Aug
12th
2021
I'm tired · 6:13pm Aug 12th, 2021
I have read your comments and respect all your views. Sometimes I get things wrong and I mess up, I'm only human after all. The last chapter will be re-written tonight and the next few days. First, my views on Sweetie.
She has abandonment issues and basically feels like no one wants her. Her parents, Rarity, she just feels like a burden and that is why she did what she did to Rarity. She wanted to make her see things from her point of view for once but I agree with your views, it is to forced. I need to sit down and have a think about everything.
I liked the chapter
Well there's at least one. Thanks I'm just getting a number of criticisms and I just don't know what to do. I'm struggling writing wise badly and what people don't see is me batting away at a computer for hours and hours barely getting anywhere or cutting into my sleep time to write more as quickly as possible so people don't have ages and ages to wait. GAH, I'm all over the place right now, we'll see, maybe I'll just re-write a section into the next chapter clearing he air a bit and trying to please everyone. I don't know. Sorry to ramble, I'm just a mess right now with this. I think I'm just going to take a few days to think things over and decide where to go next.
I think what got a lot of us was Rarity's change being permanent. Here is way to change that without having to get rid of Rarity having freak-out:
At very bottom of the note in the box, in tiny print that Rarity doesn't notice as she is freaking out:
Just kidding. It will wear off by Hearth's Warming.
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None of us want you overworking yourself; that can lead to burnout and kill the story completely. But definitely stopping to think about the direction of the story is a good one. You mentioned in a previous comment that you liked to give the story extra spice, but those moments shouldn't be everywhere in the same story. The big change with Hermione was the spice the story needed to go forward and didn't need the change with Sweetie. I can understand it can grow boring writing classes and whatnot, but there are other ways to make things more interesting without resorting to such big changes. The thing this story does best is its characters and the interactions and developments between them I find are the most interesting. Their troubles and drama are enough without throwing in constant danger and chaos whenever things get dull. You have so many characters to play with that you don't need those big spice-up moments, you can do more than enough with what you have.
Still, take your time with this as well and let the story flow naturally. Maybe even reach out for a pre-reader or editor that you can bounce ideas off of to keep the story on track. Keep up your mentality and write in peace.
Only thing I saw wrong with it was the permanent tf. I could understand an a undetermined amount of time.
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I'm already thinking of how to change that. It'll be a prank that'll only last a week.
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Thanks, these words mean a lot and its time for Sweetie's big talk next chapter.