Editing

I've just done some editing on chapters 1 through 5 of Vengeance of Dawn. Mostly grammar stuff, with a few minor changes here and there. My main aim is to reduce the sloppiness that Admujica rightly identified in her review. If anyone wants to re-read those early chapters and let me know what they think of the changes that would be most appreciated.

Cheers

Comments

[Spacecowboy]

Just wanted to point out that you seem to be a fairly good writer.
Which made the switch you pulled from a Comedy to a Tragedy, then all the dark shit you started to pull THAT much more disappointing. Sorry to say, but I downvoted your story on that switch alone, and have not looked back. Good luck. I'll be keeping an eye out for other stories by you and keeping a wary eye on them in the future. Ciao.

[Scipio Smith]

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I never actually said or tagged it as a comedy. Although you're right in that it was not originally planned to be as dark as it became, I always meant to write a dramatic work.

Still, as sorry as I am that you've stopped reading, it's your choice and thats fine. Hopefully I can write something lighter for you in future (like that Shadows of the Apt crossover I want to write but can't find a plot for).

[Spacecowboy]

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Hmm, must've only been adventure then? I thought there was a Comedy tag at its inception, apparently I'm wrong though. Might've been that it came across as a comedy at first? Either way, the dark themes you turned for were a big turn down, even if in this instance the Tragedy implies that Dawn is going to ultimately fail. However, it's going to come at a high cost, and I couldn't keep going once you showed that not even the Princesses knew how to remedy Cadance's situation. I don't even want to know what twisted stuff you've done with Shining or others at this point.

And yeah, just a reader here and a single opinion, and as shown by your overall votes, the folks who are reading it are still rather happy with it overall it seems. Just not my cup of tea as they say.

Anyways, I wish you continued luck with your writing.

[Scipio Smith]

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Cadance will get better by the end of the story, and so will Shining Armour. It's dark at the moment, but the night is darkest before Dawn *is shot*

I don't want to seem like I'm standing over you yelling HOW DARE YOU STOP READING, I just want you to know that I only ever put characters through hell so that they can find a way out again.

[Amy Clockwork]

I'm happy to hear that some changes are being made. The editing will help the story a lot.

P.S. You uploaded a metric ton of chapters while I was gone.