Fluttershy couldn’t believe it, she was going to Canterlot again, she finally would be able to apologize to the animals in the garden, sure she knew what she did was very wrong, but she wanted to say sorry, with Luna, her new friend, she was excited, it was a long time since she'd been to Canterlot and it’s beautiful gardens, rare specimens of birds and monkeys, but she wasn’t only going to see the animals, she was going because she felt safe, she was safe with her new friend, she was about to remove her sweater but Luna interrupted her.
“I guess you should keep the sweater, Fluttershy.” Luna giggled, she could see her friend confused after all, but she opened the window to let her see why she should keep the sweater, Luna put a hoof outside, and pulled it back in, and showed it to her.
“I… um… don’t understand…” Fluttershy said in confusion, what was Luna trying to show her? Did she get hurt? She was a goddess, she must be strong… but… what if she hurt herself and she needed medical assis…
“Look closely, silly.” Luna laughed and her friend looked a little closer to Luna’s hoof, it was a little snowflake, winter is already here.
“Oh…” Fluttershy blushed and continued. “It’s going to get cold soon, I guess I should pick up my socks…” she said before she took flight to her bedroom, but stopped. “Um… Luna, I’ll bring you a pair.” She smiled sheepishly and went upstairs.
“I’m okay, no need for that.” Luna grinned, she didn’t need to bother about her hoofs, she was quite used to the cold night, she felt a shiver down her spine, the cold air coming from outside was too cold, she could think about it, she felt another shiver, this time her best friend could see she was cold.
“Please… I insist.” She smiled weakly. “I don’t want to see you get a cold, besides, your sister could be worried, so I’ll bring you a pair.” Fluttershy went upstairs
Luna was about to open her mouth but she stopped and smiled. “She is so nice to me… I’m so lucky I found Fluttershy… And to think I just was searching for a pony who enjoyed my nights…” Luna was waiting in the living room; she could see a little rabbit was staring at her suspiciously. “Well Angel, I hope it’s okay with you if I can take your owner with me sometimes, If… that’s okay with you.” Luna smiled weakly.
The rabbit jumped on her back, she was surprised, she didn’t knew he was so fast, she thought for a moment he would hurt her, but the little bunny only hugged her. Luna was confused, sure she saw the later nights the bunny staring angrily at her, but he was… happy?
“Here, It took some while, but I found it.” Fluttershy flew down, still in her sweater, with her green socks to match with her new sweater. “I also brought you my yellow socks for you to use, um… if that is okay.” She hid herself in her mane, “Oh! I see you and Angel are doing just fine, he doesn’t act like that, he is… um… quite… rude with some of my friends sometimes.” She grinned, was Angel feeling happy with another pony? That was surely new to her.
Angel only gave her an angry look. And went upstairs.
Fluttershy looked down and her mane was again covering her face. “Did I say something wrong?”
Luna was beginning to get used to her friend hiding herself behind her own mane, she found it cute. “Well… I think its better we get going, the snow will get more intense” Luna began to flap her wings, and saw Fluttershy smiling. “I think I forgot the socks.” Luna sheepishly smiled back to her friend.
“It’s okay.” She said as she began to flap her wings too. “Let’s get going?” she smiled warmly to Luna.
The two mares flew off from the cottage towards Canterlot, If they don’t hurry the snow would intensify. The two didn’t care about that, they were together, that was the most important thing. The two were flying slowly, Luna knew clearly that her friend was afraid of heights, she could see it on her face.
“You don’t need to be afraid, if something happens I will grab you.” Luna smiled cheerfully to her friend.
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Back at the cottage, Angel found himself smiling, sure his owner had left himself alone in the cottage to take care of the animals, it was quite a challenge, but anything to make his owner feel happy, that new friend of her was taking good care of her, he really hoped it continued that way, he smiled once more as he saw the two mares flying.
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“How much time couldn't you fly for?” Luna asked her friend who was a little slow on the track. She didn’t want to hurry things up, but Fluttershy just seemed graceful flying slowly.
“Um… 7 months…” she was breathing a little hard, the cold air was hurting her lungs. “Can we rest a moment?” she asked gently, it had indeed been a long time since she had flown, but she was doing okay.
“Of course. It will be good for us to take a good rest.” She smiled warmly to her friend.
“Thank you.” Fluttershy said as they slowly made their way to the closest cloud to catch some air, she was not used to flying, but she was so less experienced in flying in cold weathers. It hurt a little bit, she just had to get some practice.
Suddenly, the two mares saw a trace of rainbow going towards them, it was looking like it was going to hit them, it slowed down and began to take the form of a pony, the pony was cyan with purple eyes and a rainbow-colored mane.
“Hey Fluttershy, I didn’t see you yesterday, what happened? I thought you were going to the show of DJ-Pon…..” Rainbow Dash was paralyzed as she saw Fluttershy’s ‘new friend’ “P-Princess Luna?” she couldn’t believe it, she rubbed her eyes once again, yup, Princess Luna was still there.
“Shh Rainbow Dash, we don’t want to expose her.” Fluttershy spoke with worry in her voice.
“Oh, sorry. So… hehehe… good to see you, um… Well… I have some things to do… err… bye!” the cyan pony flew so fast she left another trail of rainbow behind her.
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“T—nee---- TALK.”
*CRASH*
“Rainbow Dash, I Hope you have a very good reason for breaking my window…” Twilight sighed. “again.” Paying for new windows of course was not good, but now with the winter coming up with a window broken, it was very bad.
“No time for that.” Rainbow Dash interrupted her friend. “It’s about Fluttershy, there is something going on.” She finished, she was worried about her friend becoming… evil?
Twilight only sighed. “What about her?” she asked curiously, it was indeed quite strange, she hadn't seen Fluttershy these last few days, it was quite concerning.
“Well… she has a new friend.” She replied, “And…” she paused for a moment
“And?” she said as she picked up a good hot cup of tea that spike made and began to drink it.
“It’s Princess Luna!” Rainbow Dash yelled.
Twilight spit the tea all over the floor. “PRINCESS LUNA?!” she asked in disbelief. “How do you know that?” she asked her friend, now she wanted to know what was going on.
“Well… I was flying nearby and I saw Fluttershy flying with the Princess! Since when were they friends? And since when did they hang out?” she asked in a loud voice.
*Cling*
“Hello Rainbow Dash, hello Twilight… uh…” Rarity looked to the broken window and Rainbow Dash on top of Twilight. “What is going on here?” She raised her eyebrow in confusion.
“I just crashed in, I was flying to fast, but I had to tell Twilight what is happening!” Rainbow Dash explained.
“Fluttershy met a new friend, and it’s Princess Luna, I can hardly believe it.” Twilight said to Rarity who was standing in front of the door.
Rarity only found herself doing a facehoof and let out a quick groan, how could her friends not know?
“Did… you know?” Rainbow Dash and Twilight asked Rarity in disbelief, how could she know when they didn’t? They were about to find out.
“Of course I knew. I mean, she IS my friend, and she tells me EVERYTHING.” She sighed; she couldn’t believe her friends didn’t know. “Why don’t you stop and talk with Fluttershy a while? Just because she's shy doesn't she can’t talk.” Rarity was feeling angry inside.
Rainbow Dash only nodded. “I guess I should talk with her more…” she scratched the back of her head.
“Of course you should.” Rarity only sighed. “Twilight, do you have a copy of that book still? I’m trying to make a present for Fluttershy, but I don’t know how to do it without the book.” Rarity said to Twilight
“Yes, it’s… here.” She lifted the book with the magic. “You already made a dress for all of us didn't you?” she wondered. “Why do you need this book anyway?” she asked again.
“I want to make something special.” She smiled and looked up. “She will use for a special occasion.” She smiled wider
“And it is?” Rainbow Dash asked curiously.
“Uh… nothing, nothing! Got to go, bye!” Rarity hurried back to her boutique as she closed the door of the library.
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“We’re almost there Fluttershy.” Luna said with a soft voice, she was enjoying the flight; she took a look at her friend and saw that she was too slow. “Are you ok?” she asked softly with a bit of worry in her voice.
“Yes… No… I mean… um…” she squeaked “I don’t know…” she closed her eyes.
“Let’s stop for a while?” she smiled to her friend. “We can rest a little again, and we can talk.” She smiled warmly to her. “Is everything alright Fluttershy?” she asked with concern.
The two mares landed on the nearby cloud. “I’m sorry, I didn’t mean to keep you waiting…” she said with a guilty tone, she was feeling sad, she didn’t want to upset Luna, she was near the Castle already. “I’m S…” she was interrupted.
“Sh… It’s okay, you don’t need to say sorry, I understand.” She smiled to her friend. “I understand you didn’t fly for months, when I returned to Equestria, I was scared of flying too.” She put a hoof on Fluttershy’s shoulder. “You just need somepony to be with you, so you can face your fears. Right?” she closed her eyes and smiled gracefully. “Celly helped me out when I was in need; I guess I could help you too.” She smiled wider; she loved to help her friend.
Fluttershy found herself smiling, Luna was being a great help to her, she wanted to stay like that forever, she’d never had such support like that, her heart was smiling on it’s own, she felt warm around Luna, she felt safe, she felt… love. Her eyes widened, did she really feel that way about the Princess? She is a goddess, she is her best friend, and how could she feel such feelings around the Princess of Moon and night? Fluttershy squeaked, she didn’t know what to do, maybe she could fly off and… no, Luna could easily catch her, what should she do?
“Everything ok?” Luna asked with worry in her voice. “Are you feeling cold? We’re almost there, we can make it, I mean… we can make it.” She smiled. “I know you can do it. And if you can’t, let me help you.” She put a hoof in Fluttershy’s shoulder.
“Um… I can do it… A hop a Skip and a Jump, right?” she laughed worryiedly. And she took a look, around her, she was, it was… “Too high.” She placed her forehooves on her face with fear. “I can’t do it.” She began to cry sofly. “I… I… can’t…” it was too embarrassing, what would Luna think about her?
“Shh… It’s okay if you can’t do it, here, climb up.” She said happily. She was willing to do anything for her friend, even transporting her. “Come on, I won't let you fall.” She smiled warmly
“B- But… I don’t know… you don’t have to do that.” She said softly and with fear.
“Here” Luna said as she landed on top of Fluttershy being careful not to hurt her. “Hold on to me.” She smiled warmly.
“L-Luna.” She began to talk but was interrupted again.
“You don’t want to stay on this cloud forever do you?” she giggled warmly to Fluttershy, she wanted to make her friend happy, and help her when she needed help, that’s why she loved friendship, she was happy because she could make a pony smile. She felt so safe around her, she didn’t feel that around any royal guards, even her sister, she felt something special for Fluttershy, she didn’t know why, but she felt her heart being gently carried away by little butterflies. And the only thing she saw was a yellow, pink maned pony close to her; she was feeling so… happy. She loved staying around Fluttershy, the talking, the fun they had together, she loved all the good times with her, she loved… “meep”
“Um, sorry.” Her friend blushed as she held her, she felt warm, Luna’s coat was furry and fluffy, she loved it.
“It’s… okay, I had my head in the clouds for a moment…” Luna giggled happily. “But we are in the clouds, aren’t we?” the two mares were giggling. “So… hold tight, I don’t want you to fall, but if you slide tell me, so we can stop by the nearest cloud. Okay?” she smiled warmly
“O-okay.” She smiled back as she held Luna tighter.
Luna began to flap her wings and soon she took flight, Fluttershy tried not to look down, they were too high in the sky, but she didn’t look down because she was staring at her friend smiling and flying at the same time, she could look at that smile forever, that beautiful smile, when she saw Luna smile she felt her heart go hotter and hotter, it was good, she felt so happy with Luna around her, she felt… alive, she slowly began to close her eyes, seeing Luna’s smile was the last thing she saw before drifting off to sleep.
Oh, I would love to hear if someone founded a error or wrong mispelling in the fanfic... thanks...
I found a few misspellings and errors in there. I can proof it if you want.
I want it
Wow, first paragraph is a HUGE run-on sentence. Fix them commas bro. So is the last one. You need to go back and fix this whole chapter...
I'm waiting for my editor... *sigh* this fanfic is all messed up... I don't know if I want to continue...
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Please continue. I'm really enjoying this so far. I can see that this chapter skipped the editor, but that's ok. Give it time for your editor to take a look first, even if it takes a few days. We're patient, we can wait.
Don't get down on yourself. Everybody needs practice to become good at something, especially when it's something as difficult as learning a new language. You're doing great here, keep it up!
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Ah, NO, Keep going. I want to see the end of this. And NEVER stop writing. It is an art that lets you express yourself, your ideas flow, and your skills shine. You just need to read it over 4 times or so and edit it yourself, find your mistakes and attack them. Then get friends to help you out before posting it. I rewrite whole paragraphs constantly, even as I'm just writing. You just need to practice, because writing will never be something one can perfect. Keep moving forward, NEVER give up. Or I'll be dissapointed, forrrrrrreeeeevvveeeerrrrrrrrrrrrrrr
10504 The sad thing is, I don't have anyone to help me out, I mean, I tried to get some help, but I couldn't, My Microsoft Word is in English-American Language, I myself rate this fanfic 'semi-good' I am in fact trying to correct the chapters, believe me, it could be a LOT of worse than it is, this fanfic is not being that good because I'm working all alone on it, I didn't even began to write Chapter 10, I feel like I have a big rock on my back and I have to walk with the rock in my back till' I finish this fanfic, I really wished to English be my first-language, sadly, it's not, so I'm doing with what I've got, you guys have all the right to judge this fanfic since is that you guys that are reading it, Also, I'm just following my dream, I've always wanted to write a book or something.
I guess I'll stop writing this fanfic (don't worry, I'll not delete it or stop writing next chapters) I'll just take a rest for a time, I don't know how long, my head is full of problems right now... Hope ya folks understand it, and thanks for all the support I got it so far, it was the main reason I didn't give up.
-Brazilian Brony
This is really good, I really enjoyed it.
11942 I know, if I had an editor, this could be fixed. :)
I'm done with this fanfic.
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I'm sorry Brony. I really wish we could have convinced you to keep going, but you need to do what is best for you. Send me a message if you ever decide to continue writing this, okay? Thank you.
12204 It's fine, maybe next month I continue... I just need some time to rest, I always dreamed about writing something... *sigh* I'm put this fanfic on Hiatus...
I like this fanfic too much for it to die, I'm a bit of a grammar wizz so if you need an editor lemme know.
14502 OF COURSE I WOULD SAY YES!
hit me up on the private box @_@
There's a lot of comments, and I didn't have much time, so I didn't read them all. I commented a few times on Chapter 1 before I knew that English wasn't your first language. I only read the first paragraph due to the grammatical errors, but I like Lunashy Fics a lot. I would love it if this story got edited/ revised so that it reads a little more smoothly. Thank you for writing.
Also, Planning on writing any Pinkie Dash?
Hello, I am loving this story! I hope you didn't quit on it ready D: I understand how hard it is to have English as a second language (from Mexico). I am seeing alot of knot spelling and grammatical errors. So I'm wondering if you still need an editor. I can help I guess, but only if you continue this, it's such a great story.
I'm working on my fanfic again
sorry about keep you guys waiting, I should be ashamed of myself...
Ah im glad to hear your continuing the story ^^ I have really enjoyed this story and hearing that your gonna continue make me happy ^_^ good luck, and im totally gonna watch this one ^^
The chapter 10 (that's going to be 9 because I put two chapters into one) is already in progress, it have words, when my editor finish editing the chapters, I'll pass 2 new chapters for him, I personally think the fanfic is going well... lol
“Well Angel, I hope it’s okay with you if I can take your owner with me sometimes, If… that’s okay with you.” Double Stating... Don't do that.