Big Macintosh was content as a farmer. Happy, even. But after a horrible accident on Sweet Apple Acres, he and Soarin are re-built, better, faster, and stronger than before. But will they be left alone to live in peace, or are darker forces afoot?
Hi, everyone. This is based off of a short animation I'm working on. Basically, Big Macintosh and Soarin' get the whole Steve Rodgers, Terminator, Inspector Gadget treatment. The violence isn't that graphic, so no worries. I'd love any feedback that can help improve, so feel free to post comments. I'll try to keep updates to a schedule, but you all know how life is.
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That was brilliant and you should feel brilliant. Write more, and I'll add you to my list of brony idols. One thing, if you are shipping, a lil' more expansion on the romance with AJ and Soarin' detail , a tad more emotion etc. Well, I'd give you some stars, but I think something ate them.
--Khroam
P.S Tracking!
FASTER. STRONGER. BETTER.
As for the story....MORE!
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Thanks! Will definitely write more. Soarin' and AJ's romance will be expanded, but it may take a while.
More please, more!
The pacing is fine, but your description could use some work. Some mild errors here and there, but they are forgivable.
Now, I wonder if Mac gets a love interest too in this story. A selfish part of me is hoping it's a certain pony
, but I digress. It's your fic. Write whatever you want. The SoarinJack is good enough for me. 
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Thank's for the tip! I will be more descriptive in the future.
btw, your a damn good guesser.
223751 It's more like a fortunate coincidence slash deduction.
Le stroking of ze beard.
Interesting...
Bah, who am I kidding.
F*CK YEAH!
I can't help but wonder if Soarin' was talking about Rainbow Dash.
Also, I find it weird that he talks to himself in his head. I thought it was a side effect of becoming bionic. 
Wings. Didn't expect that. Wonder what'll happen now.
I pray Mac doesn't become bitter.
Great story, I'll be looking forward to more.
They added wings? I see how that is convenient to make him a cyborg adventurer, but it is hardly a reasonable prosthetic for his situation. Was he patched up by an orkish Mad Dok from Warhammer 40K? (I think I see a MST3K reference, which is about as mad science, so...)
Anyway, we'll hear the explanation next time, I'm sure.
♫♥I look forward to reading what happens next in your story♥♪
246194 While I understand it doesn't seem to make sense, but I've got a few tricks up my sleeve.
He can fly? I thought he may be too heavy.
Great chapter so far! Can't wait to see how Big Mac does with those wings!
MacDash and SoarinJack in the same fic?
Methinks that the encounter sort of introduced that concept a bit too quickly, but I can forgive it if the idea of this story is action and adventure, which it seems to promise.
Description and emotions are written out pretty well. You're doing good so far. Keep it up.
Oh yeah. *grouped*
MAC DASH?
HELLYEA
310403 Yeah, I can see what ur saying. I'll try to smooth that out more next time. Thanks!
Interesting chapter. I expected a few different things, mainly dealing with Big Macintosh's prosthetic limps. Including his prosthetic eye turning red. But I love the idea of Big Macintosh X Rainbow I'm really looking forward to seeing those two together. But Big Mac can't walk on clouds or move them since he's not a real Pegasus.
Very interesting, looks like things are starting to pick up. Looking forward for future updates.
...Dang. That's quite the cliffhanger.
Nice chapter, but your leaving out pr forgetting important things. Namely the fact that Big Macintosh's new limbs are made of metal abd are very, very, VERY HEAVY! And he has a metal, chest, back and wings and etc. He must weight over 500 pounds! And Rainbow Dash pushed him off a cliff into a lake. He would have sunk like a brick...a brick being weighted down by bags of lead tied to it. And there's the fact he's all muscle, no fat. I'm not trying to be rude I'm just stating facts.
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Okay, you have a point. I was trying o covey that the metal made for Mac is suppose to be very light, seeing as it can bend with his muscles, but apparently I didn't. I'll try to make that more clear.
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I see, but by nature metal isn't light. Not even prosthetics. I understand where your coming from and where your trying to go, but the fact he has so much metal in/on him now no matter what makes him more heavy. You can't get around that simple fact.
There's also the fact synthetic muscles could have been placed inside and around his metal limbs.
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the structure of the mechanical endoskeleton could be made from such materials that are lighter than other metals when carrying the same load (i.e titanium) and be constructed in a particular pattern which both increases the compressional strength of the endoskeleton and reduces the overall weight of said pony, allowing an earth pony (like Big Mac) to fly without the assistance of rockets or pneumatic tubes. this also allows for the pony to be able to withstand the strain generated by the augmentations to strength, speed, agility and endurance.
TL:DR it's science! I don't gotta explain shit!
I can't wait to see RD trip all over CyberMac
i mean it.
those two go together like bacon and maple syrup; you don't know how they go together so well, but once it happens, you won't be able to accept an alternative.
on an unrelated note, bacon is absolutely DIVINE with maple syrup. try it, you won't be dissapointed. unless your religeon stops you from eating bacon, upon which you will be blasphemous. man I pity you religeous guys.
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Haha, that's awesome!
Unfortunately, i have to read your comment in the morning. Now I'm ridiculously hungry. Thanks for the support, though.
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Support is what i'm here to do, man. Fans always show their support. ALWAYS
you have a gift. abuse it. maliciously.
In one of my stories, I wrote that the Buffalo actually destroyed Appleoosa and Braeburn survived thanks to cybernetic additions salvaged from a pony-size terminator.
Yeah, it was kind of weird.
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That sounds cool! Braeburn seems to be uncharted territory, bet you can have all kinds of fun with that.
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Well, the Flim Flam brothers did say Applejack's family could help with the cider making.
Iron Henrys...Is that like John Henry from the American Folktale? And Instead of a Hammer, it's a yoke?
Btw, your apostrophes are a bit funny.
YESSSSSSSS!
And it appears Dashie's gonna make a lot of mares and more than a few stallions mad. Not that they're much of a threat anyway. Except for maybe Twilight, Pinkie, Fluttershy, Berry and maybe Rarity IF she's in her boutique.
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Yup. I always liked that story. Thanks for letting me know about the apostrophes. I'll fix those as soon as I can.
There was an extreme quality buff in this chapter. I don't know how to describe it. This whole thing suddenly became better, not that it was bad at all or anything. Whatever you're doing, keep doing it. You're great at it.
You have a really nice grip on story flow. Descriptions and pace don't detract from the alternating scenes, the way you handle it. You cut in and out between the two scenes fluidly. I can tell that you're either experienced at this, or you're just a natural when it comes to flow.
In this case, I can expect some great chapters in terms of development, from character interactions, to rising conflict of the story. The sheer talent you have promises that this will be an exciting read. And the MacDash and SoarinJack make it all the better.
Keep writing. You're just getting started.
454387 Thanks! I really appreciate it, because this actually is my first try at writing anything.
The first couple chapters were mostly setting everything up, so that's probably why this chapter seems so much better.
Nice chapter, I like some slice of life every now and then.
Seems to me that the action will be kicking up soon. That's the pattern I'm seeing, anyhoo.
Wonder how Rarity will act next chapter. It won't be pretty.
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that tends to be the way i write. I'll have a decent amount of action , then i'm all worn out of ideas, so i gotta calm everything down for a chapter. But yeah, action ahead!
And thanks!
" I woulda taken a spear to the...well, everything.”
Arrow to the knee reference?
Brilliant chapter, by the way.
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What in oblivion was that?
*wild comment appears, completes my day*
totally unintentional, though
Big Mac you oblivious genius.
“Don’t ya’ll think this is a time to serious the buck up?”
I need to remember that one.
a>run update.exe
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workin' on it right now. writer's block is a pain in the flank
And love...pentagon?
Whoa, BM the playa!
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The SLUTTIEST of pentagons!
Yeah, the bitch is gonna be figuring all this out in the end...
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INCOMING SHITSTORM!!! SHEILDS UP!
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: "Don't hate tha playa, hate tha game! Eeyup!"
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Agreed!
*Brohoof*/)
Wow another good, and long, chapter. Mac better keep his swag under control, lest we have a repeat of Lesson Zero again.