I am a complete amateur and have spent many hours writing two different fanfics. With 2/2 and 4/8 like/dislikes on each fanfic neither ones do people comment on how I can improve. Aside grammar. I however fixed the grammar problems, by using microsoft word. Is there anyone that could read one of my stories and tell me how to improve? Tumult is the one i'd rather have read, but hey. Any help given is great