The mane six has been friends forever and ever and ever- ever since Twilight came to Ponyville. And, they know that if they're split, the elements of harmony is no more right? Discord's back to mess that all up.
Discord wins- the round for now. The ponies are all separated, no longer friends. But Twilight's not going to fall into the dead pit; she's going to fight- fight to sacrifice her friends "no more".
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Wow, keep this up I love it so far.
206689 Thanks so much! I'll be tracking you too. I love my fans~
I'll be working on the next chapter- except it'll be longer.
Thanks again!
-DeadlyRose
Now that was interesting. Good start, and this is one of my favorite concepts. Keep it up!
This is pretty good.
You should probably change it to "Discord, who was a statue, crackled." Actually, find a better way to phrase that instead of just stating "he was a statue." And remember that, while Discord is evil, he's mostly just chaotic and has a twisted sense of humor. You're making him a bit too dark.
Celestia's dialogue could use some improvement. She's more calm and regal. Even if she's worried about Discord's return, she'll still carry herself with grace.
Other than that, you've pretty much got everypony in character, so I commend you on that.
206843 I'll fix the small errors. Then it will be perfect!
206843 Celestia actually worried because she sorta knew evil was going to happen. She just doesn't want anything to happen to the six mares afterwards. And as in the picture, Discord is very evil, and even if I tried to make him funny, I can't cause I have a bad sense of humor.
Any more comments?
209858 We comment when you give us reading material.
226494 So that means more chapters huh? ON IT. Will be on by this or next week. Pinkie Pie promise. What was it...? Cross my heart, eat a fly, stick a cupcake in my eye? LOL
226728 *Charges Kamehameha* I'll hold you to that.