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Someone who knows Zuko and Twilight Sparkle needed · 7:53pm Jul 7th, 2013
So, I'm trying to write that spirit sequel to Celestia and Iroh Have Tea. This one will feature Zuko and Twilight, and I've gotten working on it, but I need a couple of people who know these characters well to help me check my direction with it, and to help push me to work consistently.
If anyone's interested, leave a comment here or PM me.
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I know both characters quite well. Zuko is actually one of my fav Avatar heroes, also I'm reading the newest comic where he along with Team Avatar and his sister are searching for Ursa, his and Azula's mother. Zuko's will as a Fire Lord and a person are tested through the pages, there is even a scene where he starts to understand more about Azula and sees her more as a sister than insane monster she showed the outside world.
I liked your Celestia and Iroh story, and will gladly help you in any way I can with this newest story. So, whatever the issue is, just tell me and I'll see if I can do something about it.
I was going to offer help, but it looks like Ookami88 has your back. Still, if you need a second opinion, pm me, as well. I know both well enough- watched all of avatar and korra, and all of MLP, even comics for Avatar, too. I should be able to give advice. I imagine that you'd be asking whether certain lines from either of the two, or reactions from either of the two, would make sense, to make them stay in character.
I said it on the Celestia and Iroh story, and I'll say it again here- you should do a longer, larger crossover between Avatar and MLP- there isn't a well written one available that I like on the site, and I like you how you write it :) you should do a longer one, imo. Just my opinion.
You should get in contact with those people who did that play in the Fire Nation; I hear their interpretation of Zuko was spot on: "Hoonnooorrr!"
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Two opinions would be better, of course.
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Awesome. I'll PM you when I have mire than a page written.
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Oh god, not the play, lol. I remember that. They captured bad acting so well.
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No... not the Ember Island Players!
I'd gladly help!! Huge Zuko and Twilight Sparkle fan
I can relate to both characters quite well (don't ask how I can relate to Zuko, it's not a happy story) so I understand their personality's quite well. I've also read all the latest comics for the Avatar series in which insane Azula and Team Avatar are on the hunt for Ursa in the Forgotten Valley. I have also been working on an Avatar: TLA crossover and it's now posted.
So if your offer is still open I would gladly like to help you with your new story
Haven't watched Avatar in a long time. All I remember of Zuko was how much he went through to get the Avatar so he could return home, but slowly came to be part of an even bigger effort. Heh, now I want to go rewatch all of them ^_^.
I wish to help you to the best of my abilities with these two. They are surprisingly very similar with their will to achieve their goals. And both wanted to prove their worth.
You've probably heard this already plenty of times, but i believe i have a firm grasp of what Zuko's and Twilight's character enough to help with the story. If you are still interested in more help, i would be more than willing to help out, either as a pre-reader or as an editor for the finished work.
If interesred in my help, please PM me. In anycase, good luck!
Been a long time since I watched A:TLA, but I think I can help on Zuko.
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Alrighty, ladies and gentlemen!
It seems my Internet Powers are growing.
Now then, how do I get the writing to you guys? Email? GoogleDocs? Post it on here unpublished?
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Googledocs it is. Here's the link: WOOT WOOT
It's public access for comments, so comment away and discuss amongst yourselves on there as you please.
LET THE MADNESS BEGIN!
Edit 2:
If anyone prefers PMing me opinions and such, go for it.
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Lol, I didn't think about that. I don't know... anyone have any ideas?
Googledocs sounds good, though, I have to say.
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Note the edit on the previous response. It's GoogleDocs now.
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We could always PM to each other here on Fimfiction. It'll be easier than going through the whole e-mail and google.docs deals (I don't even use the last one). Also you'll have an easier way to storage different ideas or opinions than looking through your e-mail box, don't you think?
Therefore I suggest PM on Fimfiction to be in contact.
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I've made it a public access GoogleDoc. Here's the link again: WOOT WOOT
If you prefer PMs, feel free to use them instead.
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Seems pretty good so far. The joke was kind of funny. The setting is also really portrayed well- and that tense slight nervousness in the air is good- two young, new rulers, who don't know much about what they're doing yet, talking to each other. I say keep going like this and you'll be feature box again. Or, you should be at least.
AND AGAIN, please consider making a longer Avatar story? There are very few good long crossover stories on this site :(
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Excellent! Thanks.
And remember to comment on the GoogleDoc or in a PM if you want to say anything that might spoil it for new readers.
I mean, it's not like I have any twists planned (what with it being Slice of Life) but still.
As to the longer crossover, I might, but I really don't know what I'd do with it. If you have any such ideas, feel free to let me know.
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Alright. Yeah. You should pm us all later when you have a lot more written, so we can read it then.
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Well of course!
It's just that I write this way, in pieces. I've come to a complete section, in my own planning language, and now I need to get another incomplete section started to expand on.
In other words, this section is what I'll have until I spur on to another like it, which may be a couple of days. Though, I still wanted to get some outside opinions so I could be sure I wasn't going in the wrong direction right off the bat.
I like it up to where it is now. I think Zuko needs to tense up a bit more, he seems a little loose...or maybe because I still remember him as the angry "jerk" before he turned a new leaf XD
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Yeah, I struggle with that part. In the end, since this is after he's become Fire Lord, I figure he's making a real effort to be kind and friendly, but is still having trouble with it. I'm also trying to factor in that he's pretty much there to help Twilight relax, so he's trying not to be tense.
At any rate, this sort of input is among the very most valuable, so thank you, and please tell me if you spot anything else.
1208751 I understand where you're coming from. I can feel the effort he's making, especially at that part where he cracked a joke, I can sorta feel like he's trying not to start an all out war.
Although thats the feeling now, I don't want it to be misinterpreted as Twilight + Carefree Teenager w/ Power. But keep going, I like the way its being put up :)
i can help
Plz do so.
I like the idea note about fish lol. That had better be in the final.
The characterization seemed spot on except when it didn't. I don't feel Zuko would have cracked a pun like that about the tea. Twilight's response was pretty good though.
There were a few typos but I forget where.
Does anyone know where the follow button is on the mobile version of fimfiction.net? I want to follow Ninja Kraken, but can't find the button...
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Guys, I am so sorry I forgot about you all.
I am getting back on the story ASAP. It's ridiculous I've let it sit this long, but... family stuff, and met a girl, and then university....
1371716 *whistles. Lucky bugger. You've actually met a girl. Not that I am isolated from girls in university, but none of them really perk my interest.
And take your time, writing is a very gradual process.
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D'aww, that's fine, approaching this story with anything but light-heartedness and whimsicalness would be a mistake anyways. If you're worried or feeling guilty that you're putting off those important things to you just to appease some chumps on the internet it's going to lead to a worse-quality fic.
1371716 Hey, thats life ^^ Thank you for bothering to give us entertainment in the first place, and not for completely forgetting about us hehe
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Apology unnecessary. Real life should always be first. Thanks anyway.
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I happened to re-read that part and was thrown off by the passive verb form "was counted on". Maybe make it "Everypony counted on me to know everything <perhaps list some examples so you still convey that the things were at a Pinkie Pie level of crazy>, and I didn't mind, since I always liked getting to tell others about things I learned."
1371933 You mean like "Pinkie Pie? I neverhheard of a Pinkie Pie! Who is Pinkie Pie?"... Yeah not gonna happen.
I feel like resurrecting this ancient blog post to see if it will ever happen, because the first one was a delight! So...poke!