I turned slowly, putting every ounce of hate into a single glare directed at that fucking cunt who had the nerve to say that
Heh I loved that line. I'm feeling some sadistic glee myself, glad he didn't go the "run into the arms forgiveness routine". Gads, that angst is pretty good, I'm only disappointed it was so short.
2609059 I'm hoping he will not take the path where he would have yelled about how Luna didn't know about what isolation is, and then she would have retorted that she was on the moon for 1000 years. I say that because it would seem to leave the impression that her suffering "more" somehow make his trivial. Even if she did get banished for so long, it in no way diminishes what he went through.
hahaha! thank god someone who doesn't take shit from ponies and doesn't fucking live with them after a fucking apology, even tho they didn't apologize BUT I LOVE THIS CHARACTER! SO ANGRY! SO SAD! SO INSANE!
ok with this chapter several ideas of what happens next pop into my head 1 he travels for a long while(kills a couple manticores and maybe a hydra along the way) and stumbles upon a treasure tomb and he finds the chaos gauntlet only known to and created by discord. looks like these fc08.deviantart.net/fs27/f/2008/150/f/6/Lion_Armor_Claw_Gauntlets_by_Azmal.jpg but with a large black onyx gem in the middle and there is only one. 2 he goes to pick it up when it suddenly leaps and attaches to him like in the mask or I believe the 2nd The Mummy quickly and painfully turning in to something on the lines of thismedia.tumblr.com/tumblr_m2c7afvWBz1qe0ktf.png here's a pic with a better look at his armi134.photobucket.com/albums/q81/Alexdragonslayer/Elsword/RecklessFist1-1.png 3 after the physical change he slowly starts to lose his humanity mentaly and gaining magical abilities due to the gauntlet vast amount of chaos magic thus becoming the monster the ponies thought him to be he also starts to get a crazy sadistic glare like thisimg353.imageshack.us/img353/3568/snapshot20090103195309df0.jpg
The chaos magic can be depleted but it would be difficult to because the more chaos caused around the gauntlet the more chaos magic it gains and the stronger the magic gets.That's all I have what you do with my ideas is up to you(if you even like them). I'd make a story myself but I suck at writing and I often have trouble making my ideas flow properly.
All right, they pissed Geoff, and a simple excuse obliviously didn't work, ponies usually fight and then became again bestes friends, the meanwhile, when they hug, over the background shine a nice rainbow.
Luna now will be a pain in the ass for geoff, since she see herself in the darker time when Nightmare Moon appeared.
At least he didn't shot with the pistol to scare away the ponies, but that would have been hilarious!
Carries his scar around. Huh I think in one sentence of minor philosophy you have just written the most endearing notion in a post apocalyptic tale I have read since FoE
2613725 It won't. I appreciate the input, but I've already got a direction to take the character that I'm set in to.
Also. . . Artifact/power acquisition is touchy. . . the slightest slip and the shit storm turns into a gasoline soaked shit storm over a fireworks convention.
2618549 I see that's too bad, but I guess I can make multiple OC's though. the one I made is called Nega Storm. I'd show a pic but apparently I cant upload a pic from a personal file
Living Alaska is indeed a bitch to live in...living in a forest for half a year hell i was going nuts not being able to talk to anyone...XD So i can relate because coming back from the hunting trip i had mood swings when people said it was 'easy' and such. Though i question...what happens back at earth and such seeing he left a book and entry logs...will he return to earth?
Also i love how this guy is really just trying to get rid of it all... all the deaths all the trying to survive and shit only to have your new friends call you a monster and look at you with hatred eyes seeing what you might have done. Great job on his chaos behavior....of...porn...XD I mean hell i was laughing at the fact he was crying then laughing. And it's true to take all the laughs you can to keep you sane.
Though the first two chapters i did have a hard time understanding. I've gotten the war and stuff killing but what happen in the forest? Was he hunting and got blood on him? Other then that i understood the rest of the chapters as it came to light. GOOD JOB MISTER/MISS on writing something that indeed happens to someone that way from killing to live to "hey man this world is so peaceful we threw in some ponies to make it more peaceful" XD XD XD
2641685 agreed (now if there was an update we'd all be in business) but I guess good writing takes time(a little on the long side though) but I've dealt with worse update times
If he was a soldier this would be a very fitting song right about now.
Although last chapter with Soarin you made it sound like he has something against the military, being you said he got more angry upon noticing the military insignia on him. If that's the case and not me misunderstanding that perception, then he wouldn't like this song.
Personally I have to agree, the human's forgiving ponies for whatever they do just pisses me right off. I absolutely hate when RD is forgiven like 10 seconds after she attacked a newly arrived human, her excuse being: "I thought you were a monster". NO! Bitch that's NOT going to fly!
Unless the dude came in without clothes, which I haven't read a story yet like that, than HOW do you think he's not an intelligent being? How many animals/monsters go around wearing clothes? That one fact alone should blow her and AJ's most commonly used defence sky bloody fucking high. In fact, I may just bring that up in the prologue I'm writing for a fic. Because you know what? I want a human to point out the obvious for once!
With that, I turned on my heels. In a single jump I was over the small stream, and trudging forward to my new home. I could hear the sniffles behind me, some comforting words being exchanged, and it incited a twinge of sadistic glee in my mind.
Stunning! I like it so much!
More! Faster!
please.
Good chapter. Can't wait to see more.
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Heh I loved that line. I'm feeling some sadistic glee myself, glad he didn't go the "run into the arms forgiveness routine". Gads, that angst is pretty good, I'm only disappointed it was so short.
2609019 Ohhhhhh you got a little bit of failure on your face there, good sir.
2609042
Ba Dum Tsss!
*troll*
you got me this time
That's right, take a bite out of Luna and Applejack. I'm sure Luna would tell him about how she got banished to make him feel bad.
2609059 I'm hoping he will not take the path where he would have yelled about how Luna didn't know about what isolation is, and then she would have retorted that she was on the moon for 1000 years. I say that because it would seem to leave the impression that her suffering "more" somehow make his trivial. Even if she did get banished for so long, it in no way diminishes what he went through.
2609040
Did not realize someone else commented before me until i checked the comments afterwards.
was legit listening to this song while reading this...
2609170 I think he meant the shower - the physical part - was undersized for him.....
hahaha! thank god someone who doesn't take shit from ponies and doesn't fucking live with them after a fucking apology, even tho they didn't apologize BUT I LOVE THIS CHARACTER! SO ANGRY! SO SAD! SO INSANE!
"said the one who called him a bloody monster."
"Logic at its finest mate."
Me gusta, you got yourself a like and a FAV!
Roll on brother!
2609037 Oh god do I hate when they do that. They call someone a monster and a couple of words make it all better, I like this route much better.
2609704 Amen!
ok with this chapter several ideas of what happens next pop into my head
1 he travels for a long while(kills a couple manticores and maybe a hydra along the way) and stumbles upon a treasure tomb and he finds the chaos gauntlet only known to and created by discord.
looks like these fc08.deviantart.net/fs27/f/2008/150/f/6/Lion_Armor_Claw_Gauntlets_by_Azmal.jpg
but with a large black onyx gem in the middle and there is only one.
2 he goes to pick it up when it suddenly leaps and attaches to him like in the mask or I believe the 2nd The Mummy quickly and painfully turning in to something on the lines of thismedia.tumblr.com/tumblr_m2c7afvWBz1qe0ktf.png
here's a pic with a better look at his armi134.photobucket.com/albums/q81/Alexdragonslayer/Elsword/RecklessFist1-1.png
3 after the physical change he slowly starts to lose his humanity mentaly and gaining magical abilities due to the gauntlet vast amount of chaos magic thus becoming the monster the ponies thought him to be
he also starts to get a crazy sadistic glare like thisimg353.imageshack.us/img353/3568/snapshot20090103195309df0.jpg
The chaos magic can be depleted but it would be difficult to because the more chaos caused around the gauntlet the more chaos magic it gains and the stronger the magic gets.That's all I have what you do with my ideas is up to you(if you even like them). I'd make a story myself but I suck at writing and I often have trouble making my ideas flow properly.
All right, they pissed Geoff, and a simple excuse obliviously didn't work, ponies usually fight and then became again bestes friends, the meanwhile, when they hug, over the background shine a nice rainbow.
Luna now will be a pain in the ass for geoff, since she see herself in the darker time when Nightmare Moon appeared.
At least he didn't shot with the pistol to scare away the ponies, but that would have been hilarious!
PS: Applejack is going to have a bad time.
Carries his scar around. Huh I think in one sentence of minor philosophy you have just written the most endearing notion in a post apocalyptic tale I have read since FoE
PTSD Geoff is the best Geoff, also, second comment relating to PTSD today.... I'm a horrible person.
2610421 I hope not. The "find ancient artifacts that give powers" route has been overdone.
2613725
It won't.
I appreciate the input, but I've already got a direction to take the character that I'm set in to.
Also. . . Artifact/power acquisition is touchy. . . the slightest slip and the shit storm turns into a gasoline soaked shit storm over a fireworks convention.
2613741
2613725
really I didn't know that. maybe ive had too much time on my hands with anime and video games since being clear to graduate
is it generic or overused to have an alicorn oc? because I just made one
2617963 Personally speaking, I would say yes.
2618549
I see that's too bad, but I guess I can make multiple OC's though. the one I made is called Nega Storm. I'd show a pic but apparently I cant upload a pic from a personal file
2609019
Says the guy who was second... EPIC FAIL!!
Living Alaska is indeed a bitch to live in...living in a forest for half a year hell i was going nuts not being able to talk to anyone...XD So i can relate because coming back from the hunting trip i had mood swings when people said it was 'easy' and such. Though i question...what happens back at earth and such seeing he left a book and entry logs...will he return to earth?
Also i love how this guy is really just trying to get rid of it all... all the deaths all the trying to survive and shit only to have your new friends call you a monster and look at you with hatred eyes seeing what you might have done. Great job on his chaos behavior....of...porn...XD I mean hell i was laughing at the fact he was crying then laughing. And it's true to take all the laughs you can to keep you sane.
Though the first two chapters i did have a hard time understanding. I've gotten the war and stuff killing but what happen in the forest? Was he hunting and got blood on him? Other then that i understood the rest of the chapters as it came to light. GOOD JOB MISTER/MISS on writing something that indeed happens to someone that way from killing to live to "hey man this world is so peaceful we threw in some ponies to make it more peaceful" XD XD XD
Take care and...
Mahalo
Well, I'm hoping he camps out in the forest for a while and stew a bit, I hate when the OC just instant forgives everything that's handed to him.
awesome story! can't wait til' the next chapter
2641685 amen to that, brother
Ohh god this is an amazing fic!
It fills me with all kinds of feels
I hope you intent to update it soon, liked and faved!
2641685
agreed
(now if there was an update we'd all be in business) but I guess good writing takes time(a little on the long side though) but I've dealt with worse update times
2641685 You speak the truth my man. You have now gained the rank of prophet omong us.
2641685
agreed it's more realistic if the OC storms off somewhere after all forgiveness is earned not given.
If he was a soldier this would be a very fitting song right about now.
Although last chapter with Soarin you made it sound like he has something against the military, being you said he got more angry upon noticing the military insignia on him. If that's the case and not me misunderstanding that perception, then he wouldn't like this song.
Personally I have to agree, the human's forgiving ponies for whatever they do just pisses me right off. I absolutely hate when RD is forgiven like 10 seconds after she attacked a newly arrived human, her excuse being: "I thought you were a monster". NO! Bitch that's NOT going to fly!
Unless the dude came in without clothes, which I haven't read a story yet like that, than HOW do you think he's not an intelligent being? How many animals/monsters go around wearing clothes? That one fact alone should blow her and AJ's most commonly used defence sky bloody fucking high. In fact, I may just bring that up in the prologue I'm writing for a fic. Because you know what? I want a human to point out the obvious for once!
That ending... I loved it.
😈😈😈😈 they deserved it