The Greatest Treasure: A story I want to continue but I'm unsure of what to do next · 1:41am Feb 28th, 2018
{First of all, I want to apologize for not writing all the romance blogs yet. College and my own insecurities have basically made me nervous about posting them. I've done the Sexuality and Harem blogs, so hopefully they'll be up. I'll just do them as they come to me then. With some added Shimmerverse blogs to boot.}
Now a lot of you people are eager to read more of The Greatest Treasure. It's my most popular story I have. I know I haven't updated in months and honestly, I am very sorry about that. I never want to discontinue this story unless I actually get to the conclusion. I want to finish it both for you all and for myself. Now why haven't I updated? It isn't that I have lost steam. It's partially due to college but it's also that, well, I'm unsure of what to do next. I have the ending planned out and everything there, but right before? There's just a few things I'm unsure of what to do or drawing a blank. It's really frustrating. I'm unsure if I should just do a time skip or something else.
So a part of myself wanted to ask your opinions, my faithful viewers. Do you have any suggestions, like something you want to see or the characters to do? It might help spring forth a new chapter or some new ideas I can work with so I can bridge the gap more smoothly. Still, I just want to let you all know that I haven't abandoned this story and want to continue.
So feel free to comment your ideas and... well honestly what you like about the story and such? Maybe a little moral boost would be good too. 
Until next time, I hope you all take care.
Do what you feel is natural for the story
Needs more combat. Have the nightmare fight things. Idk, i just really.like violence.
Well, I'm not sure where in the hobbit storyline this takes place. maybe during the Desolation of Smaug, instead of seeing a ruined Dale, they see the Lake town citizens living there. they could try to bar entry to the Dwarves, since Smaug is sort of good now, but the Company would sneak by. Then Bilbo could find the secret entrance but is confronted by Celestia and Smaug. IDK where else this could go next those.
If Celestia doesnt give a live birth and lays an egg, maybe Bilbo could mistake that for the Arken Stone. this would get Smaug into a rage as he hunts down the Company to rescue their child.
Suddenly: Melkor.
No but seriously, just dig around in Middle Earth's mythology a bit. You'll find something :3
I would say to downplay the non-Middle Earth parts of the story as much as possible and get the Nightmare Moon stuff wrapped up as quickly as possible. The point of the story is how Celestia and Smaug play off each other with the impact that has on the larger world of Middle Earth as a secondary point because you can't ignore the impacts a change that big will have on the setting. Everything else is fundamentally a distraction, and as a result the story would have been much stronger if you never introduced Nightmare Moon and ignored the Equestrian side until the main plot was over (meaning the major players have found a new equilibrium and the Ring is destroyed) and it was appropriate for them to offer Celestia a way home (and possibly set up a sequel with Equestria and Middle Earth adapting to each other).
I just want to see more of Smaug the unintentional Wrathful Protector of the people of Dale.
The strength of the story is the interaction between Celestia and Smaug. The rest should be a result of it or give a direction to the back and forth.
Basically, I just want the story to continue, and I trust you enough as an author not to ruin it in the process. That said, I personally think that the story itself needs to push forward, and that the focus needs to be less on "MLP" and more on "The Hobbit", at least until the ponies become directly relevant to the plot.
After all, this is a "Celestia in Middle Earth" fic, not a "Smaug in Equestria" one.
You could have Celestia get weird cravings, like she starts munching on some gold coins from Smaugs hoard. And then Smaug sees her and goes "What?!" both a little mad questioning because she is eating his hoard. Then she tells him to try it, if not the gold then maybe at least the gems and teases him into it by telling him all the dragons she knows love eating gems. And he couldn't possibly be unable to do something every single dragon back home could do, could he?
Or maybe she gets cravings for some odd human food and Smaug doesn't know what it is so he sends Thrush out to gather all information he can before Smaug emerges from the mountain and orders the people of the lake to bring him this Carrot cake (only an example). But the people tell him that they simply don't have the resources to make these things so Smaug decides to tell the giant eagles to go and steal those resources because he can't leave the mountain or pregnant Celestia. But because they are Giant eagles they bring back a boatload of resources for the people, like they grab a full big farms worth of cows, sheep and various vegetables. And then Smaug gets his Carrot cake and a happy Celestia while the people of the lake get a new farm out of the deal.
A bath chapter. Celestia complains to Smaug about feeling dirty and unable to get a decent bath as she is stuck in the mountain. So Smaug grabs a pretty big cauldron of dwarf origin, flies over to the lake and fills it up before flying back. However while he was away Tilda walked in to say hello to Celestia. Smaug decides that he can barely leave the mountain since somebody managed to get in while he was barely away.
Then the Bath scene:
" I have brought you a bath." Smaug said as he put down the full cauldron next to Celestia.
" Oh? Is it heated?" Celestia said as she rose from her resting spot.
" Easily fixed." Smuag answered before letting a spark of magic heat up the water.
" A bath in a cauldron full of hot water? If i didn't know better I'd think you were trying to eat me." Celestia said while throwing a smirk towards Smaug.
" Why just look how much you've been fattening me up." She continued while pointing towards her gravid belly with her wings.
" You've practically stuffed me like a turkey." She finished with an even bigger grin on her face.
" It is what i can get you without leaving you for too long and if you don't like it then you won't have any bath!" Smaug growled back at her.
" Sometimes you are just no fun." Celestia said as she rolled her eyes and turned towards the cauldron. " This bath will do just fine." she said before once again turning towards Smaug, this time with a beautiful smile on her face, "Thank you, Smaug."
" You're welcome," Smaug replied as he straightened himself out a little before asking, "Now tell me, what is a Turkey?"
Scene continues, Celestia gets in the bath, enjoys it, convinces/teases Smaug into turning into his alicorn form and joining her and he also starts enjoying the bath.
Smaug then decides that baths are something that should happen often, but he can't leave the mountain too much while Celestia is still pregnant so he decides to grab all big containers capable of holding water within the mountain (like the massive cauldrons or smelting pots that dwarves have), throw them outside and tells the giant eagles to fill all of them with water from the giant lake and stash them nearby aka the town town of Dale. He also tells them to refill them whenever they are left empty. As such Smaug now has enough water for a bath whenever he likes and the People of Dale now have a safe and easy way to get water.
I also want the eagles to negotiate with the people of Dale to turn one of the containers into a massive birdbath fit for the eagles.
I think until you get to the climax, you can focus more on Celestia and Smaug. Theirs is the key relationship in the story, and Celestia manipulating Smaug into being nice gets cuter every time.
Oh man, I've had the same problem with my own story.
These are some questions that I asked myself:
- What motivates the characters to get from situation A to situation B?
- What keeps them away from it and what could help them? (Allies/Items/conflict/emotions/coincidence/plans)
- How do I foreshadow aspects of the conflict that is ahead? (Because in my case that was the connection between A and B)
- If a lot of time needs to pass between A and B, what would the characters like to do? How does it change them and maybe even prepare them for B?
- Which parts do I describe as a timeskip and which ones need more detail?
- How can I use the time between A and B to further familarize the reader with the characters?
Hope this helps a bit.
Good luck /)
More ideas you said? Well you could have the dwarf gang sit down and have a serious discussion on how one would actually go about cooking a hobbit (ultimately for shit and giggles).
You could introduce some new and fun cannon fodder orcs. You could have them all be forced to wear blood soaked tunics so that they are "redshirts" and you could make a bunch of them fun references like Gore-Don Rams -Eye, the orc with the worst bark and bite in Mordor, known for killing anyone who brings him FUCKING RAW elf. And if you don't know that reference just look up Gordon Ramsay.