The future of Mother (Important)

Vote here regarding the future of Mother.

Comments

[Admiral Q Ponyform]

it's pretty much fine as is. The questions I have i figured would be answer in later chapters. You've laid out a pretty clear reason for Twilight's perdicament. Dark magic keeping her from aging normally, Celestia's solution. Even why she didn't tell them the truth, misguided but not illogical.

her friends will be bummed and likely herself with the age difference and cementing her immoratality. However that's part of the attraction to the story.

This doesn't have to be an Heir to Nightmare clone. It will be fun seeing Luna take care of Twilight, something in hair to nightmare that can't happen anymore.

[sakuralovelight]

I agree with Admiral Q Ponyform i like this story just the way it is i have been reading this story and Heir to Nightmare and i really enjoy both stores the same and love how both are so different. also i hope that i get to read a new chapter real soon

[Voidedstory]

lol, hair to nightmare.

Don't really think you need to change anything.

[dracone]

I think the story is good as is, mostly. It's been a while since the last update, and my reading of one of my favorite stories thus far, but it couldn't hurt to go through what you already have and look for spelling errors and other grammatical hiccups and see about fixing them (you might also want to get a trusted friend or family member to do that as well).

[Pickleless]

Option D: Only if you feel like you could do it better.
A good way to know if you can is if it's been on your mind to the point you're finding yourself brainstorming about it without trying. Generally that's your brain's way of saying "let's make a story!"

[Meltian]

I'm sorry but.. I think it needs a complete overhaul... this story has pacing and plot issues all over the place.

[Celefin]

So far this story has outshone its slight technical problems by the sheer brilliance of the idea and the storytelling.
You might want to try and find a beta-reader, meaning somebody able to actually give editing/story flow advice instead of just a proofreader... but that's only necessary if you want to aim for an extremely polished and smooth story.
It is great as it is and one of the few stories where I really really really look forward to how it develops. The story's strongest point is its novelty, including the idea of a bygone advanced civilization giving Celestia an extended vacation with the ageless foal.
I'd focus on continuing instead of rewriting; the latter always contains the danger of making the story tedious to write and easy to cancel. Finish first, polish later.

[Pokekid543]

I agree with Pickleless. If you feel like you can do better than you've already done, redo the story.

[prench derpy hooves]

I like it
But if you want to rewrite it that's fine with me