That night, as the broken and battered boy slept, his fate was decided by two who had watched him for some time. Twin goddesses, one light the other dark. The sun and the moon, Luna and Celestia looked on with sadness as, unaware of his watchers, Crevan slept on. Luna sighed heavily, the moon reflecting her sadness in the human world and dimming a bit. "Tia... Look at him, look at what his own kind did to him simply for his love of our world."
Her sister shook her head, refusing to look for a few moments before she relented to her little sister's words. "Luna... There's nothing we can do for him. Watching him like this is just going to break your heart... Even I couldn't stand to watch as they beat him and you know well what I've seen you do as Nightmare Moon." Celestia said, her voice quiet and remorseful. Despite her words she too wished that she could at least ease the boy's suffering. Luna drew in a long breath before letting it hiss slowly between her clenched teeth. "Tia... We could do something for him and you know it... We could take him with us... Bring him some place safe... No colt deserves that, human or not."
The two spoke at length while below them the world of human's did what it was wont to do, turn on and on. By the time a decision had been reached Crevan was so beaten down by the way his life had been stolen from him, and the fact that no one seemed to care at all, that he spent most of his time staring out the window at night. It had been nearly six weeks and still his parents had not come to see him after that one night when he lay unconscious and unaware, hanging to life by a thread. To Luna, whom the boy unknowingly looked upon every night, this only added to her desire to do this poor boy some kindness.
One night, not too long after his head bandages had been removed and his full vision returned to him he watched the moon as usual and sighed quietly to himself. "...I don't know if anyone or anything is out there... But please... if you can... Take me away from here... I don't want to hurt any more." he thought, wished rather, as strongly as he could. He was soon asleep, a few tears rolling down his cheeks as he wept for what he'd come to accept was a lost cause, namely his recovery.
That was the straw that broke the ponies back. Luna smiled softly as he horn began to glow, the dark blue Alicorn slowly taking shape at the foot of his bed. She spread her wings wide for a moment stretching as she continued to prepare for the massive undertaking that was to be this bit of magic.Her sister soon joined her, her horn glowing like the sun. As one they inclined their heads until their horns touched, white and dusky blue pointed tip to tip and their magics mingling. They turned their readied spell on the boy who slept on and settled back to watch as their magic did its work.
The first noticeable effect was the slow rise of the broken body off the hospital bed, Crevan's useless limbs surrounded in a gently glowing cornea of light. Slowly the casts and bandages began to deteriorate, slowly crumbling to a fine powder that drifted off lazily. Underneath the now nonexistent casts his limbs righted themselves becoming whole and unbroken once more.The magic however did not stop at simply repairing him, it began to alter him as well. Slowly he turned over, hanging with his arms and legs dangling twords the floor and back straight. His hands and feet curled up, slowly becoming hooves as the length of his limbs evened out and his spine lengthened slightly. Frowning the sisters bent more of their will to the magic, completing the rest of the changes in an eye blink. When they were done they lowered the sleeping pony to the bed once more and looked over their handy work.
He'd made a rather handsome pony, his coloration dark but it suited him nicely. His coat was a deep deep crimson color and his mane and tail a rather striking shade of black. His flank was blank however so no cutie mark interrupted this coloration. The sisters gave him another little gift, a pair of wings, wings that lay half unfurled in his sleep. Tiredly the two sisters looked to one another and nodded, and all three ponies vanished from the world of humans as if they'd never been there at all.
I wasn't expecting great things of this, but this is actually rather sweet (this chapter I mean, not the savage beating in chapter 1) and I'd kinda like to see more of this. Nicely done.
Considering how good your grammar is in the fic itself it is a tad unfortunate that there's such a howler in the title of chapter 1: I suspect you meant human cruelty, but as you've spelt it currently it looks a lot closer to credulity, which doesn't make so much sense. I recommend you change it before more people notice.
2636821 Thanks, I mostly work on this early in the morning due to insomnia keeping me awake. Seems that I don't catch all my errors, so thanks for catching that one for me. :3
Seems ok, other than some of the glaring spelling errors that can be seen from Keplar 22-B
The only excuse I can really come up with is if you're from another language, or you're really young, either way, this needs a pre-reader.
2636991 I never got hooked on phonics
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So... you're from a non-English speaking background?
2637025 Not at all, I'm as American as you can get, but my spelling has never been all that great. To be honest this is the first thing I've written and shared with the masses. Art is my forte, not writing... Still, a bit of prodding from my friends and this happened. Thanks for the feed back, I'll be sure to proof-read a bit more closely.
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Get. A. Pre-reader.
Focus on getting a Pre-reader.
2637054 Look, I appreciate the advice and I'll look into it, but I'm not the sort to go looking for help in something like this. If you want to volunteer I'll happily accept, but kindly stop reiterating yourself. If nothing else I'll run everything through spell check and cut out the middle pony.