"The Monster Mash" revision in progress.

I'm giving The Monster Mash an editing pass in preparation for writing a bonus chapter, working on smoothing out parts where I thought a plot element was too abruptly introduced or getting a story caught up to canon or what have you. While I'm at it, I'd like your help. If you can spot any typos or other problems with the story, no matter how small, please PM me and let me know.

(Why no, this isn't (just) a shameless plug to get more people to read The Monster Mash, why do you ask?)