i will hopefully be able to write as well as the others if i start to write stories
you are a Guardian you protect the ponies who bear the elements of harmony and fight in wars that happen between the ponies and the other races. The guardians were thought to be all gone you are from the family that is the last of the Guardians you accept Princess Celestia's request to help Equestria in it's time of need. The ponies are headed to war the Princesses don't want to admit it, but they know it's true it's time for you to fulfill your destiny.
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Well then, what to say...
It's a good plot, i'll give you that. The ideas pretty good, there's just some important stuff missing.
I think you leapt in a little to quickly, but I won't complain about that much, it's your fic at the end of the day.
I recommend you read this handy guide to get a good idea of writing your fic.
Like I said however, it's your fic. Listen to me, or punch me in the face. Your choice
The description is just... no.
Learn to spell and use grammar properly.
That plot is also really overused. Just saying.
2558594 thank you especially for the link for the guide, but I think I'm just gonna stop I don't even know why I even tried I'm horrible at everything I try sorry I wasted your time with this fic.
2558680
Don't be like that man!
We were all new once and you don't become a good writer over night!
My advice would be to take things slower and look at fics done by writers with experience doing these things. Take notes on how they wrote their stories and work your way up from there!
Aww yeah, give motivational speech like a boss!2558680 Yo. Don't quit because you got a negative response. Get an editor and improve your skills. Put effort in, get results out. Everyone's got to start somewhere.
2558616 okay then can you give me some examples so I know exactly what is wrong and what is bad about the description if you just say what you just did I can't learn from my mistakes so if you could tell me that would be great.
Ya' can't quit comrade. I remember my first fic ending up like this, but I didn't quit and I produced probably one of the most original OC x Applejack stories (what a rarity) to date (someone mind checking on that for me?). Anyways, DO NOT GIVE UP. There's people here that can help you, and I'm willing to lend a hoof with editing if need be.
2558680 Yes, you are horrible. Do you know what I do with people that are attention whores, and beat them selves up so that other people tell them they are good? I agree with the attention whores. You are bad. So bad infact, that you should go kill yourself. No one likes a pessimist. And no one likes an attention whore. Especially not a pessimistic attention whore.
2559048 well if you're willing to help would you be able to tell me what is wrong with my fic mainly I found people saying grammar errors and spelling errors but I haven't found any spelling errors and I was never the best at grammar but I'm try for this but if you would like to help thank you it would mean a lot.
2558680 Continue it for the lulz
2559055 I am not trying to be an attention whore and I'm sorry if I make you mad but I am a pessimist I've been made fun of a long time and it made it where I don't look for anything good in life anymore I try but I can't sorry if I offended you.
2559074 Alright, whatever, go cut your wrists in a corner, just don't tell us about it.
2559079 I am not an emo or goth and I don't cut my wrists
2559082 Fine then, Just be a little whiny bitch somewhere else, No one likes a pessimist, pessimists make the people around them feel like shit, or in my case, enraged.
2559087 then just don't talk to me or in this case don't message me that ain't my problem you keep coming back for more.
2559087 No offense dude, but you're being a HUGE prick
2559098 "Ain't" Isn't a word, you dolt.
2559110 if "ain't" is not a word why is it in the dictionary here are some links
http://www.merriam-webster.com/dictionary/ain't
http://oxforddictionaries.com/us/definition/american_english/ain't
http://dictionary.reference.com/browse/ain't
http://www.thefreedictionary.com/ain't
2559109 *sigh* You can't just insult me, then say "No offense" and think I won't take offense. Imagine if someone said "I want to murder you and your family, but no offense" It doesn't work that way. And, He deserves it, Literally. He said that to get attention, but I just gave him negative attention instead of the positive attention he wants.
2559120 I have to admit, you got me there. Still though, your story sucks, and you should go kill yourself for being an attention whore.
2559125 Your parents didn't love very much did they is that why you must attack a person over the internet you could have just said a comment out loud to yourself and continued on with your day, but no you had to do this I don't really see a need in this so I will be the bigger man and stop thank you and have a good day, Checkmate.
2559152
I assume they did, I mean, I was born wasn't I?
Yes, be the bigger man, and go slit your wrists. Also, thats one run on sentence there.
Checkmate.
2559168 I already told you I don't cut myself don't make assumptions and by the condoms can break and alcohol can play a factor. I'm just saying so get facts if you are going to fight someone.
2559182 I thought you were the bigger man, and you weren't going to respond? Who's big now?
And yes, I am a mistake, and adopted, and my birth mother did drugs while she was pregnant with me. And? Why should I care what some random person thinks about me? I'm only really doing this because you keep responding back with angry comments, and it amuses me. I just love drama.
2559055 Dude, not cool.
2559197 I'm mainly doing this now because I find it funny and then you get dark and gloomy and you tell me to go cut my wrists this ain't fun anymore man.
2559203 And there is the drama that I oh so love. Seriously, ever heard of a troll? Damn, you are stupid.
2559209 I know what a troll is I may not be the smartest but I'm not that dumb anyway this is my last post to you so have have I will miss you you helped me smile a bit I will reference a movie you get 10 points if you guess right "Thank you for creeping up my night and Jesus be with you. You know you are never alone when you are with Christ." I will give you a hint it has a talking teddy bear. bye
2559239 I'm not sure if you are lying, because you already said you would stop responding. You are obviously stupid.
i.imgur.com/0bIdw.jpg
This comment thread is great.
2559245
Oh, my hell. Dude, knock this shit off. If he wants to respond to your shitty comments with a light and humorous response, then let him. Don't call him stupid. Not everybody is going to think like you do and do things the way you want them to, but that doesn't mean that you have to be a complete and utter prick. If you don't like this story, then give him some constructive criticism, not your bullshit. If you don't have any good ideas for him, then go somewhere else. Even if it is your honest opinion that you're giving, that doesn't mean you have to say it in such a dickish way.
2559430
This is why I call him stupid, and this is why you are stupid. I've already established I'm a troll, yet you guys keep trying to reason with me. My god, what in the ass is wrong with you people?
2559445
If you're a troll, then fuck off. I really don't care if you're doing it for the drama. You have no right to assume that I am academically inferior to you.
2559445 i kill with kindness if I could I would give you a hug and guess what YOU AIN"T GONNA STOP MY FUN I LET MY HATERS BE MY MOTIVATORS.
2559460 Well... You seem pretty stupid.
2559463
Oh, so you lie yet again. You know, I'm not sure if you can be trusted anymore...
2559487 you can't trust me I'm a fuckin teddy bear it is from the same movie as before do you know
2559481
I could say that about you, and I bet you'd get pretty pissed. Is this really gonna come down to a fucking name-calling squabble?
2559494 That grammar gave me cancer. Also, I'm pretty sure there should be some commas somewhere in there.
2559502 You are honestly retarded. Let me guide you in the right direction. Leave. Stop responding. For the love of god, I'm a troll, yet you give me food. You are retarded.
2559503 HAHAHAHAHAH do you actually think I care lol
2559522 Well... Grammar over the internet usually expresses how smart one is... So I suppose you don't care, I mean, you respond to a troll, you made this horrible story. Seems pretty stupid to me.
2559121 So because he has low self esteem/confidence/etc. he should 'cut his wrists in a corner, and not tell anyone about it' Its shits like you that drag humanity down with your piece of shit moral values
2559528 yeah i know you are a troll that is why I keep responding because I love you man love and tolerate,
2559533 Yes he should. No one likes a attention whore.
2559539 No, an attention whore says 'I am a piece of shit! Please pity me and give me attention!' He is just doubting his writing abilities and probably has low self-confidence
2559539 raises hand* I have a question how am I an attention whore I really don't care how people feel they can like me hate me I don't really care either way just so you know
THE MORE YOU KNOW
2559553 I'm assuming that the whole sentence there was a question since there was no punctuation...
2559550 Which is what he did.
2559566
Low self-confidence and self esteem
Words said often by rookie writers who have a bad first fic
After that, he actually gains confidence after he realises that you're nothing but a sad troll and a prick