293334 Dat OC doe
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Seriously work on that. Thats not good
Bad brony, bad *wacks him with a rolled up newspaper*

Hey, I saw all the stuff the people said on your story. Look, just because they say that now, the more you write and the more you try to improve, even the worst of authors can become great. Don't take their comments to heart. This is easier said than done, I know that very well myself actually. The hardest part of writing is starting out. I'm sorry that all the other people who commented on your story just berated you with terrible comments and no recommendations of how to improve. If you need some help with grammar or spelling feel free to message me anytime. I'll even pre-read for you if you would like me to. Don't give up.

Thanks for the watch.