Thoughts about my Stories. · 12:54am Aug 25th, 2014
I want to explain what my hopes were when I started writing here. My first story was the My Little Pony; the Creation of New Equestria. I wrote this right after the end of Season 3. I wanted to write what I wanted to see in Season 4 after I finish the story I read Past sins and saw Nyx as somepony I wanted in my story so a rewrite it with her in it.
Then I wrote some stories that never got posted. Some was quite fun, I read them to get ready for this. But I didn’t feel they had the right stuff to post. After posting my first story I realized I am not that good of a writer. So I decided I would use this chance to improve my writing. I watched videos on writing and tried to apply it to my writing but I know from the fact that I have so many thumbs down I have a long way to go.
I know that one of my biggest faults are that I don't describe scenes very all. Like in Nyx and the Night Ponies I could have describe the Castle as;
They all follow Celestia through the portal to a beautiful garden that at around a castle. The castle was white and sat on top of a huge tree. Nestled in the root of the tree is the Town of the night Ponies. The castle had gold archaic letters engraved into it from a long forgotten race of ponies, it also has red rose bushes climbing the exterior walls. It all had a Fantasy novel feeling.
Celestia started to walking into the Castle “Follow me.” Is all she said.
As that walked through the majestic hall of white marble they notice hanging tapestry; each telling the story of the ponies that lived there before. Most had Celestia and Luna in them. Celestia lead the group of ponies into a Courtyard. It was a wide and open courtyard full of the ghost of the past. If you stood quietly you would hear the laughter of a Filly Celestia and Luna playing with their parents. The Courtyard has a little gazebo to one side but your eyes were drawn to the white tree in the middle of the Courtyard. It had a magical feeling to it.
Celestia turned and face the ponies. “Once all of the Alicorns live in a kingdom out of time and space. There was an Alicorn for each type of magic and every celestial body. We lived happily with our friends and Family. That until one Alicorn wasn’t happy with the magic she was given. And she looked to find a new magic. She looked into forbidden magic. She thought she could master that magic and become a greater Alicorn. But she became twisted and cursed by that magic. Then she started to kill off Alicorns one by one. That was until the masters of Day and night, our parents stepped in and sealed her with their life. By then only three Alicorns were left Luna, Shooting Star and I. This evening a foolish Pony crashed their blimp into the Crystal prison what was holding her and freed her.”
Why didn’t I write it like that? Don’t know. I guess I am not that good of a story teller.
I will now go over some of the Characters I made. And why I make them the way I did.
I didn’t plan to make Andromeda into a filly from the start. I wanted to write an epic battle between Andromeda, Crystal and Nyx; Having Nyx and Crystal tag team her. But I couldn’t think of a way to make it realistic without having Nyx and Crystal train for years and be adults in the Battle. And I didn’t want to make my young characters older. So I thought about past sins and how Nyx get turned into a Filly again. And I also thought Andromeda have been locked away for years and haven’t have the chance to try ice cream. (I was eating ice cream sundae when I was thinking about this. The sundae was a 5 inch square brownie with four scoops of Villain ice Cream, with sliced strawberries and nuts, and of course whipped cream with a cherry on top. ) and I was thinking what would Andromeda think of Ice Cream. I would think she would like it but would not want to change it because of the simple delight of eating just Villain Ice cream. It is the base of all ice cream after all. So the idea of turning her into a filly sounded better and better and the Battle lost it charm.
About Twilight and Shooting Star becoming a couple I have already written a story about it. I just need to edit it to fit this Storyline.
Crystal was a character I wanted since I read past sins. I felt Nyx wasn’t complete without another Filly Alicorn one that will be like Celestia is to Luna. But it seems like Nyx is the popular one and Crystal is the one in Nyx’s shadow. And I also thought it would be nice if Crystal was a villain once also so they had something in common. And it came to be the name said villain “Voldermare” a horse pun on Harry Potter. I laughed and called it good. Crystal was a princess before she was turned into Voldermare so I thought she should be more refined than Nyx. But that isn’t as much fun. So I split her personality at the Castle and with friends and family she is a little filly. And at school and formal events she is a Princess.
Medley, Firefly, Parry, Nurse’s Corner, and the rest of the Castle staff; I was planning to put Medley and Firefly more into the spotlight, but they are a maid and a Head Guard. And because of that they don’t stick out. Nurse’s Corner being Nyx’s personal maid made her in along of the scenes with Nyx so she got put in the spotlight much more than the other Castle staff. Parry poor Parry that is all I can say about him. Good guy that always get teased and taken advantage of. There are so many things I cut from the story because I felt bad for him. And the worst part is I was the one writing it. I hinted at one scene I cut. Then Sweetie Belle said that Parry sometimes let them put makeup on him. He didn’t really let them; they tied him up and use him to practice putting makeup on. I stole the quartet from RealityCheck so I can’t take credit for them.
Lilly, Silken Glove, and the other Camper Ponies; then I started Nyx and the Summer Camp I wanted to get each of the camper ponies time in the spotlight, but Silken Glove was the one that I spent the most time on. She was just easy to write. I wanted to do more with Orange Marmalade. I thought it would be fun to want a brat. Skydancer; she is another character I thought it would be fun to write. Then there is Starsong she was an orphan from the Luna’s house in Canterlot. Luna cared deeply about her and sent her to camp to make friends. As her name said she had a beautiful voice, but didn’t write it in the story. I guess you can call them the Characters that Might Have Been.
This Blog was just me telling you that I had high hopes of writing good stories for my reader but I failed in doing so. and i am Sorry.
You look like you could use some perspective. You're too hard on yourself. The thing about online stories is that it's almost impossible to completely fail. If you make mistakes or think of improvements, you can go back and edit the stories whenever you want. There's no point in lamenting how you could've written a scene differently when you can simply go back and write the scene differently. Insert the modified scene into the story. Do you know how to edit chapters?
Don't look at all the downvotes. Look at the upvotes. You have a lot more upvotes than downvotes. The number of downvotes is actually quite small, and about what I'd expect for well-written stories the size of yours. They're actually much better than the ones on my stories, despite me being good at grammar. Every story, no matter how good it is, always has at least a few downvotes. The only ones that don't are those that have almost no votes at all.
The few downvotes you have may not even be an indication of your quality or people's opinions at all. It's very common for people to judge a story superficially and downvote without giving it a chance or even reading a single word the author wrote. "Judging a book by its cover", as the saying goes. There could also be a troll or two lurking about, downvoting everything in sight just for kicks.
2399055 yes I know how to edit. I am going to edit alot. now that I finish Nyx and the Night Ponies I can go back and cleanup lose ends and grammar.
I know people indiscriminately downvote. it is just that I know I can do better, and that is what hurts me.
I failed in putting out my best and that is what i apologize for.
2399286
Don't be too hard on yourself your stories are amongst my favourites.