Nov
16th
2014
Magic Ears sequel now available for pre-reading! · 9:43pm Nov 16th, 2014
Hi everybody. I'm pleased to announce that work has started on a sequel to Magic Ears, in fact the first chapter is already done! As I discussed in my last blog post, the story is set approximately fifteen years after the story it succeeds. I will submit the story only when it is entirely done, probably after two more chapters, but until then I have set an unpublished view password so that it can be read by those of you who follow me. The password is cedar.
Please leave feedback! If you hate it, tell me and save me the time of writing the rest. If you love it, show it some love!
http://www.fimfiction.net/story/229580/cmc-investigations-the-creature-of-canterlot
I like this work. If I have one suggestion, it's that you read over the chapter and try to avoid clumps of the word, "she" or "Scootaloo". It might be slightly pedantic of me to notice, but it did stand out a little.
2599206 Wow, that was fast. I try to avoid that, but sometimes it's hard to see problems that you've been staring at for too long. Could you point out a few paragraphs that need work? Also how do you get that gradient effect behind your comments?
2599212 Sure. You want me to just quote text here or would you prefer PMs?
I enjoyed it, a little confused about the ghost who eats pastries because I don't think Ghosts have a stomach or digestive system. It's a good start to what i hope is a story that will be 20% Cooler than the original. Keep up the good work and continue writing.
2599278 Thanks! Hopefully it's the kind of confusion which keeps you interested in the story while you wait for an answer.
2599293 THEN AS CELESTIA AS MY WITNESS CONTINUE I WILL!
Awwe yeah! Great work so far, it might be a got smoother if you added more details about the settings, as long as they don't become extraneous or overtly exact. Can't wait for the next installment!
Certainly a good start, although I would spend a little more time fleshing out the older CMC and their lives before jumping into the action.
2687007 I am trying to add a little more depth to their personalities: to show their differences. I think chapter two helped a lot with that. Obviously I will continue to try to build the characters.