When is Too Late?

The Great and Powerful Trixie is no longer the boasting mare of infinite confidence she once was. The years and the long lonely road have worn away at her, slowly seeping into cracks in her heart left by a lost love.
Trixie has come to Verdant Valley to die...

...but who is this pegasus that just trotted in, and what is she doing so far from home?

Written for the Equestria Daily Trixie Fanfic Event

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MoonLit_Assassin

MoonLit_Assassin #1 · May 23rd, 2013 · · ·

woah, loved this, very easy to read and keep reading, just a fan of grimdark in general but this seemed like a neutral ending, its implied that they stay together but kinda odd, its definitely original tho, good work, will there be more? Or does THE END imply as the absolute end?

FakeScienceMonthly

FakeScienceMonthly #2 · May 24th, 2013 · 1 · 5 ·

Ehh... It's a pretty weak story.

There isn't really any character building, so the emotional impact seems very low. Also, the questions these characters ask themselves make them seem like twelve year olds. What's with all this heaven stuff? And Fluttershy is just conveniently there for no reason. The whole thing feels forced.

Siras-chi