MYou said you weren't coming!
MLP: FiM
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Rumble wants to play with his toys, Lyra magics one onto her crotch. Stuff happens.
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Rant about the clopfic · 9:27am May 21st, 2023

You said you weren't coming!
Cover done by me

TABLE OF CONTENTS - it's a long-ass blog post.
[1] - Why clop/foalcon;
[2] - Writing without looking at the keyboard;
[3] - Tone of the story;
[4] - Character interactions;
[5] - Self-imposed challenges;
[6] - Personification of inanimate objects;
[7] - Write the way I like to read;
[8] - What was Lyra's surprise;
[9] - Cover image;
[10] - Writing process;
[11] - Rushed ending;
[12] - My favorite part;
[13] - MLP episode rewatch;
[14] - Feedback;

So, here I am once again. Spilling my guts about another group of words that I just wrote.

[1]
Without any beating around the bush, let's discuss the question "Why?". Why clop of all things and why foalcon. That's gonna be tough, I hope I won't sound like I am trying to justify myself. I think foalcon is disgusting. The older I get, the more disgusted I become. It wasn't so bad when I was in high school. I still considered it weird back then, but not enough to push me away forever. Eventually, I caved in.

It never was any kind of obsession. It's a craving that I have like once a month. I feel so disgusted even calling it that, but it's healthy to vent this, I think. Once I satisfy that crawing, it thankfully goes away and I go back to clopping to "normal" things like futa.

It's this weird gray area of the law, where this isn't considered illegal. It let's us explore the topic, see what people do with it, how far are they willing to go. It's a double-edged sword to be sure. I don't know how to describe this, but this fandom is weird. My first con had a mature-themed panel. What I am trying to say is that this fandom is extremely forgiving, for better and for worse. But I think, at the end of the day, that the benefits of this trust help support people like me in the realm of sanity. I really don't want to post this, but it's better for me if I do.

Just as a disclaimer. I will never go to the length of raping a minor. I feel strongly about the topic, I take it very seriously. I am being serious. No, I wasn't mistreated nor did I have any close encounters with people who did. I just like reading a lot. Fallout Equestria: Project Horizons, Diaries of a Madman and even Your Human and You all have shown me the receiving end from a perspective of a character I have known for hundreds of hours in some cases.

Even though I am not planning on experiencing it first hand, I know that intercourse is a magical act between two lovers, who are emotionally developed and fully consenting. And teenagers are not developed emotionally in most cases. And I am one of the late ones. What do I even know, I am barely past that point in my life. Just like Blackjack would say: there are people you love, and there is having sex for the sake of the mutual pleasure. I can't believe that horse is my role model, that's ridiculous.

Alright, that was my first point. Quite massive in size, but if anything deserves discussion, it's this.

Let's try to get quickly through the rest of them.

[2]
On a more neutral note, I have taken to writing without looking at the keyboard. I am quite new into this, maybe two weeks at most. I have noticed a great improvement in my typing speed. Woo! Yesterday I taped some of my keys with a roughly-textured tape to give my fingers a better distinction between them. Also, programming this way looks 100x cooler.

[3]
A big challenge in writing was keeping to the tone. I was judging how "sexy" the text sounded all the way. Cutting out what I felt ruined the mood. I don't think I will ever write clop again, this was a one-time thing to get experience and get to know the insides of these stories more. Get to know the authors more and what they go through. Keeping the tone isn't specific to pornography, but I feel it's a great way of understanding it more.

[4]
I really hope the characters I have created are readable. I myself barely come out of the house, I don't get to experience much how people interact when they know each other. All I have are some scratches from standing in the dark corner and observing. I'm joking btw. The dialogue is as good as my knowledge. I analyze real and scripted interactions a lot, reading taught me how to do it, separating the core message from the wrapper. I don't know if what I wrote is too much or too little dialogue. Is it inconsistent? I feel like Lyra should've chirped more comments throughout.

[5]
I imposed on myself a few rules, challenges to make the writing even more tedious. I wanted to stray away from commonly written phrases and sequenced. In their place I tried my best to put something original, but also fitting. Is that considered thinking outside of the box? Like, in a particular spot I could type exactly what others have, or try to have my own personal text. It might not work all the time, or even not at all, but at least it taught me more and stands out from the rest. I did try hard to make this story stand out, even when it's clop. Who says I can't try?

Another, minor thing I was avoiding, expressing how big Lyra's penis was. An interesting challenge. Some Leech has a tendency to do that, so I wanted to try going the opposite way. I also tried calling the dildo just "dildo". Was that personificating the object like I wanted it to do, or was it just annoying and immersion-breaking?

[6]
I tried giving meaning to the mirror too. There wasn't as much to it as there was for the dildo. It was my intent from the start to have two characters and two inanimate objects as the only dynamic parts of the story. In planning the objects were much more involved than what I wrote. That'd make the story way too long. I have a weakness where I can't write more than two characters at a time. IRL I can keep a conversation just fine, but if a third party joins in I become a passive spectator. That's how I got around that, by having a foursome with only two characters.

[7]
I was planning the story to fit what I'd read. When it comes to clop, I like it short, preferably under 5k words. I exceeded that limit, but only by a little. I also don't care much for the setup for a clop, where first half of the story has none of it. I don't care about the characters, sorry. I come to clop, leave a nice comment and go on with my day. If the story is written well, I can get to know them throughout the intercourse, that is what I was hoping to achieve with my story. Also also, do people care about the outros? The few more paragraphs after the climax that I feel obligated to read, since there is so little of it. That's why I was hoping to keep it quick. Maybe even squeeze more personality off the characters. There was supposed to be an explanation on what Lyra's surprise was.

[8]
But I felt it was unnecessary. The story would be worse if it was included. For those curious, the surprise, it's latest iteration, was Lyra renting a balloon; it'd also explain her tardiness. Since Rumble loves to fly, but she can't, she'd be able to rent a cloud obstacle course and watch over him while he is having his fun. It's a cute description, but way too long to include in the story itself.

[9]
I am really proud of the cover. There are a lot of imperfections in it, but that a good thing for my perfectionist mindset. Most people won't do more than glance at this small icon, so why spend more hours on it. For me, it'd never be good enough, that why it's good to release it the way it is. Both sketches were done during one lecture, I'm proud of that tempo. Composition was interesting. I planned them facing left, away from the title and description, like they are hiding behind it, coming out of the story. It is also a tactical square for max visibility. Yes, these are the things I planned out. The background color was surprisingly tough to choose. I couldn't find any good Lyra art with her color popping out. I had to saturate the hell out of her. The only background color I found her well popping out was dark gray. I didn't want to include this muted color, neither the one opposite her on the color wheel, so I just went for the saturated reds to give it the 'color of passion'. Not the best option, terrible in terms of color coordination, but at least it draws the eye more. I am such a piece of shit for that, aren't I? It was my first real try at shading. It's basic, but improves the art a ton, helps it come out to the third plane.

Shinodage's Lyra was an inspiration for this one.

[10]
This project started 6 months ago. It was one feverish night with one of those craving for foalcon. I made this story up in my bed while trying to fall asleep. I developed it, so it was more than just a shell. An hour or two later it was still clinging to my head, so I finally decided to throw off my sheets, power on the pc and write it. It took me the rest of the night to write a third of the story in a bad, first draft. I noted the rest of the story in bullet points. Three days I tried sitting down and writing more, but it was hard when the craving was gone and all I had was disgust. Throughout the months I kept coming back for a while, adding a little bit and forgetting about it. This May I decided to finish it once and for all. I finally did! It took way too many hours, but, at the end of the day, I am proud of myself, of finishing such a long-lasting project.

I am still struggling with being a newbie in writing. The challenge I faced with my first fic was still present here, but not as much as there. I kept learning a lot while writing, thus making my earlier paragraphs outdated, written by a worse me. I was constantly going back and fixing mistakes.

[11]
Was the ending rushed? I hope not. My last reading of the full thing didn't suggest so. I am so happy I don't have to read it ever again. Maybe I should've use some pre-readers, but I don't want to torture people.

[12]
I think there are some great lines in this story. My favorite part was Rumble coming out of the blackout. It was a spontaneous moment of inspiration. I had the most fun writing that part. It doesn't fit in the 'tone' that I was describing earlier, but I like it too much to get rid of it. It also helps the story stand out, in either bad or good direction. It's a gamble, but without any risks. If it works - great, if it doesn't - who cares.

[13]
In a moment of artistic block I rewatched Episode 21 of Season 7 "Marks and Recreations". That's where the line about the cutie-mark comes from. Song is a freaking banger, but the ending made me want to crack come concrete with my head. "I guess it's time to see what other things I can do," Rumble said, followed by Thunderlane doing the thing with his eyebrows. Like, bro, I already feel guilty watching the cute pony show and you are giving me this.

[14]
To all the people, who dislike this story for including foalcon: good. People are entitled to having their own opinions and expressing them. This is a good, easy way of judging a story in a trinary way: yes, no, neutral. I hate social media for greeding and removing dislikes. At least this way we know there are better people out there than I am. Or they read the story and disliked for not having that "gigantic dick" description. I'd love to talk things out, get to know people, discuss, but free time is a rarity these days. Leave a comment, any comment, I love to see them all, even the ones bashing on foalcon. What did you think of the story? Did I hit those marks I was aiming for?

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