I enjoyed the first chapter and like the idea, so here's some pointers to make the story even better. Hope you don't mind
He would sneak around, and continue down the street a few hundred yards north of the Germans.
Russians use metrics.
Princess Twilight—hehe, ‘Princess’, that still makes me laugh a bit—hadn’t been seen outside in days, and Pinkie was elected by her group of friends to go find out why.
POW confusion. You can't really say "me" if you write in 3rd person.
I enjoyed the first chapter and like the idea, so here's some pointers to make the story even better. Hope you don't mind
Russians use metrics.
POW confusion. You can't really say "me" if you write in 3rd person.
I like where this is going