“Make it faster gramps! I’m not letting Red get the jump on a new area for Pokémon capturing. Oh and to ensure he’s safe of course.” Oak was building a new Pass, hoping to try and find a way to get into contact with Red. He had been halfway through it until his grandson Blue had come in and made him jump, causing him to have to start over.
“I am doing it as fast as I can; just make sure you give that phone to Red.” Blue rolled his eyes; Red would not be getting one up on him.
“I doubt that mute idiot can get far without me standing in front so he has a shadow to stand in.” Oak ignored his grandson, and continued building the second Pass.
“Hat? Viser? Frisbee?” spoke a voice nearby, Red ignored it.
“None of these are working; ok fine I’ll try it. Red, is anypony in there?” Red opened his eyes, meeting the face of the purple one who jumped back as his normal gaze scared her. Only a few minutes had passed since he had closed his eyes. Red carefully sat up, careful not to disturb the sleeping Pokémon, turning his gaze back to the group. The five Ponytas were mulling around, there if Twilight needed them. Lyra stood nearby, and the legendary Pokémon was over to the side.
“Um Twilight, I really need to go, I’ve got a train to catch if I want to make it to Canterlot by morning…” This Rapida was white, but had purple hair and looked uncomfortable. The legendary Rapidash with wings glanced to the white Rapida, and gave a gentle smile.
“I can give you a lift if you like.” The white Rapida spluttered a thanks to the legendary. Twilight rolled her eyes, turning back to him. Meerly blinking in response, he earned a frustrated look from the purple one.
“So you name is Red?” Red gave a single nod, and turned to glance to the sky, more importantly the stars. Twilight and Lyra followed his gaze, glanced back at him and followed it again, once again confused.
“Twilight, you said something about him being a threat?” Twilight turned to the legendary Rapidash with wings.
“Well, he is but in a non-threatening way?” Twilight glanced to him, confused. The legendary one sighed, and walked forward, leaning her head down to gaze at him better. Red’s Rapidash stirred, and he glanced down at it, before returning his eyes to the legendary.
“Has he done any damage?” Twilight opened her mouth to reply, closed it and actually thought about the question.
“Well, he tried to trap me in some weird ball but other than my hair getting ruffled it didn’t leave me with any everlasting effects. But he did bring out this huge monster and almost attacked me with it.” Red glanced to Lyra, who was glancing between him and that Twilight Pokémon, debating who to support.
“Twilight, I believe we should give this human the benefit of the doubt before doing anything to him. I will return in a week, however if you contact me by a letter I can arrive within five minutes.” Twilight gasped, her hoof coming up in her surprise.
“But Celestia!” The legendary flared her wings, light seeming to radiate out of nowhere, and Twilight lowered her head, and Celestia spoke gently as she folded her wings, the light fading once more.
“Besides, I’m sure Twilight sparkle can handle one human.” Twilight submitted to Celestia, and Red simply gazed on the scene. The white Rapida from earlier stood up, and walked over to the Celestia Pokémon, who’s horn began to glow. Twilight waved the two goodbye as Celestia teleported, and then turned back to him.
Lyra interrupted, “can we go to my house now?” Twilight blinked, and gave a small sheepish smile. Red stood up, brushing himself off and gently waking his two Pokémon from their slumber. They grumbled, but stood up and all three waited for Lyra to lead them where they were going. Lyra grinned, and motioned for him to follow. Red did as instructed; leaving the other six Ponyta’s to stand there in the slowly darkening street.
“So here it is; my humble home.” Lyra had stopped in front of a house in the street as they walked down. After opening the door, Red bent down and stooped low so to fit through the door, he then glanced to his Pokémon, who looked indoors before finding a patch of the garden outside to rest for the night. Red glanced outside, waiting until they were comfortable before returning his head inside.
“Well ah, that’s the lounge room, kitchens through there. The bathroom and beds are upstairs. And that’s about it. Make yourself comfortable I’ll go set up your room for the night.” Red watched Lyra trot up the wooden stairs, and gazed at the light blue walls and wooden floor before heading towards the lounge room and gazing around it. It was decently furnished, a couch and some books along with a small table. The kitchen was white instead of the same colour the other two rooms were in.
“It’s not much bit its home” Lyra spoke from behind him, he turned to face her. She smiled, glancing left and right nervously. Red could sense a question coming.
“So uhm, do you mind if I ask you a favour?” Red didn’t answer, knowing she would continue talking. Lyra glanced downward and then gazed at him beggingly.
“I’ve never seen a human before and I was wondering if I could see what, well what hands are like…” Red watched her face turn to the floor, expecting him to say no. Raising her eyes, she saw him gazing at her, and the ever solid nod that accompanied his yeses follow. Her eyes sparkled with happiness, and she gently grabbed his hand and began going up and down it, taking in the different features of hands. After a few moments she released his hand, and sighed in fulfilment.
“Thanks, I didn’t think I’d live to see one.” As Lyra fell silent, Red stifled a yawn and glanced out the window on one side of the wall in the lounge room to the night outside. Lyra took the hint, and started walking toward the staircase.
“Oh silly me, you must be exhausted. Let me show you to your room.” Walking up the stairs slowly so as not to trip over the fact they were smaller than normal stairs, he followed Lyra up and around the banister and past a corridor that led to an open door where a very strange toilet stood. One room had a closed door, and as they passed that they came to a second room, made up of a simple bed and a small table with a lamp on it. Red coughed as Lyra opened a window, and a breeze blew the dust around the room.
“Sorry about the dust, I haven’t had guests in a while. It’s normally only Bon Bon and she never stays the night.” Red walked over to the window, and gazed across the landscape, taking in how the world stayed bright, even when shrouded in darkness.
“Beautiful isn’t it, the night?” Lyra glanced to him, and he gave a single nod. Lyra glanced away, and walked away from the window, heading for the door.
“I’ll see you in the morning, goodnight…Red.” Red turned his head to see her close the door. After a moment, he headed to the bed and sat down, before moving into a sleeping position. The bed was far too short for him however, and after a few minutes of trying to get comfortable he sat up and yawned once more. Standing up he walked out of his room and down the stairs to the garden where his Pokémon slept. Closing the door behind him as he left the house, he went and joined his Pokémon in their slumber under the stars, missing a mint green shape peering at him from her window.
“Red wake up, we’ve got big problems!” Red’s eyed opened, meeting the gaze of Lyra who blinked once as she began dragging him to a crouch before he finally stood up straight, and stretched. Ponyta and Rapidash stood up too, getting ready for the new day. Red glanced to the sky, seeing it was only shortly after dawn. The next thing he noticed was the fire spreading around town in the form of flaming projectiles.
“Twilight’s fighting a pack of fire-breathing Chimera at the edge of the Everfree. They tried to attack Fluttershy.” Red turned his gaze on Lyra, and then turned to Rapidash who bent down and let him onto her back. Within moments they were running through the village. Those who weren’t fleeing in panic could only blink as a fiery blur passed with some kind of creature deposited on its back. They arrived quickly, and Red quickly summarised the scene.
“…” Red jumped off Rapidash, who moved to the side as he took in the pack of creatures attacking the Pokémon Twilight. Red noted how each over her four friends took turns to take on the beasts.
“Without Rarity we can’t use the elements Twi, we’re losing here!” Red glanced to the orange Ponyta who talked, and saw her slip and fall. Red saw time slow down, his Pokéball flying into the air at the exact moment the chimera began to make flames. Twilight was too busy fighting to do more than merely widen her eyes as her friend was in the line of fire, literally. The ball flew true, and a red light flew out of it, it coming to a stop mid air. The shape formed, a bright flash of red light gaining all eyes on the shape that formed in front of the orange Ponyta, soaking the fire like it was water.
“Blastoise” spoke the Pokémon, all eyes turned to the Pokéball as it flew back to his hand, where he returned it to its slot. Blastoise didn’t waste time opening its mouth and firing an explosive amount of water right in the face of the chimera, sending it flying over the forest. It glanced to Red, and Red held up one single finger, and Blastoise nodded. Suddenly the air filled with moisture, and suddenly a wall of water began to rise, separating the Ponyta’s from the chimeras as the wind whipped up, and blowing Red’s hair. The chimeras tried to breach the water with flame, but they were fighting a losing battle.
Blastoise used Surf.
Its super effective
“Blastoise!” Suddenly the water folded in on itself, and a wave formed, pushing the chimeras into the forest, by at least a few miles. Blastoise walked over to his trainer, who simply gazed up at his Pokémon, and gave a single nod. Pulling out his Pokéball, Blastoise returned to his ball, and Red finally noticed the agape mouths of nearly every Ponyta and Rapidash hybrid. Red merely blinked, and turned and headed back towards Lyra’s house, a shocked mint green Rapida following meekly behind him.
That Made Me Laugh.
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Well It made sense, considering this is based off the games :P
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Never Thought I Would See The Day It Was Used In A Story.
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It's telling, not showing so yeah it wouldn't be used normally. It seemed right.
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All I Can Say Now Is Good Job And Keep Up The Good Work.
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? What's wrong?
gary motherfucking oak (aka blue) is coming this is going to be fun
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Gary will burn.
2306387 absolutely nothing but pure badassness
CHOO CHOO, ALL ABOARD THE BANDWAGON, NEXT STOP, POKEMON.
Sorry, couldn't resist. Good lord, all these Pokemon stories.
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Considering I started with a generic changeling story, I'm entitled to jump on whatever bandwagon I please
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I started with a rather generic TwiLuna, so I can't really say much myself. Just been Y to the Nth degree of Pokemon stories lately with Z of them being featured. It seems like yours is well written, plus I liked the concept of your 'Twi Alicorn Filly' story, so not really poking at you, moreso the fact that everyone seems to be doing them as the current 'in' thing. Better than Red Thrush clones though. Those are soooo horrible.
This is fucking great. One thing that keeps confusing me though is when he says Lyra is blue. Cyan is a shade of blue, right? Lyra is green though. Sorry, that was just bugging me.
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Really? I guess that's why I failed art class
Fitting Song Time (I can't believe nobody posted this yet....I'm surprised)
oh and I was thinking....since 1/3 of the pony population (or so I think) consists of flyers.....Pikachu would have a field day
Oh and grats for Featured btw
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I just have so many story ideas, and the hard part is choosing what ones to write. I can only juggle so many stories, SHOULD only juggle so many stories. It's just nice having a range to write, if I'm feeling comedic, or dark, or well...bad ass like in this fic.
It's hard because these 'bouts of feeling' change from day to day, week to week.
So I feel a little bad for favouring one story over the other, but if I don't write the story in the right mood(music can only go so far) then it doesn't turn out right. I guess it's a case of I know myself, and it's a war with what I should do, and what I want to do.
Kinda like global warming for example. I should just turn the computer off, find a less energy consumptive task, but I want to be on the computer.
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Lol, yeah. I've got a document with a bunch of ideas, as well as something like 5 or 6 GDoc files with a page or two written in them, or outlines. Hell, I had one idea hit me over the head last week and I've got ~13,000 words of text with no title and no good description either. Fun stuff.
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yep, the brain is very demanding if the writer ignores it.
Ignoring leads to writer blocks as revenge, BEWARE
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I didn't see the grammar mistake, but then again I've never been good with english, despite it being my language.
Reading it through a few times, it is worded a little strangely, but
Grammar isn't my strong point, but I'm slowly getting better. Check out Fracturing Reality, you'll see a definite improvement.
So yeah, I suck at grammar, anything else?
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but you must!
Nah sleep well.
Decent idea. Seems a little rushed, but there is nothing I can do, for it is all on the author.
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Rushed?
: yeah I guess so
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Aye, rushed. It didn't take long at all for Red to get "accepted" into the pony community. Now, my assumption is based off of the initial reactions: Lyra freaking out and Celestia being okay with this. Try to have most of the ponies wary of his presence.
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I'm too tired right now to think of this, I'll think about it in the mornin.
Finally a story that uses Pokemon that I actually know! I stopped playing after Emerald, so i have no clue about the newer ones.
2306406 Kill him with fire good sir. Kill him with fire. He deserves it for the pain he put me through in Leafgreen.
2306483 damn that song is fitting
Looking forward to when Red uses his other pokemon in battle
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I Dub Thee,Sir 'Cons-A-Lot
Red Better Paint The Town Red With Bad-Assery.
....... Lyra is green, not cyan. Seafoam green technically. If you want cyan, look at Rainbow Dash.
Also, I sense a translator incoming. And are you using his Mount Silver team plus ponyta and rapid ash?
Short chapters are short...
...Screw it. I'm gonna take 3 months to write up a lengthy Pokemon Crossover plot so it'll have 30+ chapters with 12k words each.
Eh, a very good fic (already faved it), but kinda confusing with all the "*color* Ponyta/Rapidash/Winges Ponyta". Also, minor grammar mistakes. Keep it up, this fic looks badass.
Twilight: But, Princess Celestia! It's a thing! And it's weird!
This reaction keeps happening throughout crossover stories, but I suppose unless certain situations occur, it's the only suitable one...
Also, because I don't really know my colors and keep getting proven wrong, I'm going to go with what I remember I keep getting told and assume cyan is some sort of a blue. Is that Rainbow Dash? Please tell me it's not Rainbow Dash. I mean, I suppose you'll have to have her in this story, but please don't tell me she's the second focus of the story (although that seems highly unlikely already).
I just...
Her brashness, assumptions, mischeif, and just generally most of her character traits except for her loyalty really frikkin' grate my nerves...
That said, I like how you show Red's power. His pokemon's power. It's overpowered and in this scenario I liked it. I'm not being sarcastic, this is one of the few times when I'll accept a show of power in a crossover story. I assume that, to balance this out, he'll have the unfortunate circumstances of being unable to access the pokemon that didn't come with him? Also, I hope Gary burns. Not as much as Rainbow Dash, but still.
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You forget one very important detail about pegasi, they work with the weather. It would be silly if they weren't resistant to electricity, they would die all the time if not. Personally I think Pikachu would have a hard time with them.
But*
Don't use the same adjective or verb twice in the same or consecutive sentences. One "suddenly" will suffice.
Favourited it for the idea. I guess I'll start reading it now.
Interesting story, but i find it a bit strange that the Ponys ignored a HUGE Rapidash with flames instead of a mane, one would Think that they would find that a bit strange, i did however REALLY like how true you were to Red's non existent personality and made him a mute.
That aside i liked this fic, keep it up!
Interesting idea, will surely read later.
One thing, in the Gold and Silver games, especially the remakes, you can battle Red at the top of the Mountain. When you talk to him, this is what he says just before battle starts.
"..."
2307664 unless this has been edited since you posted that, they did react.
2304348 Comic Red does talk. He's also an incalculable badass, *AND* he picked Bulbasaur as his starter!
I really don't think red is a mute... he just prefers action over words.
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But Red has a Blastoise, and I don't think a Ponyta and Rapidash would be good enough. Unless you planned on giving him his Charizard, or Celestia smites Blue for his misgivings before Red does it.
2308033 Blue has a Blastoise
Red has a Venasour
Green has a Charazard
2308248 You spelled two of those names wrong.
ಠ_ಠ
2308248 Is that from the manga? Anyways, the idea of Red having a grass starter doesn't seem... right. I suppose I have seen too much pokemon fan art.
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If you make it Mystery Dungeon related, you win.
IN THAT CASE, I'LL CHOOSE SQUIRTLE!
Ok i gotta ask. Will any of our other silent protagonists of the series show up? Maybe Wes from Pokemon Colosseum, or Gold from Gold/Silver/Crystal ?
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The thing is,I'm using fannon Lyra to an extent, s of course she'd be delighted to see a human. As for Celestia, we'll see. But I guess I could have paced it more.
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Damnit
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The cyan one is Lyra, I'm going to go through and edit that when I wake up a bit.
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Thank you
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I was kinda telling it more from Red's Pov, but you have a point.
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HAVE MY BABIE-er I mean yes please
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Yeah, but I'm using GAME Red
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Well in my version he is.
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Stop stealing my ideas! (Nah I kid)
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I wasn't planing on it, but I'll consider it.
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Because it's a bad place bad ponies go?