Jul
23rd
2014
Some input, please. · 10:03am Jul 23rd, 2014
So, as you're aware, Vasto Lorde finished it's Changeling Arc a while ago.
I've moved onto the next arc, but I've decided to clear some things up before starting it; A filler arc, of sorts. Wouldn't quite be Bleach without a filler, right?
However, I've been goddamn braindead at coming up with scenarios. So, I'd like the readers to come up with some good ones that I can adapt what I need to into the situation.
So; if you could throw me some ideas, I'll use a few that I think will work well and give you credit in the title and chapter. This also includes OC's, so if you have a plot in mind and you want to add your own OC, just mail the OC details through.
Peace, and hoping for at least a few ideas.
Well, I can't think of too many good ones, but what about a chapter or two about Tenshou's interaction with other Ponies? Or maybe a few dozen Hollows invade? That's all I can think of. I'll get back to ya if I think of something else. Think on my suggestions too though and tell me what you think.
Perhaps Tenshou meets up with those who live outside of Ponyville? Maybe he could come to a better understanding about the residents of Equestria from another who had to deal with stigma based on how she looks like Zecora (though she wasn't attacked and chained up, she could still provide some context for Tenshou to work off a new opinion of the Equines). Maybe Tenshou finds a cave to live in within the mountains of the Everfree Forest and battles an adult dragon but this one realizes during the fight he is outmatched and perhaps either gives up/yields and becomes a comrade of Tenshou? I think you should avoid bringing other Hollows into this story for at least a while now. Build up the mystery of what Tenshou is and how he came to Equestria for the readers and the ponies. Perhaps a couple filler chapters dealing with the aftermath of the Changeling arc showing the Mane 6 perhaps splintering off a little given their different opinions on Tenshou and how they should interact (if at all) with him? That's all I can think about right now, hope it helped!!
silent powerful chad and maybe orihima? heck a certain band of the plush squad would cause a scare if a pony ate a certain pill from one of them and both freak out! unlikely yes but shenanigans...
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Maybe there's some Changeling survivors? We could get their POV on some of the aftermath. I forget, did any of them survive?
I wouldn't mind seeing the fallout from the Changeling perspective, that last 'for the queen' really doesn't bode well for Chrissie's mental health.
And yeah, an interaction with Secora would be cool, not just for Tenshou but for the Ponies as well. I can't believe that Zecora WOULDN'T be a little peeved to hear that the Ponies didn't learn after what they did to her and discriminated against another based on his appearance. Heck it might be a little scary from her perspective as well If she got to thinking about how they could have attacked her as well, I mean she couldn't have fought the whole town off if they got violent, and there's no telling how close they were to doing so.
Some sort of interaction with Zecora, perhaps some of what Twilight's feeling. She deserves it, but it might be interesting to get some of her thoughts in the story.
I have a couple of ideas and one or two suggestions that might help. I suppose I'll start with the ideas for filler seeing as how that is the topic. Here are my main ideas:
1. Tenshou meets Discord and/or Zecora (as xbox432 and Love the Changeling said)
I figure Discord would be thrilled by Tenshou's existence let alone actions. Zecora on the other hand has occasionally shown a wide range of knowledge and their interactions may be rather interesting (with him being a bit of a murderous entity of unknown origin).
2. Seeing spirits or haunted by Chrysalis
In a previous comment I stated it would have been cool if the Mane 6 had stayed dead due to Ichigo's passive ability to see and commune with spirits. This idea has been somewhat tweaked. Not only does it allow a look into the fallout of his actions, but also presents a chance to show a growing familiarity with his shinigami powers.
3. Garble
I mention him only because I would like to see his reaction to the changeling slaughter that just occurred outside the hospital where he is recovering. Thinking about it makes me chuckle.
Those are the best filler concepts I have at the moment. As for the the other matter, I was wondering if you were interested in a acquiring a proofreader or editor. While I certainly respect and enjoy your writing there are still a few minor details that don't seem to fit and the rare spelling error within the text.
With that said, good luck to you and your future writing.
Not quite sure if this would be good filler, per serving, but... I keep thinking of Tenshou as part of Ichigo that got separated from him, and think it would be interesting to see him come to reclaim his missing part. You could have a scene with Urahara looking at some screens and saying "We found it". Ichigo coming in just as Tenshou flips his shit (again, maybe Sombra or Tirek? ) and calling him by name: "It's time to come home...Zangetsu." Stuff like that.
Why not the the dragon bullies' fathers coming back to exact revenge on their sons' deaths.
don't know if this was mentioned previously but
were is he staying? or he will have to find a clue to decide to were to go next?
I will like to see him have a place to stay not necessary among ponies
maybe close to batponies?
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Honestly, I think that should be saved till the end of the story.
I also agree that Tenshou should meet up with Zecora and/or Discord.
He gets stoned and kicks the fuck outta someone.
The main thing I would like to see would be Luna being punished for what her actions caused. Also maybe a pony locates and thanks Tenshou for saving them from the changelings.
A filler arc...I would assume him and the other main characters becoming more used to each other should be saved for the main story.
Him leaving his mountain cave and interacting with various background ponies would be pretty cool. Also what Celestia and the mane six who were hurt have to say to Luna and Twilight for starting this whole mess.
as a large bleach and mlp fan i think reignfalls idea about ghot chissy would be bsst thing ever. make it so she gets really annoyed with being ignored. also maybe the filler canbe celestia make tenshou stay in the palace a bit.
Suggestions for filler:
1) *Tenshou meeting Instict during meditation (if Instinct and Tenshou are separate beings– I have no clue if they are or not).
2) Tenshou meeting background ponies or Zecora like other people mentioned.
3) Celestia coming to talk to Tenshou at his cave (to apologize, get to know him, etc.).
4) Maybe having Luna go into Tenshou's dreams (possibly see some of his memories like him vs. Ulquiorra) to try to apologize to him and know more about him.
5) Introspection of Mane Six about Tenshou, his actions, their actions toward him, their thoughts about him.
6) More Sweetie Belle and CMC that try to follow Tenshou back to his cave and get to know him/talk to him about stuff so that he doesn't feel lonely. CUTIE MARK CRUSADERS MONSTER FRIEND MAKERS! YAY!
7) Ponies talking about Tenshou and Twilight's/Luna's actions towards him in the news and stuff.
8) There is no 8.
9) More Pinkie Pie and Tenshou.
10) All of the above!
*Are Instinct and Tenshou separate beings? They seem like that to me. Anyways, if they are not, then disregard first idea.
Well, there's plenty of suggestions already, but I'll just repost this from my comment on the last chapter:
Basically that. Maybe along with some other interactions among the ponies, hopefully showing that it's starting to penetrate into their thick skulls that the deal with him is a bit more complicated than "him monster, he bad".
Maybe after a while of not fighting anything strong, Instinct gets board, an teaches himself an ability to see others hidden and darkened "instincts", to help him screw with others psyches. But when looking at Spike he sees how the dragon has a hidden beast full of distructive power that's just waiting to burst out and that if it does it might actually be fun to fight it. But to do so he has to break down the dragons mental walls, so Instinct try's to use Tenshou help "push the envelope" per say, and get Spikes instincts to consume him. So instinct and Tenshou might be able to have a real fight.
First of all, since I have no idea what you have planned for your next Arc, I don't know if any of my ideas will conflict with what you have planned. Still, if you are looking for ideas, I do have a few in mind...
1) Aftermath: A quick look at how the recent events-starting with Tenshou's arrival up to the battle against the Changelings-affected everyone, including (but not limited to): Tenshou, Celestia & Luna, the Mane 6 & Spike, the CMC, Cadance & Shining Armor, Queen Chrysalis, Garble, and the ponies of Ponyville.
2) Adaptations: As peace returns to Ponyville, both Tenshou & Twilight find themselves having to deal with the troublesome situation they are now in. In a world where "friendship" is magic and he his feared as a monster, can he find someone willing to look past his intimidating appearance and power, or will he remained isolated and alone? With access to her magic cut off for the moment, Twilight learns just how much she has taken using magic for granted as Spike, Pinkie, & Applejack teach her how to get through the day without the use of her horn; can she master doing things the "Earth Pony way", or will a life without magic drive her to the extremes in seeking Tenshou's forgiveness?
3) Reflections: Of Gods & Mortals: As the Royal Guard and Wonderbolts begin aiding the Ponyvillians in restoring the town, the Mane 6 tell Celestia, Luna, Cadance, Shining Armor, Spike, and the CMC all about where they disappeared to and the four mysterious beings they encountered. As they consider the meaning behind the god-like beings words about the Elements of Harmony, nopony is more troubled by Twilight's punishment than Rainbow Dash and Princess Luna. Is Tenshou really the cause behind their recent troubles, or were their own actions more of a factor than they realized? And if so, what can they do about it?
4) Tea for Four: After news spreads throughout Equestria about the powerful, masked-monster living in the mountain near Ponyville, fear and tension are at an all-time high. With first encounter having gone so horribly wrong, Princess Celestia needs to find a way to ease some of the tension between her new "visitor" and her little ponies. As a result, Celestia asks Sweetie Belle for help in having a "civilized' conversation with Tenshou. Can the unicorn filly help the Princess soothe the savage beast that is Tenshou? Not without her big sister she isn't!
5) Flight of Dragons: Having learned about Tenshou's survival and new home, Garble has returned to the Dragonlands to seek vengeance for his fallen friends. While many of the elder dragons could care less, a few adults (particularly the parents of the deceased teenage dragons) decide to fly to Ponyville to meet this "dragon slayer". Can the Princesses manage to diffuse the situation before the town becomes another battlefield?
6) Military Might: Shining Armor is not happy. His beloved little sister has lost her magic. The creature responsible for the injuries of himself, his wife, and the Element Bearers is free to move about as he pleases. And worst of all, the Equestrian Royal Guard was once again useless in defending the nation from the Changeling threat. Well that is the last straw! Having secretly gathered the captains of the Wonderbolts, Shadowbolts, Lunar Night Guard, and Royal Equestrian Guard, they decide that Tenshou is much too dangerous to leave unchecked and unguarded, and make plans to capture and restrain him. Will their plans succeed, or are thy simply adding more fuel to the fire?
Bring someone else from the bleach series temporarily into his mind with "instinct", to trigger memories of what he is, what he became, why, and to prove that instinct is just an act of decision. The instinct to kill, the instinct to fight, the instinct to survive, or the instinct to forgive.
Christ all-mighty, I was expecting enough material for about four, maybe five filler chapters, but the suggestions that're here may push me to make six.
Which, now that I think about it, is probably a half-good thing, as it'll give me time to get the skeleton of the rest of the story into place...
Six it is, and here's hoping you enjoy them! First one will be coming out in about a week, starting this post!
2314277 I have been wondering for a while about whether I should get a editor/proofreader, unfortunately pride rears it's head each time...
2316947 Haha, that I can understand. Submitting your work specifically to be criticized and edited by someone else can be hard on pride. Honestly, I felt a little bad about asking so openly like that. Regardless I still want to support this story and you, and I can do so from the comment well enough.
In other news, I had another idea!
Meeting the Equestrian Grim Reaper; I figure a new "death god" in town would draw the attention of the local equivalent of shinigami. Once again it is a chance for Tenshou to explore his shinigami side while also coming to terms with native forces.