Note: Ok... I normally don't ever go on here, but I am bored and I feel like attempting to write some stuff. This is a story that my school friends and I made up one day about what would happen if my non brony friend (we shall call him simply Alex) went to equestria and lived with the ponies. Me and my friend (We shall call him simply Dante) Loved the idea... Alex, not so much. The first chapter will be in the real world and the rest will be in teh magical pony land... and yes, this is supposed to be silly/stupid/weird. Will there be an end to it? I don't even know, whatever comes to mind when I write it. Cover image may or may not be relevant to the story... Also, While there may be inside jokes from my friends, This is generally a "non brony goes to pony ville" story, there is only so much inside jokes i can put in.
Was this s'posed to be funny?
I didn't even read
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One doesn't have to to get an idea of how bad this fic is going to be...
2834195 Judging from the comedy, yes.
The issue is probably not about textwalling, as I can read it just fine. As the introduction text is the very first thing a reader would see before clicking the chapters, I'd suggest trimming it down and leave only very interesting tidbits - picture yourself as a total stranger stumble upon this story, what kind of things would interest them?
The first chapter reads a little confusing to me, partly because of a character also use the name A.J. (You can give some explanation first to prevent this kind of confusion) You may also consider spend some words to setting up things to draw people into caring what these characters do, such as something unusual (or appeal to their similarity with the readership) about these characters. This way, people will be more inclined to catch what happen to them next.
Good lord....
2834709 I know it sucks
2834699 The only reason that there is an A.J. Character is because that part of the story where it took place at the school was taken from An actual conversation that me and my friends had. The A.J. in the story is me, but past me...
I like it! I don't know why everyone else doesn't. it is a little bit strange how you have it worded but I really like the simplicity of the characters and the fact that the one that gets sucked into equestria is the one who doesn't want to be there.
2867230 thank you for seeing my story into an optimistic view. I never ment to make this a really serious best fan fic ever/ best story thing made since war and piece. I am not the best writer in the world, but there are worse made fics out there. besides, Writing fan fics are supposed to be for fun/ amusement purposes right?
This story is a gold mine. I love when people put non bronies into stories, rather than bronies. It's always funny to me. I think this just got down voted a lot because non Brony Alex, people get butt hurt over weird things sometimes.
2945467 I think that its because of my poor writing skills. Which is a huge reason why, the butt hurt part... probably not. But I don't really see too much of "non brony" stories so I was like might as well try.
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3000911 Huzzah!
dante and alex..... seems legit
3209391 what do you mean? those are my friends in high school.