Desh Reviews 4 · 1:18am Mar 22nd, 2017
Hello everyone, this is the first of my new format. I'd like a little feedback on it if all of you wouldn't mind. And to not keep things going longer, let's get right into it.
Name: A Talk Between Sisters
Author: Saberking2012
Rating: Everyone
Genre: Drama/Sad
Chapter Count: One
Review: I found this one to be rather a mixture of short, sweet and saddening. It hinted at the future endeavors of Sweetie Belle, and really any child. The switch from child to teenager to adult is one of challenge, and struggle. It can often leave one feeling ill-equipped; and this captured it quite well. The sickness was really a good gateway, it forced the topic to come up, since Rarity can be rather busy and sickness is just the thing to make the conversation start. It had a few mistakes, though they didn’t take much away. For me it was just some immersion, but for others it will be different. One such being: steamy mug--cold herbal tea. If it were steaming then that would mean it is hot, but it is said to be cold tea.
Recommendation: I would recommend giving it a read if you like to think about more saddening topics, otherwise I would still recommend it.
Name: The Most Disgusting Clop You Will Ever Read
Author: PRINCESS CADENCE
Rating: Mature
Genre: Clop
Chapter Count: One
Review: Um… I can’t say this was good… but it also wasn’t bad. While this wasn’t something I particularly found pleasing. I did find that the “sex” scene should have been extended a little, or at least a little better played. It went by far too quickly. I did however feel dirty after I read it, so good job? I kinda wished I knew more about what was within the fic before reading, the description has some room for improvement. The little relationship with Trixie sprung up a little too quickly, at the start; and is there only one toilet in the whole school? That doesn’t sound right. I can’t say that I see myself as that Anon, since I wouldn’t lay down on the ground… it is dirty… maybe if there was a blanket then I would.
Recommendation: I would recommend this to people who like scat, and whatever the urine equivalent is called… otherwise I would suggest staying away. The main focus is, after all, about those two things.
Name: Don’t Forget Me
Author: kalash93
Rating: Everyone
Genre: Sad/Drama
Chapter Count: One
Review: This was something that made me tear up. I would like to think I can be strong, but with something as saddening as this one… it makes me re-evaluate that thought. There were very minimal mistakes present within this. And I don’t think they would matter all that much. Something as strong as this one deserve a spot in the spotlight. It deals with Luna’s side after her return to Equestria, and I believe it hit the nail on the head, so to speak. This could have been better, but what couldn’t?
Recommendation: I highly recommend reading this, it has made its way onto my exclusive list of Favorites.
Thanks for reading. Vote for the next Fics in the comments, or by dropping me a PM.
This is the Master List, which doubles as the rules. Edits were made here.
~DeshLune
I like the new format, its short and sweet but not rushed. All in all pretty good.
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Yay! If you have any suggestions for next weeks let me know. I only have one suggestion right now, not counting the solo review that I have planned.
4466966 If I think of something I'll let you know.
The only thing you missed is that's it's Rated E and Equestria girls but aside that, nice.
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Whoops. D:
Fixed the rating. The genre has the focus of the story, it isn't meant to have all the tags, and you might have noticed that it was marked as Drama as well.
4467021 Ah. A)Thanks. B)Glad you liked it.
For my next recommended story, you could take a look at "Overcoming the Past". Of course, that one is about 9K so...
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Added to my review suggestions bookshelf. Just to let you know you can suggest something that isn't yours. Put it is perfectly fine to suggest your own. ^^
I wonder how I managed to put it down as Teen. I didn't have other stories in different tabs open at the time. I am baffled. :\
Thank you very much.
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Feel free to suggest anything for a later review, be it your own, or a random story you found. Oh... and you're welcome. ^^
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Ah, now there's a thought. Just before I post recommend anything disagreeable to you, what are your restrictions?
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Here is my Master List, it also doubles as my rules. HERE
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Thankee.
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Thankee... that is new. Nice. You're welcome. ^^
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Oh, thank you! ^^
I just read The Most Disgusting Clop You Will Ever Read... I regret everything. Now if you'll excuse me, I've got to A)Delete my history and B)Erase my mind. I say good day.
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I did say it had scat and, as PRINCESS CADENCE informed me, watersports. It's nice to see my review are "helping" people find stories to read. ^^
4473402 I don't know what scat means and somehow I know... ugh... anyways... In process of forgetting that mess.
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I'm going to look through all 1500+ stories in my Clop Bookshelf for a clop type story for tomorrow; assuming I can finish reading three stories, and write the reviews by tomorrow evening. Perhaps I shall start to label things from no on, you know... add an explanation? So it would look like: scat(poop based fetish), and that kind of thing.
4473418 Lord knows there's enough of that...