovering Rainbow Dash here on Fimfiction just said: Yes, it's all true, not long after I read your comment
Good? no
Bad? no
Then what was this? It was SPECTACULAR!
Only thing i hawe to say about this is that i wish you wrote Marefreand incited of Girlfriend.
But that has so little meaning that you don't hawe to change it if you don't want to.
A gold star to you sir. TwiDash as almost best pair