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You're welcome, I hope you didn't take it too personally, because it really is interesting and I do enjoy it. It's just the inner grammar freak that gets bothered by it haha.

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I suppose I just like the fantasy of it all, it's a strange crossover of a crossover of a crossover.
One thing that's bothered me from the start though is you quite often use wording that doesnt flow correctly.
Another thing that bothers me is how much you use/used "instantly".
Not trying to roast or anything like that, it's a good story but could definitely use a fine comb over once it's done for quality.

thank you for the fav