Gawd, i saw this on the front page and clicked on read it to see what it was... i didn't read it because it was a clop fic and i'm not into those. But just imagine, rarity in this series D:
It got worst better for Fluttershy as he moved his head away, to play with her [i[wings that were folded his entire time. His tongue running against the bones that were connected to her feathers, was making her extremely sensitive. Yet, Spike didn’t stop there; he was kissing and playing with the joint(s) that connected her wing(s) to her body. In reaction, her wings flapped and shook wildly from his touches. Especially with his lips ‘stroking’
In a clop fic can you tell when an author favors a character? Yes, yes you can. Now here I was presented with a rather beautiful idea... What if this Spike screwed all the mare? Yes that is a deep question; then this nasty piece of shit poped up. Do the others even know of Spike's other... debaucheries? The shits about to hit the fan people, all the mares think Spike is theirs, except Pinkie that is a okay with him being with any one, has Spike got medical cause one way or another he's going to need a hospital!!
Well...awesome chapter. You were right, I loved innocent Fluttershy. I also loved how thoroughly Spike rocked Fluttershys world, now she will always compare any stallion to the first time with Spike. Or, she could stay with Spike?
Now there is a little thing I wanted to mention: When will Spike ever use his tail? The bigger, purple, scaled one? After all, some of his mares would definitely enjoy a little extra attention from that, I think.
2437617 Bad pun is bad. I would suggest Rarity. I could only picture him using it in a fit of rage. Give it like five seconds to set in. Yes a fit of rage. Here Spike has been trying to woo Rarity for Celestia knows how long and it would then ultimately take him becoming a sexy beast, yeah you read that right, to actually get some. Seriously he would just use it a sense of humiliation. Rarity getting off by, literally, a tail would be very humiliating and the fandom seems to like a masochistic Rarity. I did think you were going to use the tail in this scene given by how you actually mentioned the specific part, then I thought would be really use that on Fluttershy, glad to say I wrong.
Fluttershy is best of the Mane Six, amazing chapter though I would be lying if I were to say it's quite hard to read this chapter with the paragraphs being so long Seriously though, you did amazing with this, Fluttershy was very much true to who she was, now it's only a matter of who Spike will chose (because I highly doubt they would want to share him) my bits is either on Twilight Sparkle, Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash though I would love to see him bucking Cheerlie
Geez, that sounds...inviting to favorite you. Ah, I'll think about that.
And what I really would like to see would be a chapter for the 'aftermath'. A meeting between the Mane 6, all talking totally in an awkward manner about their encounters with the purple dragon. I'm interested in how that would play out.
Of course it is. Why would I make a bad pun that wasn't bad?
But I see your point with Rarity. I think 'masochistic Rarity' is only enjoyable because she behaves so selfishly in most fics (and sometimes in the actual cartoon too). So, it is - somewhat - understandable why she should be punished. Like Pinkie Pie in this story actually, there just needs to be a reason to make Spike mad and let him 'get some tail' - even while using his own, like you suggested. Though, to be perfectly honest - Spike only really lost control around Twilight Sparkle, he was more and more in control with the others. So he would be in perfect control around Rarity, I guess? I think it would be funny for Rarity to hear all of the stories of her friends sexual encounters before deciding it would be 'okay' for him to make some dragon babies with her. And then the young drake feels himself unworthy so she actually needs to show how much she wants it? Would be a nice spin on the typical situation between the two of them.
It's funny, Twilight and Rainbow Dash are my favorite characters, but my favorite clop is Fluttershy. I just find her so damn attractive, both physically and her personality.
All hail the inevitable harem ending! Not sure how everyone will be, but Dash and Shy are way into Spike, I know Rarity's a given, and I kind of feel like Twilight and A.J. will fall for our young drake friend as well. Pinkie's a wild card, but she does complete the set
Well the last chapter will be wild- actually the two last chapters will be. Yes, I am doing an extra for reasons that will be explained when you read the next one.
A fair amount of typo/grammatical errors, but nothing that was serious enough to detract from the experience. I loved the scene with Cheerilee and the SpikexFluttershy relation was more then just awe-inspiring. It was believable. It was something i could see happening in a more adult-oriented version of the show.
I have one request. By the end of the chapter, Spike and Fluttershy are on her bed spooning. If they, or at least Fluttershy, fall asleep, I would really like for Spike to still be there when she wakes up. I just think that that would be nice.
That was god damn amazing!! Fluttershy is best pony, really attractive (), and you gave her the best chapter to date. Wonderful. Spike had better be there when she wakes up. Though Fluttershy is your favorite too, so I'm not too worried about it.
Can't believe how long I've put off reading this story. It's a really nice story with some great clop in it and some good kinky stuff. Hopefully, next chapter will have Rarity having her turn and Spike ultimately getting the entire Mane 6 to himself.
Edit (posted 5/4/13): I would hope that in the aftermath of this, something has occured: 1/ Spike begins to start going steady with one of the mane 6. We haven't seen Rarity yet, so for now, I want it to be Rainbow Dash (as far as the narrative goes), looks like Spike really rocked her world, I would be surprised that she starts to have more intimate feelings for the drake. Obviously it can changed based on what happens next. Fluttershy would be a great alternative. 2/ One or more of the mane 6 discovers, along with Spike, that ponies and dragons are compatible. For the lulz, it would be hilarious that Twilight is the one that's been inpregnated by Spike's dragon juice. How would Princess Celestia, the rest of her friends, hell even Shining Armor, take it when they discovered that their precious student and best friend is now pregnant thanks to her assistant?
Don't worry, Spike isn't gonna go anywhere after sex with Fluttershy. He was always there for each of the other mares in the afterglow with the pillow talk after the deed. The only reason Spike's not with Twilight at the beginning is that Twilight fainted when she came with Spike after fooling around and Spike tucked her in. And Applejack just went back to work after her "meeting" with Spike.
It got worse better for Fluttershy as he moved his head away, in order for him to play with her [i[wings, that were folded his entire time. His tongue running against the bone structures that were connected to her feathers, was where her extremely sensitive nerves were.
You missed this bit mate. Seems like a bit of improper HTML code was left in there. The bit before the word wings had an unfinished Italics code.
Gawd, i saw this on the front page and clicked on read it to see what it was... i didn't read it because it was a clop fic and i'm not into those. But just imagine, rarity in this series D:
Great chapter, I am most pleased.
Not sure if mistakes
Oh and get Spike to screw Cheerilee!
Scratch that. Fuck ALL the Mares!
Oh shy.... why are you always so darn cute, best one so far...
Amazing.
In a clop fic can you tell when an author favors a character? Yes, yes you can.
Now here I was presented with a rather beautiful idea... What if this Spike screwed all the mare? Yes that is a deep question; then this nasty piece of shit poped up. Do the others even know of Spike's other... debaucheries? The shits about to hit the fan people, all the mares think Spike is theirs, except Pinkie that is a okay with him being with any one, has Spike got medical cause one way or another he's going to need a hospital!!
Gawd damn Shy's cute as always.
Keep 'em coming, that is if you don't mind
I want to see Angel get his revenge. Please? Make him seriously muck up Spike's day, that'd be fun^^
2437129 Nah, Angel needed to go cool off and soak his head. :D
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With his mood swings, he's likely to EAT him out of annoyance.
Hootershy FTW!
I get the sense that Rarity is a MilbD.
Well...awesome chapter. You were right, I loved innocent Fluttershy. I also loved how thoroughly Spike rocked Fluttershys world, now she will always compare any stallion to the first time with Spike. Or, she could stay with Spike?
Now there is a little thing I wanted to mention: When will Spike ever use his tail? The bigger, purple, scaled one? After all, some of his mares would definitely enjoy a little extra attention from that, I think.
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or maybe they want 'group sessions' to take 'Harmony to the next level'?
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I've already been thinking of 'uses' for his tail, but I am thinking of saving that for FUTURE spin-offs with him~
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Bad pun is bad. I would suggest Rarity. I could only picture him using it in a fit of rage.
Give it like five seconds to set in.
Yes a fit of rage. Here Spike has been trying to woo Rarity for Celestia knows how long and it would then ultimately take him becoming a sexy beast, yeah you read that right, to actually get some. Seriously he would just use it a sense of humiliation. Rarity getting off by, literally, a tail would be very humiliating and the fandom seems to like a masochistic Rarity. I did think you were going to use the tail in this scene given by how you actually mentioned the specific part, then I thought would be really use that on Fluttershy, glad to say I wrong.
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i second this mans opinion h-h-hes a stand up guy.
YESA
Fluttershy is best of the Mane Six, amazing chapter though I would be lying if I were to say it's quite hard to read this chapter with the paragraphs being so long Seriously though, you did amazing with this, Fluttershy was very much true to who she was, now it's only a matter of who Spike will chose (because I highly doubt they would want to share him) my bits is either on Twilight Sparkle, Fluttershy or Rainbow Dash though I would love to see him bucking Cheerlie
I second everyone saying that Spike needs more mares.
Mainly because I want Trixie.
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Geez, that sounds...inviting to favorite you.
Ah, I'll think about that.
And what I really would like to see would be a chapter for the 'aftermath'. A meeting between the Mane 6, all talking totally in an awkward manner about their encounters with the purple dragon. I'm interested in how that would play out.
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Of course it is. Why would I make a bad pun that wasn't bad?
But I see your point with Rarity. I think 'masochistic Rarity' is only enjoyable because she behaves so selfishly in most fics (and sometimes in the actual cartoon too). So, it is - somewhat - understandable why she should be punished. Like Pinkie Pie in this story actually, there just needs to be a reason to make Spike mad and let him 'get some tail' - even while using his own, like you suggested.
Though, to be perfectly honest - Spike only really lost control around Twilight Sparkle, he was more and more in control with the others. So he would be in perfect control around Rarity, I guess?
I think it would be funny for Rarity to hear all of the stories of her friends sexual encounters before deciding it would be 'okay' for him to make some dragon babies with her. And then the young drake feels himself unworthy so she actually needs to show how much she wants it? Would be a nice spin on the typical situation between the two of them.
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Oh, I he'll keep 'em cumming alright
It's funny, Twilight and Rainbow Dash are my favorite characters, but my favorite clop is Fluttershy. I just find her so damn attractive, both physically and her personality.
All hail the inevitable harem ending! Not sure how everyone will be, but Dash and Shy are way into Spike, I know Rarity's a given, and I kind of feel like Twilight and A.J. will fall for our young drake friend as well. Pinkie's a wild card, but she does complete the set
Loved Pink devil and this chapter :3
from the hyper-active hot sex(and toy play), to consensual love-making
ahhh yiss
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Well the last chapter will be wild- actually the two last chapters will be. Yes, I am doing an extra for reasons that will be explained when you read the next one.
A fair amount of typo/grammatical errors, but nothing that was serious enough to detract from the experience. I loved the scene with Cheerilee and the SpikexFluttershy relation was more then just awe-inspiring. It was believable. It was something i could see happening in a more adult-oriented version of the show.
Another most excellent chapter.
2441343 You've improved a lot over the course of the story. I can't wait to see it all reach its climax, and you're not helping with the teasing
I have one request. By the end of the chapter, Spike and Fluttershy are on her bed spooning. If they, or at least Fluttershy, fall asleep, I would really like for Spike to still be there when she wakes up. I just think that that would be nice.
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Dragon You Over much?
how did i know this was going to have spike in it?
2442709 How you can compare that piece of shit with this? Shame on you..
"What is it Angel........oh she's in heat....Ah horseapples...."
Me thinks Celestia has been getting more than a bit of an eyeful...
spike is going to tear rarity's pussy up
That was god damn amazing!! Fluttershy is best pony, really attractive (), and you gave her the best chapter to date. Wonderful.
Spike had better be there when she wakes up. Though Fluttershy is your favorite too, so I'm not too worried about it.
Can't believe how long I've put off reading this story. It's a really nice story with some great clop in it and some good kinky stuff. Hopefully, next chapter will have Rarity having her turn and Spike ultimately getting the entire Mane 6 to himself.
SWAG
or even better, SWAMI
Spike Wins All Mares, Indeed!
Edit (posted 5/4/13): I would hope that in the aftermath of this, something has occured:
1/ Spike begins to start going steady with one of the mane 6. We haven't seen Rarity yet, so for now, I want it to be Rainbow Dash (as far as the narrative goes), looks like Spike really rocked her world, I would be surprised that she starts to have more intimate feelings for the drake. Obviously it can changed based on what happens next. Fluttershy would be a great alternative.
2/ One or more of the mane 6 discovers, along with Spike, that ponies and dragons are compatible. For the lulz, it would be hilarious that Twilight is the one that's been inpregnated by Spike's dragon juice. How would Princess Celestia, the rest of her friends, hell even Shining Armor, take it when they discovered that their precious student and best friend is now pregnant thanks to her assistant?
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Don't worry, Spike isn't gonna go anywhere after sex with Fluttershy. He was always there for each of the other mares in the afterglow with the pillow talk after the deed. The only reason Spike's not with Twilight at the beginning is that Twilight fainted when she came with Spike after fooling around and Spike tucked her in. And Applejack just went back to work after her "meeting" with Spike.
Now, on to Rarity!!! And then, the aftermath!!
This was awesome! And you did miss quite a few all towards the end. Mainly in the paragraph with
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It got worse better for Fluttershy as he moved his head away, in order for him to play with her [i[wings, that were folded his entire time. His tongue running against the bone structures that were connected to her feathers, was where her extremely sensitive nerves were.
You missed this bit mate. Seems like a bit of improper HTML code was left in there. The bit before the word wings had an unfinished Italics code.
“Am I too big for you?” I don't care what you say that is a cocky statement.
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I'm so mature.
--SYA, The Horse
Angel deserved that swim. I hate that devil of a rabbit.