RIP

So whatever did happen to Back in control? Haven't seen an update in quite some time!

First chapter submitted. Short I know but this is all a test run to see if you guys like my style.

951628 Oh no I really appreciate feedback. Though As far as rewriting the latter part of the story goes I dont think that I would allowed or should do that, To continue an abandoned story is one thing but I just dont feel right taking someone elses work, no matter how much I may not approve of what it turned into, and changing it up to make it my own. Though that would be a Fan-Fiction of a Fan-Fiction? Lol. I really do appreciate you stepping up and chipping in as Im working entirely from scratch here and in my view the objective of the writer is to please the audience as much as himself. That is why I will always ask viewers what they would like to see or change. Then take the best ideas into consideration for implementation into the story. As to the low point it ended at I at least have some room to work with there because it left a series of places I can take anon and things to do. Personally the Chrysalis thing I enjoyed and can use them as sorts of a spy network. Please feel free at anytime to message me with ideas and whatnot any help or pointers would be greatly appreciated.

I don't want to be the first one to ask this but have you also thought about trying to, well, redo some of the story? Out of Control was actually pretty interesting to me for the most part and had that profound effect where the only problems I had with it were the things the characters actually did that were 'supposed' to make the reader feel like that. Like the rape scenes with AJ and Fluttershy and whatnot but it felt like it got just...way 'too' story oriented. Now I know story here and there is definitely important for these fimfictions but in this case the whole thing kind of came crashing down when it just became...'Chrysalis is suddenly here and then you're kidnapped and THREE FUCKING YEARS in horrible confinement go by and everything is shit now and all your relationships are flipped back to zero and your home is basically gone 'again' and-' Yeah...like, what the hell? It confused me to no end seeing that and it just sort of cut the whole thing apart for me. PERSONALLY, of course. There may be people who actually might've enjoyed it but...yeah, it played on the weak and helpless anon character way too much to me. You said you plan to make Anon better in general, which is good because yeah he kind of had no influence or control over anything. And that's why I also hated seeing him just 'make up' with AJ and RD after they, you know, raped him over the course of two weeks while he was bound, chained, and basically under chemical influence and basically mentally retarded with his free will to be 'believed' taken forcefully from him and their abusive, actually very evil behaviors and then they just say 'they couldn't control themselves' and it's all okay. He didn't even really feel 'that' bad other than 'slight', yes, 'slight' trust issues with them. It's just...twice almost in a row, it's amazing he just lets them off the hook like that.

That's starting to go a bit far though. But really, when you think about it, he's definitely 'not' accountable for the combine act either when you think about it on a moral level. Not yet anyways, but as far as they can prove, it wasn't him. In fact...he kind of got the worst of that deal too. Jesus, Anon can't even remember it but he was a slave. I 'really' want to see what you can do for this story, so please be strong! I'm up for whether you continue it or even straight up undo some of it but it's all up to you now!

P.S. Excuse me, I forgot to re-iterate that this is entirely just 'my' perspective on the whole thing and I don't want to be the 'only' factor that influences your decision. I just did really want to put in my two cents.