I'm a fussy writer. Chapter 5 is incoming. · 1:25pm Jul 21st, 2012
The reason I say I am a fussy writer is ... its re-write time! + I'm on the final touches of the next chapter, chapter 5, The Depression before the Rainbow.
I'll be releasing the next chapter at the same time I release the re-write. If all goes well that will be tomrow. If it all goes poorly, (and I get called into work early...) then the day after that as I will simply spend the night writing instead of sleeping. I'm keen to get the next few chapters out there.
Why a re-write, you ask?
The answer is simple. I'm a fussy writer. At university I studied writing. I falied year two because I was too slow and unable to meet the strict deadlines. In doing so I found that it can take many drafts to get my idea to come out right and till they do come out right I tend to have holes in the story and such. I have a few problems with my writing and I am finding they will have bad effects later on if I don't fix them now. Here is the main 3 things I need to change:
Rainbow Dash's family and her Birthday party scene. I really don't like how its turned out. Her family are also incomplete. It wan't what I envisioned. Today I found the solution. It involves RD's older brother who is a lot older and loves his pie. The two of them have a rocky relationship and I was going to leave all mention of him and his filly friend out of it till a lot later but now I have written up a totaly awesome way of getting him in there earlier at Dash's party. I want to have had him attend her birthday party but I wound up cutting it short as I couldn't think of how to pull it all off without it being a massive flop. Sorry people. Todays epic idea will fix my issues I have with it and add depth to Rainbow Dash's family. This means I will need to add a few extra character tags like ... no wait. You'll see them be added as soon as the update goes up. I don't want to spoil anything more.
Another loop hole I found earlier was the lack of anything in chapter one to properly say the two mares are married and have thier own filly called... Rainbowshy? I don't know... I'm bad with making names but I think this one will suit her. At least with the current traits she has. If anyone can come up with a better name for the little rainbow maned filly it would be great. I'm open to ideas.
Plus FlutterDashFTW kindly pointed out my lack of setting descriptions. Mainly in chapter 4. I was focused on my two fave ponies and kinda forgot... He has been the final helper in getting me to decide that I will go thorugh and re-work a few things. I promise this whole story will be 20% cooler afterwards.
Everything else will remain as cute as it is now (or slightly cuter...)
Chapter 5 will be a little dark and turn a few thigns on thier heads, but stick with me. The cutness and D'awwws will return quickly.
Awesome! Looking forward to it. Glad FlutterDashFTW has been helping you.
241607 It was just his comment. It made me decide to add that to my list of things I need to change. So I will now that there is enogh things to chagne. Also some of them will be important soon and I don't want to make the entrance strange and sudden.
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I love criticism, but I get way too little of it. Meh. But hey, I might actually have enough time to give you a proper proofreading this time around.
241609 That will be wonderful. I hope you don't mind the growing size of the chapters. They are exploding.
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I don't mind at all! Honestly, I've been meaning to make my chapters longer as well. Probably one of the reasons I'm having trouble getting anything finished.
I say if we have to, kill the D'AWWWS MUAHAHAHAHAHAHAH.
Omg. Look, there I am! I'm famous everypony! Autograph line starts here! Haha, in all seriousness, I'm really glad I could contribute to the story, even though it was as little as it was. I was smiling ear to ear at the mention of my name in the post
. Anyway, a rewrite sounds like a great idea! It keeps all of the parts that I thought was awesome and tidied up on the slight imperfections. As for the chapter title, I think "Depression before the Rainbow" is kind of strange. The realistic title would be "Depression before Happiness" and the metaphorical one would be "Rain before the Rainbow". You seemed to have combined the two into a strange mixture. I guess it's not an issue though. As for the filly's name, I don't think a combination of the parent's names are a good idea. Something creative... something... AWESOME. Morning Skies? Nevermind, I'm probably worse than you are with names. Nevertheless, I excitedly (I need to think of a new word) await your next release, whatever it may be.
And as always, FLUTTERDASH FTW
242552 Well since the next chapter isn't out yet I'm tempted to utilise "Rain before the Rainbow" as the chapter name. Its a chapter brought on by Fluttershy's nightmare.
And yes if anyone can think of a cool name for thier rainbow maned filly that would be awesome and avoid mixups.
Well since I have nothing better to do, here are some random names I thought of :P
-Rain Runner
-Cloud Dasher
-Breeze Tumble
-Nimble Bolt
-Fire Force
-Starshine Dash
-Lightning Charge
-Morning Spring
-Crystal Leap
Okay I'm out of ideas. I just realized half of these sound like Pokemon moves. Oh well. You can ignore this if you like.
And as always, FLUTTERDASH FTW
242575 Sunrise Dash? does that sound right? hmmm. I like where you were going with Starshine Dash.