Well, it's done.
I'm not gonna lie, I'm not happy with how it turned out. I actually started this story almost a year ago, and I've learned so much since then. I'm already planning another CloudFlitter story at the moment which hopefully will turn out better than Chasing Clouds.
A week ago I submitted "No, You're a Unicorn. Now Act Like one!' to Equestria Daily. Today, I got a rejection email. So, I've decided to put it on hiatus,'til I have a few completed stories under my belt.
Though, if you haven't read it yet. The ending of the current draft is an okay ending. There's more that I want to happen, but it isn't the end of the world if I never come back to it. (But, I'm sure that I will. I already have most of the prologue for the sequel written.)
After reading the comments, I got another review on Ponychan. So, for the past few weeks I've been re-writing parts of it.
Parts that will be changed:
The chapter will now begin earlier in Lyra's day, specifically while she's at school.
The scene where Bon Bon and Lyra meet is now longer and Bon Bon doesn't instantly believe Lyra.