Damn, that's fast.

Less that 3 days since I posted the new story, and already over a hundred likes?

Now if only people took five minutes of their times telling me exactly what they liked about it.

Comments

[Aerigim]

Well if you want what I liked about (A)mortal I suppose it can be boiled down to a few things. One being you did a great job setting up your character with a past, that I for one, want to know what the fuck it is. Seriously, what did he do to get a bounty placed on his head if he is so suicidal, jump face first into an armory shipment, run around screaming "Death to the Princesses", maybe even scam a few people out of their money doing things that would kill a normal person, TELL ME DAMN IT, also what's his name because I didn't see it anywhere which I feel adds a good sense of mystery to the story. Secondly you threw in a, what I am going to assume, is a female companion in the form of Sterling, again making the most out of a first encounter by making her a bit determined to figure out what is up with old no name. Along with writing the Princesses within character, again personal opinion, with Celestia being of kind but rational nature, Luna being fairly rash with how she does things, at least that is a common portrayal of hers that I have seen cropping up, and Twilight being mostly calm and in control when it comes to minor emergencies, instead of off the wall and over the top with her reactions in the presents of her mentor. I found the bit of commentary between Sterling and no name, or as he is referred to by the guards "Trotter", about talking to strangers, I feel this shows her with a character aligned around the same area as Rainbow Dash. You also have a nice touch with the use of descriptors in the chapter using no more than is required to get an idea of whats there or how something looks or is interacted with.

Those are my thoughts on the story, don't know if that's what you wanted but that's what I'm giving you, I wanted to wait till more chapters came out so I could form a complete thought instead of whatever this was. Hope it helps!

-Aerigim

[Nihatclodra]

The concept is original. I like the idea of some random immortal Pegasus trying every hair-brained scheme he can think of to get the princesses to kill him; while they're doing everything in their power to convince him out of it.