A good action and adventure read.

Biggest suggestion as of this comment is to just get it proofread. (Loooooot of spelling mishaps, unfortunately.)

Still, gets a like.

really now. I have 8 views, but 9 thumbs up and down, at least read the story before you judge.

and now I have 5 thumbs up, and 5 thumbs down. but still 8 views... if there's something you don't like about the story, tell me. If you're not going to bother to even read it before passing your judgment, then just ignore it.

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Seriously, this is the exact shit I was talking about. If people don't think this is a sign of Fo:E hatred, I don't know what is.

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I have to disagree in this case. The number of views is completely unreliable in the first twenty-four hours after posting. It is likely the story has much more views than it claims.

[Edit: Also, you misspelt hoohah in the description.]

It was a real interesting read. The only real problem ( Considering the story was so intersting and it does seem you put in an effort to keep them as few as possible, so I could consider it a small problem.) was the spelling errors happening here and there in the story.

What I like about this story (and it's accompanying story) Is the Metro world theme. Which is interesting because the underground life of the Metro seems so close to the Vaults of Fallout, but with more grime and dangers then a stable Vault. Which you seem to place in well in the two stories, while keeping elements in it that make it seem like the society their eking out isn't just barely surviving. but actually managed to make a thriving community under the islands. Though they certainly came close if the beginning of it is any indication.

I though love how the cola in this story had a rather interesting effect on the DJ telling this story. Also, the story of the cola has a bit of reminder of how our actual Coca-cola had it's beginnings.

Flux, Taint... Whatever you want to call it, it sure got around Equestria, didn't it?

6171694 The general idea I had was that after a hundred years they would have stabilized a way of life, and after another hundred years they'd have a real society going. Underground the situation would be stable enough for them to adapted unlike the surface were things were in a content ebb and flow of change.

As for flux, and it more nasty counterpart taint, I was going by PH standards, and have it used in most common products during the wartime. So it's logical step that the cola company would use it to cheat a little, and accidentally make an abomination.

Ah a nice "dungeon" run!