Eh, it could have been so much better. The story concept itself was fine but the pace, dear god it felt like a nascar race. You skipped entire scenes without so much as a paragraph change at the end. Just slow down man, nobody's saying you have to write and publish the whole thing in a half hour. Try to have the next story flow a little more smoothly.
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Very well executed, interesting storyline (though a bit on the cliché side of "typical love potion plot"), well characterized and not too gross in the clopping section.
Have a thumbs up.
pedofillya i see what you did thar
Glad to know ya post it here mate.
Keep up the awesome work.
Story was awesome . . .
. . . Cutie Mark. . . . NO! JUST NO!
HAHAHAHAHAAHAHAHA you are awesome my friend
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Eh, it could have been so much better. The story concept itself was fine but the pace, dear god it felt like a nascar race. You skipped entire scenes without so much as a paragraph change at the end. Just slow down man, nobody's saying you have to write and publish the whole thing in a half hour. Try to have the next story flow a little more smoothly.
I'm just enjoying muh beer and taking in this story. Yummy.
i cant believe you made cherilee and scoots sisers like g3's generation.