The beach residing in Manticore Ville was completely barren of any life. Nopony was willing to have some watery fun while the beach’s sand was basically replaced by snow. The only pony nearby was Rainbow Dash, who was leaning on the guard railing that separated the sidewalk and the shore. She checked her watch and saw that she was still half an hour early. Dash stared at the ocean for a while when she noticed that she was nervously tapping her legs.
‘Why am I so nervous?’ Dash thought, ‘It’s a simple plan. What could go wrong?’
Dash then casually turned toward the lighthouse that also served as a clubhouse. She smiled as she remembered how Rarity, after becoming friends with the pegasus, remodeled the entire clubhouse so that it can actually be habitable. Even though it was technically Dash’s now, the pegasus did not really have any use for it. Thinking it would be a waste to let it gather dust, she decided to give it to her mentor, Soarin; whose only possession seemed to be the clothes on his back, a moldy bed, and whatever resided in the wooden shack he slept next to. Soarin refused the gift at first, but the snowy season eventually changed his mind and he now lived in the clubhouse.
Dash looked down at her wrist and stared at the weights that Soarin gave her; two for her wrist and two for her legs and each weight was about fifteen pounds. The athlete no longer noticed their presence and she wondered whether she should go ask for Soarin for heavier weights. She checked her watch again and saw that she still had a lot of time,
“I might as well pay him a visit.” Dash said, “The old man is probably lonely without me.”
Smiling to herself, Dash jumped over the guard railing and jogged toward the beach clubhouse. As she got closer, she started to hear rambunctious laughter. Confused, she picked up her pace until she was a couple of yards away. She then stopped and saw that there were two ponies sitting on the clubhouse’s wooden steps. One of them was Soarin, who had a beer in one hand and the other hand was resting on a now empty six-pack of beer. His cheeks were a light red and Dash knew it wasn’t because of the cold.
The pony sitting next to him was a complete stranger. He was an Earth pony with dark skin, a minty green sweater, and a bushy afro. He seemed to be the same age as Soarin and his cheeks were as red as Soarin’s.
As Soarin casually glanced toward the beach, he saw Rainbow Dash. He immediately beamed,
“Well look who decided to finally visit!” he yelled as he stood up. Soarin walked toward the pegasus and ruffled her hair with a big grin on his face. He then turned to the strange pony,
“Hey, GM!” he said, “This is the mare I’ve been talking about; the little wildfire that has been raising Tartarus over at the academy.”
The Earth Pony, GM, got up and walked over to the two pegasai. Dash noted that GM was quite tall, but very thin.
“Hi there!” GM said as he reached the pegasai, “I’m GM. You must be Rainbow Dash. Soarin has told me a lot about you.”
Dash smiled, “All awesome things, right?”
GM was about to speak, but stopped at Soarin’s suddenly stern look. The old pegasus then turned back to Rainbow and said, “GM is an old buddy of mine during my military days. We joined the army at the same time and completed our basic training together. We were separated after I began training as a Wonderbolt, but we still kept in touch.”
“At least until the…incident happened.” GM said, casting an uncomfortable glance at Soarin.
Dash knew what GM was talking about. She remembered that Soarin was left to die by his so-called friend. After that, Soarin, who wasn’t in the calmest state of mind after being rescued and reunited with his ‘friend’, was discharged from the Wonderbolts. Dash didn’t really know happened after that. All she knew was that Soarin ended up in Manticore Academy and he stayed.
“Again, I’m sorry about not writing back.” Soarin said as he patted GM’s shoulder, “But hey, I’m glad to see you. We got really lucky that you just happened to be visiting Manticore Ville while I was roaming around the streets.”
“We’re lucky that I decided to spend my vacation visiting my relatives in Manticore Hills.” GM said.
“Are you still in the military, GM?” Dash said. She was curious to learn more about somepony Soarin would befriend.
“Yes.” GM said, “After basic training, I decided to join the Royal Guards-”
Soarin snickered. He tried to cover off as a sneeze, but GM was not fooled.
“You got something to say?” GM said.
Soarin chuckled, “I mean no disrespect, but I wouldn’t call the ‘Royal Guard’ a real part of the military. I mean, when was the last time you saw any real action? You guys are more like a neighborhood watch”
GM smiled, “You say that, and yet you joined the branch of military that focuses more on posing for pictures. However, in the Royal Guard, you need a little thing called skill.
Soarin smiled and slowly got into a fighting stance, “Why don’t we have a friendly sparring match like we used too. Let’s see which is better: Royal Guards or Wonderbolts.”
GM took his fighting stance, which looked like a low squat, “Sure; I could use a quick exercise.”
The two old stallions prepared their attacks, but then Rainbow Dash stepped in front of Soarin and faced GM.
“Hold on, Soarin.” Dash said, “Let me take him up.”
Soarin raised an eyebrow and said, “Why? This isn’t your fight.”
“Yes it is, because nopony disrespects the Wonderbolts while I’m around.” Dash said. She then got into her stance to prove her resolve.
GM stared at the young pegasus and grinned, “Let her fight Who knows, I might teach her a thing or two. I’m also curious to see whether she is as good as you make her out to be. Unless you think Dash is all talk.”
Soarin stared at the two for a while, thinking deeply. He eventually smiled, “Dash, show him what a Wonderbolt can do.”
“Right!” Dash said. She rushed GM and prepared an attack. Once she was within range, she flapped her wings and performed a pegasus uppercut.
GM was launched toward the sky. Dash grinned, but she was confused. She didn’t actually feel her punch connect. She then saw that GM was now very high up. Even though GM was skinny, Dash knew there was no way her punch could launch somepony that high.
“He jumped!” Dash said in surprised. She was astounded any pony could jump so high. He must have been at least 15 feet above the ground.
“Be careful.” Soarin said, “GM may not be a pegasus, but he can still gain lots of air. He focuses his Earth pony strength into his legs to jump high.
GM looked down and grinned at Dash’s surprise face. He then balled himself up and began to spin as he came back toward the ground.
“You have got to be kidding me.” Dash said as she saw the spinning Earth pony quickly closing in on her. She prepared another pegasus uppercut as the ball got closer. At the last second, GM de-balled and brought out his leg. He then swung it down for a devastating axe kick.
Dash reacted instinctively and raised her arms to block. It worked somewhat; the kick did not reach her face, but her arms felt the full force of the kick.
“Bucking Faust!” Dash yelled as she massaged her arms. GM reached the ground and quickly created distance between him and Dash.
“Impressive, Dash.” GM said, “Not many ponies are fast enough to block that move.”
“Thanks.” Dash said through clenched teeth.
“Rainbow Dash.” Soarin yelled, “It’s time for your next phase of training. Do not worry; you do not need a radio for this.”
“Radio?” GM said.
“Sweet.” Dash said, “What is it?”
“Dodge!” Soarin said.
“Dodge?” Dash said. She turned to Soarin for confirmation. GM took the chance and used his legs to jump toward Dash. He turned himself into a ball again and, once he reached Dash, he brought his leg up and performed another axe kick. The kick connected with the top of Dash’s head and her face instantly met the snowy beach.
“Why didn’t you dodge?!” Soarin said.
Dash plucked her head from the snow and yelled back, “How the hay was I supposed to dodge that?”
Rainbow quickly checked her face to see if she was bleeding. Thankfully, the snow cushioned the impact, but the top of her head was definitely throbbing. Dash got half-way up and performed a pegasus leg sweep. GM was swept of his feet. He quickly regained his footing, but not before Dash set up and connected a pegasus dropkick to GM’s chest.
“What was one of the first things I ever told you?” Soarin said.
“To leave you alone or else you’ll kill me?” Dash said. GM and Dash were now focusing on punching. Dash could tell this was not GM’s strong suit; GM’s punches did not hurt as much as his kicks. Every time he tried to gain distance, Dash closed it quickly. Rainbow was also now better at punching thanks to Rarity, who would occasionally teach the pegasus a thing or two in exchange for being a model for her dresses.
“Not that!” Soarin said, “I said that when Pegasai fight, we use our speed to our advantage. Our speed comes from our wings. I’m telling you to use your wings for short burst of speed to dodge faster and swifter.”
“Wouldn’t it be easier to fly?” Dash said.
“That takes more effort than it would to simply dodge.”
Dash decided to try out Soarin’s advice. When GM tried a haymaker, Dash flapped her wings and, instead of flying, she sidestepped him. In a split second, Dash was at GM’s side, safely away from the haymaker.
“Awesome.” Dash said. She then delivered a kidney punch. GM was still surprised by Dash’s sudden dodge that he took the blow and went down on one knee.
“Not bad.” GM said in a slightly pained voice, “Not bad at all. Now, let’s see how fast your new dodge is.”
Much to Dash’s surprise, GM quickly recovered from the punch and jumped away. Dash now assumed that the fighting was over and the training began. As Soarin supervised, GM would propel himself as a ball and Dash would then perform a pegasus dodge at the last possible moment.
After about half an hour of training, Dash was able to dodge a majority of GM’s attacks. On the last trial, Dash decided to get creative. As GM performed his ball attack again, Dash waited like usual. In the last second, instead of going left of right, she used her wings to propel herself downward. She was lying face up and saw that GM would fly above her. Once he reached Dash, the pegasus brought her legs toward her chest and then kicked upward. The kick connected with GM’s back. He cried in pain as he de-balled and flopped down next to Dash.
“That was… actually quite… surprising.” GM said as he tried to catch his breath, “There is nothing… like a kick to the back to… remind somepony… of their age.”
“Thank…you.” Dash said. She too was out of breath. As Dash slowly sat up, she suddenly heard clapping.
“What the-”
Dash turned toward the guard railing that separated the beach shore and the sidewalk. There she saw Colgate, Lotus, and Aloe, all clapping and nodding their head in approval.
“Looks like you got some friends waiting for you.” Soarin said as he walked toward Dash and helped her onto her feet.
“Not exactly.” Dash said. She still had not clue whether or not she would consider the three preps friends. However, she did not consider them enemies, “However, I do need to go with them.”
“Okay then.” Soarin said as he helped GM up, “Just be careful and remember what I taught you.”
“Roger that.” Dash said. She turned toward GM and said, “So, can teach me how to do that axe kick and ball attack thing?”
GM swatted away some snow from his body and smiled, “Sorry Dash, but I don’t have the time. I’m heading back to Canterlot the moment the holidays are over and I’ll be spending my time here with my family. I’m actually supposed to be shopping for them when I met up with Soarin. I should probably get back to doing that.” He added with a nervous laugh. He then patted Dash’s shoulder, “Don’t worry, you seem like a bright kid. The axe kick shouldn’t be that hard for you to learn by yourself; just make sure you’re balanced as you bring your leg up high and the send it crashing down. The ball attack would be harder to learn, but I think Soarin could teach you that.”
“I doubt that.” Soarin said with a mischievous smile, “I rather not have Dash looking like a total fool when kicking flank.”
Soarin dodged GM’s jab. Dash opened her mouth to say something, but stopped when she heard Colgate yelling,
“Dash, you can figure out which one’s your real father later! We need to get going!”
“Motherbucker…” Dash said quietly.
“She seems impatient.” Soarin said, “I suggest you get going, Dash.”
“Wait!” Dash said. She suddenly remembered why she even came here in the first place, “I’m gonna need some heavier weights because I’m not even registering these.” She gestured to the waits on her wrist and legs.”
“Don’t worry, I’ll send them to you later. Now go because it looks like one of those ponies is ready to start throwing punches.” Soarin said as he pointed to the preps.
“Alright, later then!” Dash said as she ran toward the preps.
“You know,” GM said as he and Soarin watched the four ponies walk away, “that Dash reminds me of somepony.”
“Really? Who?” Soarin asked.
GM’s face scrunched up in concentration, “Hmm… I can’t remember her name. She was the one that convinced you to join the Wonderbolts.”
Soarin took a moment to remember before he roared with laughter, “Oh my Faust! Dash really is just like her. I can’t believe I never realized.”
“Do you still keep I touch with her?” GM asked as the two walked back to the steps of the beach clubhouse.
“Yep.” Soarin said, “She’s the only one that I have not lost contact with.”
“Is she still the same flying-loving, arrogant brawler?”
Soarin sat down on the wooden steps and smirked, “Buck no. She’s a hard-flank now.”
I'm sorry to say, but I'm not a fan of this idea. These types of chapters seem more like filler, and not the good kind either. Not to mention that, no offense, but you have a bit of a gap between chapter updates, which is understandable, but I'd rather see you put time into the stuff that actually moves the story when you do update {Not to mention that, aside from Fluffle Puff and some Fallout Equestria characters, I'm not a fan of OC's. I prefer the canon characters}. Of course, this is just my opinion.
OMG LOL
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Sorry for the potential wave of fan chapters. This was the first thing I could think of to show appreciation. I know a lot of bronies despise OC because of Mary/Gary sues, but I also know bronies like having their creation seen in stories.
Don't worry, like I said, the OC chapters won't affect the storyline. There just there so I can write while I flesh out the next storyline chapter. (While writing the first fan chapter, I actually came up with some knew scenes for future chapters).
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When in doubt, pay with a radio
That was awesome, Sliver-Mane! Me using certain skills like the Axe Kick (Rock Lee from Naruto/Naruto: Shippuden) and using and Homing Attack/Spin Dash (Sonic The Hedgehog from The Sonic The Hedgehog Franchise) against Rainbow Dash and it was quiet Outstanding, even though I'll not be in the Fanfic I still will read this!
(Note: Mainly I'm a mixer of Huey Freeman (Mane), Rock Lee (Fighting Skill) & Sonic The Hedgehog (Fighting Skill) in this chapter. )
I know it's not going to happen, but will I be Mentioned later on? Just Out Curiosity.
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Most likely when Dash uses an axe kick, which she will learn.
5837889 Alright! And Outstanding Job on that chapter too, man!
5837393 i like this his my OC
Name of OC: Code Breaker
Gender: male
Race: unicorn
Age: 17
Occupation: Clique: Loner/Gamer/Nerd with a little Preppie in him when it comes to computer parts
Personality:His weird in a good way kind of guy that love and live for tech he will give you money if you give him some computer parts or anything really on the type of part is from. But he have a thing call nerd rage not when its something stupid over who is better superman or spiderman over the things like how stupid this world can get at times making him unstable at times but is mostly lvl headed, on that note he will never hurt anyone unless is someone really close to him like his little brother
Reason for interaction: His low on computer part in his apartment, he move out when he have made a good living off being a freelace programmer amd eletice repier man
clothing or quirks: in school he where a black suit the school logo on the right arm slafe and a messenger bag that carry all the things he needs and is on his last yr at the school. but at night or weekend he look upsit of what he wears he where a black t-shrit with a skull on the froth of it and long black pants with purple stirps on it and wear goggles all the time when out of the school and when his working and always of a headset on him with a mic link up to his cell phone. but at night if your lucky you see him walking in to a strip club for mares that have a little DLC bweeten there marehood and there legs and have black and blue hiar
Name of OC: Fast Claw ( I suck at nameing sometimes )
Gender: male
Race: griffin
Age: 15
Occupation: Loner/Gamer, only hang out with the nerd at the arcade
Personality:Always hipper from always having soda with him at all times and engery drinks with carffin pilles. he love gaming all the way where to see him with out a handheld in his hands. but like his big brother he get really pissed at times even more so then him the reson you see him with a handheld becasue the grown ups and everyone that try to rip those thing away from him they find out the hard way why to never fucked with him when it come to gaming. Gaming is not the only thing he do he love to to go fishing IRL but not with out a handheld with him.
Reason for interaction: The one of the Jocks take all his handheld and hide it from him. you need to find them all before it rains and if you do he will pay you about 150$ for all of them and give you a handheld of your own too play games when your broad
clothing or quirks: unlike his big brother he where the santerd uifrom but like his brother he wears werid cheah of clotheing he will where a black hoodie that on words on froth of it saying "13O0/\/\ H34t 2h0oT" with a sniper shigt around it of a helment oo the inside of the cross hairs that have torn off arm saelfs and use purple/black glove to replace them and where noen green pants
when you talk to him 80% of the time he talks in "l33t speack" and have black and purple hair
5837889 Oh and i also forgot to add that the handheld game that was given to her was an old school Game Boy Advance but this was no nomle game boy color it was moded out with a back light sracen and have a game cartage that hold ever game made for that system along side other system.
the list of system games that was made was and console
Wonderswan Color/non
Neo Geo Pocket Color/non
Game boy and Game boy color
TurboExpress
Atari Lynx
NES
sega master system
Atair 2600 to 7800
5837889 I hope this is not too mech info for ya
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I will most likely condense this, but it should be fine
5838549 and i forgot this part if you help the big brother fullly stock his with parts he will give her something for free you pick.
it could be a cell phone it can be a gift card or anything really.
and the little brother now dash have something to do when she wait for someone
I really like this story. Fight scenes are awesome.
Very good, as usual! Though I couldn't help but "snrk" at the thought of somepony rolling into a ball and launching themselves at someone, like sonic the hedgehog or something. That just seems ridiculous! But that's a tiny gripe in the grand scheme of things. Keep up the good work!
5837393 or with muffins from derpy
Alright, sounds good.
Quick Read
Female
15
Nerd
INTJ to the supreme.
Challenged to a prank war.
Is Welsh. Do what you like with that one!
OK.
Dusk moon
Male
Unicorn
Greaser
14
Has no genuine hatred towards the other cliques, he just fits in the most with the greasers. Is very laid back like vinyl but will kill you if you hurt his friends or family.
Wants to see if dash is as bad as the preppies and jock say she is.
..hmm I think I know who their talking about.....maybe
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Thanks
Hopefully they can get cooler!
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*shrugs* Crazy things can happen when fans get involved
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Roger
And the OC will challenge RD, right? (Remember, you can challenge any character, even Pinkie)
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On it!!
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With those three, anything is possible
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... *cough* don't tell any one yet, you will know later on*cough*
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I would say that I took last year off. Now, I'm ready to write.
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Yep. That will be the only time you will see my 'self-insert' oc in this story.
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Hehe, preferably. However, it's your chapter. you can do what you wish with this one. Well, within reason, of course.
5843429 yay!
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Alrighty!
5847435 i forgot this video
heres his theme
5837389 I know that the OC Chapters won't affect the story, but that's part of the issue {Alongside the OC stuff in general}: They're just filler. Filler is generally regarded as a bad thing that just slows down the story {If you watch Anime a lot, you'll know what I mean} . Sometimes it can be decent if it's used to give more characterization {Hypothetical random example: A chapter of Twilight and RD just hanging out and becoming good friends before everything goes downhill could be interesting}, but most of the time it's used badly.
However, it's your story, not mine. At the very least, maybe you should consider having the OC chapters be a separate series of one-shots instead of having them be in the main fic. And if it does help you come up with more ideas, then I can't completely oppose it. Still, you probably shouldn't spend too much time working on them. It would kind of suck if they ended up overtaking the main story.
5849499 I like filler. its feel like i world that is more than just a card board box with puppets.
I mean when i look at an anime if they make a steampunk world than show why its steampunk. don't just put a air ship with train parts show why the world it is and stuff like that.
and look at ace attory it got its lore down to ever min of the game not like other games that never ponit out what type of world your playing in.
5849524 This is true. Filler can be interesting and even entertaining. But sometimes too much of it pops up, especially with TV shows. Want an infamous anime example? The Bleach anime had so much damn filler {Several entire arcs of it, to be precise} in it that it eventually got cancelled because of the filler and before it could even get near the end of the part where the manga ended. And there's also Dragonball Z, which had so much filler that a new version {Dragon Ball Z Kai} was made specifically to cut the loads of filler out and make the pacing a lot better.
5849551 dude that's filler done wrong bleach was a good anime but for the love of god people if your going to make afiller on how the world work make a spin off of it you make more money out of it
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Name of OC: Jack lighting
Gender:male
race: Pegasus
hair color(s): Dark blue/white
eyes:Blood red
Occupation: Gamer/Jock/artist/ a martial artist and speedster with some nerd in there to .
Personality: a little shy and awkward but extremely brave when he wants to be (or has to). he sticks up for his friends in anyway he can. he's never liked his eyes because others ran from and picked on him for having them so what EVER you do don't talk about them when he's there. he comes off as extremely hard to read most the time, is a really big softy at heart and is overall nice guy(sometimes to nice) . there are very few who ever piss him off, those who do are the one's who harm his friends or use as a 'pawn',somepony's swear they see lighting arc right out his wings when he's fighting! he hates most bullies , he try's to be fair....but if he's mad he won't care. he love's music and flying ,hates fighting jarks. he really hate's fighting because of how often he get's into one, in fact he's been getting into fights since he was 6.
fighting style:bit of assassins creed and great reliance of speed.
he is a great gamer and likes to read, draw and even build plastic modules from scrap on he's free time .
how he got there: got kicked out of he's old school for fighting.
Reason for interaction: see's a commotion investigates and helps RD out.
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Gilda cannot resist when inspiration hits her...
dont mind me just pointing out the only error that i saw without trying to find errors
5819707 now ya tell me... i already got 87.37% of the game done... im at a loss for how to get the last 12.63%
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Scootaloo was being more aggressive because Dash was there
The preps would have been shocked if they saw Sweetie hanging out with Dash
Rarity can get a bit jealous when it comes to her sister, but then again, all sisters get jealous when they feel like they're getting replaced
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Thank you!
OC name: Ai Kido
female unicorn. How to adapt this will be your problem
Guard pony with creamish-yellow fur and a powder blue mane. She can be either offensive or defensive, but not both at the same time. Rather light and small and not the best with magic so uses hoof-to-hoof fighting styles that manipulate her opponent's momentum. Her magic can be used to create solid objects like a shin guard or a bokken. Will normally work to subdue or tire out her opponent, unless they threaten those she cares about and has the capability in which case she rages and the bokken sharpens and her intent changes to... you can guess what somepony would do with a sharpened sword.
A sardonic personalty, likes dark humor and will taunt others. Can be very forward not sure if bokukko.
My friend HaloEssence111 really likes this story, but can't access her account due to outside matters. She has asked me to do this for her, in case you were wondering.
Name of OC: Halo Essence
Gender: Female
Race: Unicorn
Age: 15
Look: click here (slight changes- low ponytail, tall, not much muscle)
Clique: Nerds
Personality: ♋(cancer) prying, thoughtful, introverted (except when you agitate her, then she will reveal secrets about you that even you weren't aware of) creative, loyal, can be impolite
Reason for interaction: Brief cameo with Twilight
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Prefect! Your character is a prefect! It has been decided!
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Roger that!
Welp, time to start this. I will give you a ding at the start for human ponies. I have never played bully either. Expect a review of a few chapters in the coming days. not evil enough but it will have to do
5838782 He's moves and Martial Arts Skills (my move and Martial Arts Skills in fantasy life), plus hit combo's, are references to Naruto (with Rock Lee's Axe Kick), The Boondocks (Huey fighting off one of The Hateocracy members at the school), and Sonic The Hedgehog (with he's speed, high jumps, and yes, the Homing Attack).
Note that when Rainbow did the up-ward kick is similar Rock Lee's, if you know what I mean. I can try and find some gif images to show you what I mean. IF I try too.
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5909944 You know I'm telling the truth. Listen, when the time comes, I'll find those Gif Images (And Possible Videos) and show them to you soon, so be ready, okay?