Innocence lost rewrite

I'm working on the first 4 chapters of "Innocence Lost" for a rewrite. I've really hated where it ended and how I went about it. I was like a kid in a toy store throwing things into a cart near the end without thought or reason.

Basically I want to focus more on Sweetie developing her powers and using them as a kid would, both maliciously and compassionately. That whole griffon/spy/sudden death ending was just a cheap shock that by all rights shouldn't be in there. I'll probably make google docs links to the original fimfiction chapters if anyone wants to read those in the future. Nothing changed yet this is just an FYI