hmm... well, you definitely need to work on that grammar, for that I suggest reading alot.
I'm somewhat good at writing something without a grammar-nazi breathing down my neck about it, and that's only because I read so often.... the pacing feels a biit forced, but just a tad, so not really a problem there... consructive criticism aside, I simply love the plot you've got here, even though I've only read the first chapter so far.
One favourite - because I can only fav a story once . It is my gift to you, author!
"Yes its Leviathan." he said turning he began to walk away but the world went black and he fell on the ground the toxin had paralyzed his body the mane six and Spike rushed forward looking down at the dragon then began to pick him up and carry him to the hospital to be treated for the toxin.
Imma call 'im Levi for short. Reminds me of AoT/SnK
hmm... well, you definitely need to work on that grammar, for that I suggest reading alot.
I'm somewhat good at writing something without a grammar-nazi breathing down my neck about it, and that's only because I read so often.... the pacing feels a biit forced, but just a tad, so not really a problem there... consructive criticism aside, I simply love the plot you've got here, even though I've only read the first chapter so far.
One favourite - because I can only fav a story once . It is my gift to you, author!
Imma call 'im Levi for short. Reminds me of AoT/SnK