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The presentation looks way better now, and you got featured! good job

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Thanks for the feedback! I decided that you had a point, so I edited the story's title to just "Mistress's Downfall" and moved the note at the top of the description to the bottom. I also added an image to it as well.

Just a little tip, I suggest redoing the description for The MLP-Fication: Mistress's Downfall.
I'm not sure what it is about it that makes me not want to read the story but its just something about the presentation of both the name and the description of the story that turns me away.
Also that you give the entire character's description in the description and what about to happen, i feel like you should be more vague, Less is more, as they say.
Maybe it has something to do with notes at both the top and the bottom of the description, the lack of a picture to entice the imagination or the story name, that.... that.... .... I'm not sure what's wrong with the name but it just feels off.
Maybe its the "The MLP-Fication:" (is Fication a word?) bit of it, makes me think of a story franchise rather then just an individual story (pretty sure this part is just personal bias about not liking those kind of story names).

Got to make a good "Hook" to draw readers in and make them curious enough to try and read the story

Thank you for the fave on Dust on the Wind and remember that comments are greatly appreciated. And go ahead and hit the like button if you haven't already.

Thanks for the watch too.