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  • T Lost

    A great disaster has covered the world in snow and hidden the lights of the kingdom which used to glow in the west. In the days after the disaster, Facet struggles across the changed world to bring a group of foals to safety.  · NorsePony
    1,305 words · 82 views  ·  10  ·  0
  • T The Bargain

    My name's Frog. It's a strange name, I admit. It set me on the path to being a blues man, and that path started with the biggest mistake of my life. Lemme tell you the story.  · NorsePony
    2,082 words · 132 views  ·  30  ·  3
  • T Rainbow Dash and the Wild Hunt

    Rainbow Dash gets killed by some jerk in a storm cloud. Not a great way to start an evening, and it only gets more annoying from there. Turns out, that jerk and his hunters want Dash as their prey. It's kind of a bummer. But she's got other ideas.  · NorsePony
    5,099 words · 326 views  ·  42  ·  3
  • T Infection Burns from the Inside Out

    Dragging his grievously injured comrade through enemy territory, a pony travels back toward Equestria.  · NorsePony
    2,010 words · 195 views  ·  32  ·  1 · gore
  • E Our Mother's Wish

    Where did griffons come from? Here is the tale passed down from hen to chick since the earliest days of the world, when Mother Hen hatched us all.  · NorsePony
    1,025 words · 336 views  ·  62  ·  0
  • E The Trials Three

    In a time long ago, a colt mistakenly found his way into the land of faerie. Three challenges were put before him, with his freedom as the prize.  · NorsePony
    7,976 words · 318 views  ·  50  ·  0
  • T Life in the Wasteland

    A squad of soldiers travels dangerous territory on a mission for the future of Equestria, but they encounter a new kind of foe which could endanger that very future.  · NorsePony
    29,352 words · 629 views  ·  43  ·  4
  • T The War and What Came After

    The earth had belonged to the People since time immemorial, until the ponies came to push them out. For centuries, they have hidden in the forest, slowly losing ground to their enemies. But now, the gods have chosen two young warriors.  · NorsePony
    21,487 words · 1,858 views  ·  216  ·  10 · gore
  • T The Rough in the Diamond

    Silver Spoon and Diamond Tiara are the best of friends, or are they?  · NorsePony
    6,021 words · 1,706 views  ·  97  ·  14
  • T Never a Rainbow

    In this version of history, Rainbow Dash never existed.  · NorsePony
    2,001 words · 3,170 views  ·  326  ·  6

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  • Darkly Dreaming Pinkie Pinkie has a nightmare, and Twilight comforts her. by NorsePony 1,567 words · 5,072 views · 223 likes · 6 dislikes
  • Never a Rainbow In this version of history, Rainbow Dash never existed. by NorsePony 2,001 words · 3,170 views · 326 likes · 6 dislikes
  • The War and What Came After The earth had belonged to the People since time immemorial, until the ponies came to push them out. For centuries, they have hidden in the forest, slowly losing ground to their enemies. But now, the gods have chosen two young warriors. by NorsePony 21,487 words · 1,858 views · 216 likes · 10 dislikes
  • Our Mother's Wish Where did griffons come from? Here is the tale passed down from hen to chick since the earliest days of the world, when Mother Hen hatched us all. by NorsePony 1,025 words · 336 views · 62 likes · 0 dislikes
  • Lipogram A story written without using the letter "E". by NorsePony 1,173 words · 2,239 views · 91 likes · 5 dislikes
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#37 · 21w, 6d ago · · ·

This was exactly what I was looking for! Thank you so much! I can see what you mean and after writing out a brief plan of how the next 30 or so chapters were going to go then looking at this I can see that this prologue I have written is not needed.

This shouldn't be in the prologue at all, because this is just you telling-not-showing the first chapter or two of the story. It would make sense if this were a sequel story and the prologue was meant to catch the reader up on what happened in the earlier stories, but in a first story this just seems massively lazy.
Okay, I will admit to being lazy with this. I understand what you mean by telling-not-showing here and I think that I will keep the prologue but I won't end up using it in the actual story. Thanks for really explaining this for me. (Sorry but the thread was locked and I couldn't reply in the normal way. Again, thanks for the help!)

#36 · 57w, 1d ago · · ·

Hi NorsePony! How are you? :pinkiehappy:

#35 · 95w, 3d ago · · ·

Norse...pony...

I thought it said Porse Nony..

Wat.

#34 · 115w, 1d ago · · ·

>>550920 Hah, that's awesome.

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