Deleted and unused scenes from Chapter 5
<alternate scene from end of the chapter 5 “Chapter 1”>
Hey Lord Discord.” Twilight sang behind him.
Instinctively he turned around.
Discord jaw dropped to the floor; no really it stretched from his face to the stone slabs.
Twilight had turned her back to him and raised her tail in the air. She lowered her self onto her front knees and looked back at him with the glasses on.
The panties were still on.
“Could you assist me with these?” She wiggled her hind quarters “I’ve never worn them before,” Twilight said in an innocent voice.
Discord, literally, picked his jaw up off the ground and turned around as Twilight burst into laughter.
After realigning his jaw Discord glared at her over his shoulder as he growled; after a moment though his expression perked up.
“Twilight?”
The Princess was still laughing when she heard the familiar voice of her assistant Spike. She looked over at the basket, her spell gone. Discord was standing behind him waving his fingers at her before teleporting away.
Spike started rubbing his eyes as he yawned. “Those are some strange shorts, Twilight. Could you take them off they’re making me feel funny.”
<end scene>
<just a scene that will never be used>
The distinct sound of auguring could be heard making its way down the hall. Guards straighten their poster, maids and servants rushed to be out of view as the voices could be recognized as Princess Twilight Sparkle and her advisor Lord Discord.
“The ponies pushing against our southern border are having water issues and your solution is having nets high in the air to catch water?” Twilights voice was drowning in disbelief.
By now the strange couple could be seen heading down the hall to the rooms of Luna and Celestia.
“Bingo!”
“But that, are you, there is, wha ho. You can’t even catch water out of a river with a net!” she yelled at him after she recovered from the confusion he caused.
“Twilight my dear,” he said, eyes closed finger raised, “A princess shouldn’t yell.”
Twilight groaned normally she would have reacted scornfully to his teasing, but she has come used to his ways years ago.
“You asked what I would do, and I answered, far be it my fault if you don’t understand the answer.”
“If I ever grew to understand you I don’t think you’d be Discord anymore” Twilight smirked at her own joke.
“Or you would be just as chaotic as me.” Discord open his mouth in a smile that bared his fangs menacingly while his claws were stretch out towards the princess. “That, I would love to see” he reared back and started his evil as Twilight stared at him with a deadpan look on her face.
The two stopped at the double doors to Celestia’s room.
“I swear I'm going to make that laugh illegal.” The lavender princesses threaten. “Don’t just open the do-!”
The spirit opened the door to a scene of the two princesses with their guards sitting at a round table playing cards.
“ha! Royal flush! Pony up boys you to Luna!”
Suddenly the lunar and solar guards each placed a portion of their uniforms in the middle of the table while Luna slid off some of her jewelry, a faint blush in her face.
Discord suddenly conjured a soap bar in each hand and stabbed them into his eyes, he then calmly closed the door and walked away without a sound with the soap bars sticking out of his eye sockets. Twilight was left behind staring at a closed door, unable to move.
<end scene>
<deleted scene>
“My faithful guardians, tell us all you know about panties.”
The two Lunar Guard looked at each other unsure what to say.
One of the guard decided to answer honestly “Well princess underwear is used for hmbga.” His college shoved his hoof into his mouth, giving Luna a sheepish smile.
<end scene>
<deleted scene: Luna visits Celestia, upset that no one would give her an answer about panties>
“Dear sister, what’s wrong?” Celestia asked Luna as she escorted her into her room.
“No one will speak to us about panties.” Luna’s voice broke; she was on the verge of tears. “Are we not worthy of such undergarments?”
Celestia gave her a heavy sigh.
“Follow me Luna.” Celestia headed to her closet.
Her closet was a massive room nearly the size of her main chambers. Outfits of my type hung from racks. Jewels aplenty were locked in glass cases. Mannequins of Celestia’s body type were adorn with unique dresses. Even small safes were attached to the far end of the room.
On the very far end of the room a single large draw sat embedded into the wall. Celestia walked right up to and slid her horn into a slot above the draw. A magical click could be heard. The draw glowed yellow and a disembodied voice spoke
“Password?”
“Luna of my heart.”
“Stand still for retinal scan.”
A yellow light shot out and enveloped Celestia’s eyes.
After a moment the light receded and the draw opened up. Inside were pairs of underwear in the hundreds. Different shapes, types, and colors all folded neatly and displayed evenly.
“I have some explaining to do” Celestia told her sister.
<few moments later>
“Well, we feel glad that our sister can still pull a good joke on us. It reminds us of when we were young. But I must ask.” Luna looked over at the rack of hanging clothes. “Why do you have a nurse’s uniform?”
“Um...”
<end scene>
Maybe you could do what a lot of authors of longer works do and publish a seperate anthology of side stories and extra Scenes.
5066768 I might just do that.
5066769 I know the feeling man. :c
"Did you hear that Napa?"
"Yeah! We're gonna get panties!"
5066899 Amen
Luna in panties.* Drools*
5069832
your welcome, and thank you for looking into it.
I'm confident it would be a strong overall improvement. But, In the end if you truly feel that it doesn't look right after spacing things out. I won't hold it against you.
5069716 Only guy/lackey I can recall with that name, heh :)
5066822 That made me laugh my friend, that made me laugh.
5070782 No it's not your fault. Just ignore me
5071044 true but forced love is not love
5071044 your right it's not going to stop him if it did it wouldn't be much of a story.
5071013 I don't ignore people we all want to be recognized by some one
5071698 Thanks for your kindness but I'll be fine. I don't want one of my favourite authors to be worried.
5072761 not worried just responsive
Add some ellipsis.
laughter
It's quite interesting to know that you and Celestia have the same taste in clothes.
Please accept my condolences on your left shoe, but I am strongly recommending you to review the text as it have some punctuation errors. Also, do something with text formation, it feels... wrong.
P.S. I really enjoyed your story and aside from some grammar issues it's a very decent thing. I taught my ass off. Beside that, you're one of the few who noticed that discord is similar to the Chinese dragon. Take my respect.
5075748 (^_^)7