My PM system is acting oddly so I've decided to make my request of you being my proofreader in your comments.

So I am, looking for first impressions for my experimental fic, 'Escapades of a Smut-Peddler' or 'Word-WhoreMonger in Canterlot'. I haven't made up mind yet on the title. Which ever sounds funnier.

It's Romance and Slice of Life.

Summary: A interlude in Flick's, newly appointed Canterlot Chronicler, life from where he's being held hostage in a power-play among the Canterlot Noblest Houses due to his illegitimate son status. Despite the assassination and threats made against him to force his father to change his Will... He finds the time to write about Love and Life. While trying to find someone like his mother, it turns out he's more like her than he realized.
Escapades of a Smut Peddler
The Password is peddler.
Mainly, I wonder if Flick's personality stands out or if I should switch to 3rd person.
Thanks in Advance